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Past Endeavours

A 5-7-5 Poem

11 total reviews 
Comment from Bill Schott
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This 5-7-5, Past Endeavors, has the right set up and brings the reader to remembrance of our strong and valiant foundation on which we go boldly forward.

 Comment Written 10-May-2020

reply by the author on 10-May-2020
    Thank you very much
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello my friend

Beautiful entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good syllable count. Lovely presentation. The lines connect grammatically and helps to flow. Well done.

 Comment Written 09-May-2020

reply by the author on 09-May-2020
    Thank you very much
Comment from zanya
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And we are always reminded of the victories of the past - an interesting angle on the troubles we presently endure - let's look back and see what we've accomplished - a lovely pic

 Comment Written 09-May-2020

reply by the author on 09-May-2020
    Thank you very much, and hopefully we can learn
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A poignant write and history does play a huge part in future decisions but nothing is set in stone and we continue to make the same mistakes over and over again, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-May-2020

reply by the author on 09-May-2020
    Thank you very much, and yes unfortunately we do
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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America has certainly overcome many obstacles throughout her history! ;) A great one for the contest, anon - thanx so much for sharing! ;) Best of luck at the polls! ;)

 Comment Written 09-May-2020

reply by the author on 09-May-2020
    Thank you very much
Comment from Lucy de Welles
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Nice photo/text compliment. Good structure. Relevant Idea. Reflects hope. Plain, simple statement. Nothing to suggest.
Thank you for the opportunity to review your poem
Well done!

 Comment Written 09-May-2020

reply by the author on 09-May-2020
    Thank you very much for your encouraging comments, much appreciated
Comment from Margaret Bednar
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How I adore that image, festivity caught mid-action. Your poem meets the 5-7-5 requirements and the message can't be argued with. These poems tend to bore me as they are often predictable and rely on pat phrases - yours almost does that - but I have a soft spot for history and historical places and I know how true this is. I'd love it if a great word could be replaced for "past history" - like "antiquity" but that isn't quite right either and it isn't my place to write your poem :) I'm giving you a five - but it is an "on the fence" 5 :)

 Comment Written 08-May-2020

reply by the author on 09-May-2020
    Yes one word would be wonderful, you have got me thinking now, thank you very much
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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You have made effective use of your seventeen syllables in this inspirational piece. Yes, all countries and individuals must learn from the past, recalling both the bad and the good.

 Comment Written 08-May-2020

reply by the author on 09-May-2020
    Thank you for these great comments, much appreciated
Comment from Ogden
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I like your optimistic outlook, and there probably is truth in your prediction.
(I don't know what to make of the photograph.
The phone is quite old, but apparently not old enough to be singled out as a major innovation. ??)
Ogden (Don)


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 Comment Written 08-May-2020

reply by the author on 08-May-2020
    Thank you and point taken, so have changed to another choice, much appreciated
reply by Ogden on 09-May-2020
    What do you think of Ben Franklin, or another innovative thinker?
Comment from Von S. Bourland
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So very true! I can't help but think of the song, "Where Have All the Flowers Gone?" If we don't learn from the past, we have no future.
Keep writing and keep safe!

 Comment Written 08-May-2020

reply by the author on 08-May-2020
    Than you and what a great song it is, your comments and six stars are very much appreciated