Love's Illumination
You color my world...12 total reviews
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
The first two lines work brilliantly and really give a descriptive and vivid picture. I really like the pause and the use of the ellipsis before rainbows, I think that adds a lot to the whole poem.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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The first two lines work brilliantly and really give a descriptive and vivid picture. I really like the pause and the use of the ellipsis before rainbows, I think that adds a lot to the whole poem.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you so very much!!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Touch is one of our greatest senses that releases a plethora of intense feelings and emotions. I like this and enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Touch is one of our greatest senses that releases a plethora of intense feelings and emotions. I like this and enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you so very much!!
Comment from Bill Schott
This fifteen-word story, Love's Illumination, brings a vivid image together with a cheery sentiment and will likely lead to a pot of gold at this rainbow's end.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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This fifteen-word story, Love's Illumination, brings a vivid image together with a cheery sentiment and will likely lead to a pot of gold at this rainbow's end.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you!!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Love can cover much in a life filled with troubles especially when there is a special someone there to put love's touch to distract us. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Love can cover much in a life filled with troubles especially when there is a special someone there to put love's touch to distract us. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much!! ;)
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is a winner. If that is the effect someone has on you, where the scene changes and all is like art surrounding you then go with it. That is definitely love.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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This is a winner. If that is the effect someone has on you, where the scene changes and all is like art surrounding you then go with it. That is definitely love.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from Anya Trofimova
This is such an unconventional twist in such a short piece of writing. I love the playfulness of the tone in this short poem. Just wondering if 'midst' is a little too... formal for this occasion. There is a delightful sense of playfulness in 'rainbows!' and 'Love you!' but 'midst' seems to be a little out of place. Well done on a great piece of work!
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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This is such an unconventional twist in such a short piece of writing. I love the playfulness of the tone in this short poem. Just wondering if 'midst' is a little too... formal for this occasion. There is a delightful sense of playfulness in 'rainbows!' and 'Love you!' but 'midst' seems to be a little out of place. Well done on a great piece of work!
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Having someone who cares about us in the midst of trouble and strife is always desired and those that paint us a bright picture, magical, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Having someone who cares about us in the midst of trouble and strife is always desired and those that paint us a bright picture, magical, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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The ones that can smooth over the storms or at least make us realize they will pass are the ones we keep... Thank you for your review!!
Comment from BeasPeas
This is very nice. How we handle the storms shows how successful the relationship is/will be. Anyone can get along when there's smooth sailing. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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This is very nice. How we handle the storms shows how successful the relationship is/will be. Anyone can get along when there's smooth sailing. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Oh, you are so right there!! Thank you for your review!!
Comment from Richard J
As romantic as it gets ... kudos and inspiring wishes for the contest win.
I love the whole thing: Imagery, artwork, message, beautiful presentation, and warmed heart. ; )
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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As romantic as it gets ... kudos and inspiring wishes for the contest win.
I love the whole thing: Imagery, artwork, message, beautiful presentation, and warmed heart. ; )
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Well, if there's someone that can put a smile on my face amidst all this chaos, Sir Richard, it would be you!! Haven't heard from you in a while and then you just burst in with all this starshine - wow!! Thank you for your review and your lovely comments... yes! I am actually smiling (even though I still have more YouTube lectures to do - ugh!)... ;) ;) :) :)
Hi, Sweet Yvonne : )
You've put a warm smile on my Saturday morning and sweetened my hot mug of Rooibus Chai juuust right ? ummm! ; )
Comment from DeboraDyess
This is a lovely love poem, one that anyone would feel honored to recieve. :) You did well !
There are no suggesitons to make it better - it's great, as is.
No errors.
Best in the contest!
Blessings and stay safe,
Deb
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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This is a lovely love poem, one that anyone would feel honored to recieve. :) You did well !
There are no suggesitons to make it better - it's great, as is.
No errors.
Best in the contest!
Blessings and stay safe,
Deb
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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So glad you enjoyed - thank you very much!
