Bond
a fifteen word love poem8 total reviews
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I really like the message conveyed in this. I like as you've so eloquently stated, block by block, slow, steady, is how the house of love will stand and be sturdy. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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I really like the message conveyed in this. I like as you've so eloquently stated, block by block, slow, steady, is how the house of love will stand and be sturdy. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Jeffrey
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
It takes more than one brick to make a holy bond. Using block is the right word for this poem. This is a good contest entry. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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It takes more than one brick to make a holy bond. Using block is the right word for this poem. This is a good contest entry. Best of luck!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you, t,RV
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You're quite welcome!
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
When it happens your whole body feels the tug and you just can't let go.
Your usually solid heart melts as you gaze into the eyes of each other. Love takes over, big time
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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When it happens your whole body feels the tug and you just can't let go.
Your usually solid heart melts as you gaze into the eyes of each other. Love takes over, big time
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Raffaelina, for giving this a look.
Comment from Anya Trofimova
This depiction of a loving relationship is incredibly interesting and unique. I like the way that the poem starts off as 'my' and then, through this process that you describe, becomes a 'we'.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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This depiction of a loving relationship is incredibly interesting and unique. I like the way that the poem starts off as 'my' and then, through this process that you describe, becomes a 'we'.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Anya, for your perceptive review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Your word count is indeed fifteen. Although your use of the word 'beatified' is a bit of a catch for many of your readers because, regardless of the actual definition, it has a much more widely recognized connotation with the Roman Catholic Church's process of canonization and intercession... (and, no, I'm not Catholic)... perhaps try something like
as we build our blessed bond
(blessed with 2 syllables) or even
as we build our blissful bond
to maintain your alliteration and not bring in 'other' thoughts besides the marriage bond.... :) Just a suggestion since it's a love poem contest...
Good luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Your word count is indeed fifteen. Although your use of the word 'beatified' is a bit of a catch for many of your readers because, regardless of the actual definition, it has a much more widely recognized connotation with the Roman Catholic Church's process of canonization and intercession... (and, no, I'm not Catholic)... perhaps try something like
as we build our blessed bond
(blessed with 2 syllables) or even
as we build our blissful bond
to maintain your alliteration and not bring in 'other' thoughts besides the marriage bond.... :) Just a suggestion since it's a love poem contest...
Good luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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I know you're right, especially since reviewers think I am misspelling and misusing beautify. I am sticking to my guns though, Y.M. I will remember you told me so though.
Comment from BeasPeas
I'm reading this poem as love being as the foundation for building a lifelong relationship and that's a good analogy. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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I'm reading this poem as love being as the foundation for building a lifelong relationship and that's a good analogy. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Marilyn.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
beatified (beautified, I think you mean)
A lovely 15 word love poem with an effective use of alliteration. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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beatified (beautified, I think you mean)
A lovely 15 word love poem with an effective use of alliteration. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Beatified is to make holy. I will put that in the notes.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Love is not always offered freely, it has to be earned, to make a bond of relation as we build our beatified bond so is our love stand relation; well said, well done.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Love is not always offered freely, it has to be earned, to make a bond of relation as we build our beatified bond so is our love stand relation; well said, well done.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you, ALD
