The Talk
Lowku Poem Contest Entry3 total reviews
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Writer, these kids nowadays don't go for that birds and bees stuff anymore, they go for the real pornographic terminology and they talk the language. And because of the availability to Facebook and all that other stuff everything is out in the open. As a matter of fact they may be able to teach us adults a thing or 2. You meant the guidelines for the contest though. Good job
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Writer, these kids nowadays don't go for that birds and bees stuff anymore, they go for the real pornographic terminology and they talk the language. And because of the availability to Facebook and all that other stuff everything is out in the open. As a matter of fact they may be able to teach us adults a thing or 2. You meant the guidelines for the contest though. Good job
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Mary. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this little piece.
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Yes I did!
Comment from LyndaS
I love this picture. How creeped out is this kid? Ha! You picked a great, icky subject and your poem is very funny. I can't believe there is a poetry form for gross stuff. Go figure. Good luck with this, author. This was fun. Lynda
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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I love this picture. How creeped out is this kid? Ha! You picked a great, icky subject and your poem is very funny. I can't believe there is a poetry form for gross stuff. Go figure. Good luck with this, author. This was fun. Lynda
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Lynda, seeing as how no other dumb shit ass-holes think it's worth reviewing. Lol.
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HAHAHAHA! Any thyme.
Comment from RodG
Some kids do learn about the "birds and bees" too young. I found this lad's reaction amusing. But a syntax problem: a dangling modifier. Your poem makes it seem as if the BOY is doing the explaining. Correct it by saying "While I explained . . ."
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Some kids do learn about the "birds and bees" too young. I found this lad's reaction amusing. But a syntax problem: a dangling modifier. Your poem makes it seem as if the BOY is doing the explaining. Correct it by saying "While I explained . . ."
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks for the review and help, Rod. I fixed it. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
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Good job! I re-rated your poem. Rod
