St Louis
Viewing comments for Chapter 60 "St. Louis Chapter 25 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
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Comment from Dawn Munro
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Comment Written 11-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Okay, LOL
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
What I like most is the conversational approach which takes the story forward with a strong natural flavor.
Last 2-3 lines in the end are working as a hook - A Good Quality Indeed!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Hello Barbara.wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
What I like most is the conversational approach which takes the story forward with a strong natural flavor.
Last 2-3 lines in the end are working as a hook - A Good Quality Indeed!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
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Barbara.Wilkey, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Bill Pinder
Good job with this chapter in your book with the martial arts work out and the ongoing relationship between the two main characters. It has a very believable feel to it and keeps the readers interest. Bill
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Good job with this chapter in your book with the martial arts work out and the ongoing relationship between the two main characters. It has a very believable feel to it and keeps the readers interest. Bill
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from bhogg
I admire how you pace your work. Nice finish as well, so anticipation of the next post. I've personally learned from your work. I used to be nervous about dialog, no longer. I wish I could get the pace thing though. Hope all is well with you and your family. We're lucky to be in an area that so far has very few coronavirus reported. Still scary. Bill
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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I admire how you pace your work. Nice finish as well, so anticipation of the next post. I've personally learned from your work. I used to be nervous about dialog, no longer. I wish I could get the pace thing though. Hope all is well with you and your family. We're lucky to be in an area that so far has very few coronavirus reported. Still scary. Bill
Comment Written 06-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the encouragement. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What an exciting place to stop, Barbara! I hope the car isn't wired, I'd hate to see Logan hurt. These attempts on Mac's life, aren't getting any easier, they have to catch the slime-ball soon before he does manage to do some real harm. I'm going to practice those moves, I'll enlarge the picture and see how I get on. LOL, if anyone tries to take me on, watch out! Well done, my friend, another excellent part, I really enjoyed it. (Just a little observation, I'm not too sure of Mark any more.) Big hugs, my friend, stay safe. Sandra. xxx
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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What an exciting place to stop, Barbara! I hope the car isn't wired, I'd hate to see Logan hurt. These attempts on Mac's life, aren't getting any easier, they have to catch the slime-ball soon before he does manage to do some real harm. I'm going to practice those moves, I'll enlarge the picture and see how I get on. LOL, if anyone tries to take me on, watch out! Well done, my friend, another excellent part, I really enjoyed it. (Just a little observation, I'm not too sure of Mark any more.) Big hugs, my friend, stay safe. Sandra. xxx
Comment Written 06-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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There is a reason Mark is in the story. I really don't any extra characters. But what is his purpose??? I promise we will find out soon. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Here's your six for the week. This was an excellent chapter and of course, didn't have any errors. I'm ready to read more. Take care and stay healthy. Shirley
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Here's your six for the week. This was an excellent chapter and of course, didn't have any errors. I'm ready to read more. Take care and stay healthy. Shirley
Comment Written 06-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sally Law
Aw, it's good to see sweet affection between Logan. and Mackenzie. I enjoyed that the most. "He put his hand at the small of her back," is a wonderful description. You used it twice here and I think the second time I would have said it slightly different. Maybe use the the word tingling. I love when my husband touches me there. It shoots chills up me. This is getting sweeter by the chapter and glad to see they are staying in shape despite of the coronavirus. :) :) I just had to say that.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Aw, it's good to see sweet affection between Logan. and Mackenzie. I enjoyed that the most. "He put his hand at the small of her back," is a wonderful description. You used it twice here and I think the second time I would have said it slightly different. Maybe use the the word tingling. I love when my husband touches me there. It shoots chills up me. This is getting sweeter by the chapter and glad to see they are staying in shape despite of the coronavirus. :) :) I just had to say that.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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I will check that area and see if I can switch it up a little. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Barbara
The action flows very well in this chapter. I find both McKenzie and Logan to be very decent people even while being more than capable of handling themselves in dangerous situations. They make a great couple. Well done!
Bev
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Hi, Barbara
The action flows very well in this chapter. I find both McKenzie and Logan to be very decent people even while being more than capable of handling themselves in dangerous situations. They make a great couple. Well done!
Bev
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from susand3022
Hi Barbara... something tells me Mark is one of the people that ought to be put on the sh** list. I fully expect that he was checking his watch to make sure someone had enough time to plant bugs or something... maybe look for that infamous tape???
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Hi Barbara... something tells me Mark is one of the people that ought to be put on the sh** list. I fully expect that he was checking his watch to make sure someone had enough time to plant bugs or something... maybe look for that infamous tape???
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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There is a reason Mark is in the story. I really don't any extra characters. But what is his purpose??? I promise we will find out soon. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Nice way to keep all of us hooked until the next chapter. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next story . Please stay safe my friend and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Nice way to keep all of us hooked until the next chapter. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next story . Please stay safe my friend and keep on writing.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
