Obsessed
2-4-4-12 poem2 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Oops, Mystery Author. You have 5 lines instead of 4 with the syllable count out of order. Perhaps you can revise this to fit the prompt. I will return to see. Doe--->dough
Obsessed 2syls
with all money, 4syls
necessity. 4syls
Much needed doe 4 syls
all the sweet precious dollar signs. 8syls
If you intend for the last two lines to be the 12 syllable line, then make those two into one line.
Respectfully, Jan
New rating of 5
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Oops, Mystery Author. You have 5 lines instead of 4 with the syllable count out of order. Perhaps you can revise this to fit the prompt. I will return to see. Doe--->dough
Obsessed 2syls
with all money, 4syls
necessity. 4syls
Much needed doe 4 syls
all the sweet precious dollar signs. 8syls
If you intend for the last two lines to be the 12 syllable line, then make those two into one line.
Respectfully, Jan
New rating of 5
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Thank you! I have fixed the mistake! I appreciate it!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 2-4-4-12 writing prompt.
This short piece tells of being obsessed with money.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 2-4-4-12 writing prompt.
This short piece tells of being obsessed with money.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Thank you! I appreciate it!
