A Shadow On The Street
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "The Secret Of Lew's Gift"One man's blessing can be another's curse.
12 total reviews
Comment from RShipp
"But Mr. Bradley, you can help the world by letting us study you. From you, we can learn the secrets of the mind. You'll receive the finest care in the world."
I believe the doctor wold have to offer FAR MORE than that advertisement to allow me to become a prisoner of a research experiment!
Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
"But Mr. Bradley, you can help the world by letting us study you. From you, we can learn the secrets of the mind. You'll receive the finest care in the world."
I believe the doctor wold have to offer FAR MORE than that advertisement to allow me to become a prisoner of a research experiment!
Enjoyed!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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We may not be done with the doctors yet. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love this story, and I'm so pleased it's still going. I don't think the doctors know anything when it comes to your brain, it's a gift that God wants used indefinitely. Why would He kill you off? Hmm, no. You have lots more work to do and more chapters for me to enjoy. Wonderful writing, I must save a six for you. Well done, a joy to read. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
I love this story, and I'm so pleased it's still going. I don't think the doctors know anything when it comes to your brain, it's a gift that God wants used indefinitely. Why would He kill you off? Hmm, no. You have lots more work to do and more chapters for me to enjoy. Wonderful writing, I must save a six for you. Well done, a joy to read. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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The thought of a six is amazing. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from JudyE
Another interesting story which I enjoyed very much.
I have a few thoughts for you to consider.
It feels like I've been a pit with demons - should be 'in a pit'
"Baptist Memorial Hospital, they rushed you to the Trauma Unit - period after 'Hospital'
You're about burst with something to tell me - did you mean 'bursting with..?'
If I'd about thought of it, I probably would have - did you mean '..I'd thought about it? Or perhaps what you have is how this girl talks.
"Yes, please. There are still a few more questions?" - maybe replace question mark with a period
I finished my hospital supper, and a lovely lady has taken my tray. The nurses have been filling me in on what Kathy does every day. She's here promptly at six in the morning and checks on my condition at the nurse's station. Kathy then proceeds to bug the crap out of them for the rest of the day. When is the Doctor coming by to see him? What was that test they ran? She continues this process all day until she leaves at three to get Caleb and Terrel off to work. The nurses were thrilled when I woke up! - not sure about the tenses in the above. Should it be 'what Kathy has been doing' 'was here promptly' etc.
"I'll bet you do, go ahead." - period after 'do'
"What exactly is my condition?"
"In layman's terms, you have two Parasigittal tumors in the upper part of your brain. One in your Frontal lobe and one in your Parietal lobe, they are almost the size of ping pong balls and growing. - period after ' parietal lobe'. And I'm not sure that capital letters are needed for 'parasigittal, parietal and frontal'.
Cheers
Judy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
Another interesting story which I enjoyed very much.
I have a few thoughts for you to consider.
It feels like I've been a pit with demons - should be 'in a pit'
"Baptist Memorial Hospital, they rushed you to the Trauma Unit - period after 'Hospital'
You're about burst with something to tell me - did you mean 'bursting with..?'
If I'd about thought of it, I probably would have - did you mean '..I'd thought about it? Or perhaps what you have is how this girl talks.
"Yes, please. There are still a few more questions?" - maybe replace question mark with a period
I finished my hospital supper, and a lovely lady has taken my tray. The nurses have been filling me in on what Kathy does every day. She's here promptly at six in the morning and checks on my condition at the nurse's station. Kathy then proceeds to bug the crap out of them for the rest of the day. When is the Doctor coming by to see him? What was that test they ran? She continues this process all day until she leaves at three to get Caleb and Terrel off to work. The nurses were thrilled when I woke up! - not sure about the tenses in the above. Should it be 'what Kathy has been doing' 'was here promptly' etc.
"I'll bet you do, go ahead." - period after 'do'
"What exactly is my condition?"
"In layman's terms, you have two Parasigittal tumors in the upper part of your brain. One in your Frontal lobe and one in your Parietal lobe, they are almost the size of ping pong balls and growing. - period after ' parietal lobe'. And I'm not sure that capital letters are needed for 'parasigittal, parietal and frontal'.
Cheers
Judy
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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I can't thank you enough for all of your help with my crazy projects. I'd nominate you again for reviewer of the month, but they won't let me.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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If you're already nominated me, then that's all you can do. I'm always grateful for the nomination as I feel it justifies my suggestions. :)
Comment from estory
The dialogue is terrific, the counterpoint between the characters is really good, and we get a glimpse of what is creating Lew's condition in biological terms. I just think, despite his faith, he might react a bit more fearfully; he seems very nonchalant in this. I actually would rather not have this gift explained by a tumor, but I see what you are getting here by turning this from a death sentence from satan to a plan to save other people. It does have its spiritual connection to the story. estory
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
The dialogue is terrific, the counterpoint between the characters is really good, and we get a glimpse of what is creating Lew's condition in biological terms. I just think, despite his faith, he might react a bit more fearfully; he seems very nonchalant in this. I actually would rather not have this gift explained by a tumor, but I see what you are getting here by turning this from a death sentence from satan to a plan to save other people. It does have its spiritual connection to the story. estory
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Hello, my friend. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, this is a fantastic chapter, now I just want to follow your book. It has a hint of all the secrets ingredients for what I'm searching in a book: paranormal, science, humanity, battle of Evil against good.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
Wow, this is a fantastic chapter, now I just want to follow your book. It has a hint of all the secrets ingredients for what I'm searching in a book: paranormal, science, humanity, battle of Evil against good.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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We have a few more chapters to go. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
A very interesting chapter with much potential to develop more good deeds with special but deadly gift of Lewis Bradley. Do continue this story. Good writing!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
A very interesting chapter with much potential to develop more good deeds with special but deadly gift of Lewis Bradley. Do continue this story. Good writing!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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We have a few more chapters to go. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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I am so glad to hear more chapters are coming.
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Can't wait!
Comment from royowen
Although the gifts are from physical maladies, I still believe Jesus never had them, nor did He need, it's clear to me that at least collectively these exist within the body, purely from the statement "Greater things than these will you do, because I go to the Father." Beautifully written Mike, and excellent episode, we should be will to do anything for Godvand our fellow man, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
Although the gifts are from physical maladies, I still believe Jesus never had them, nor did He need, it's clear to me that at least collectively these exist within the body, purely from the statement "Greater things than these will you do, because I go to the Father." Beautifully written Mike, and excellent episode, we should be will to do anything for Godvand our fellow man, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Hello, my friend. We have a few more chapters to go. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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Well done
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Well done
Comment from nancy_e_davis
It's sad to hear Lew's time will be limited because he can do a lot of good with his condition. Perhaps it is God's will to let him continue to be a medical miracle. I hope so. I enjoy reading about him and the good he does. Well done Mike. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
It's sad to hear Lew's time will be limited because he can do a lot of good with his condition. Perhaps it is God's will to let him continue to be a medical miracle. I hope so. I enjoy reading about him and the good he does. Well done Mike. Nancy:)
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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We have several chapters to go. Many thanks for your kind words and for those shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Papa55Mike, a terrific Thursday to you, I hope this finds you well. Thank you for another chapter of your wonderful story. Glad to find out the secret to Lew's gift, but saddened that it's tumors. Seeing the kind of person Lew is, I'm sure he will make the most of it. I look forward to reading the rest. Good job and have a great day!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
Hello Papa55Mike, a terrific Thursday to you, I hope this finds you well. Thank you for another chapter of your wonderful story. Glad to find out the secret to Lew's gift, but saddened that it's tumors. Seeing the kind of person Lew is, I'm sure he will make the most of it. I look forward to reading the rest. Good job and have a great day!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Hello, my friend. We have several chapters to go. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Teri7
Mike, I can tell by reading this that you did a lot of good research to write such a great chapter. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this my friend. I look forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you! Teri
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
Mike, I can tell by reading this that you did a lot of good research to write such a great chapter. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this my friend. I look forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you! Teri
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Hi, Terri. We have a few more chapters to go. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike