A Shadow On The Street
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "A Race To Save A Family"One man's blessing can be another's curse.
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Comment from BethShelby
I guess I'm going to need to be your fan so I'll know when you post. This is interesting even though I'm not getting in on the beginning. It reminds me of the TV job where the guy read the news before it happened and had to stop it. I wonder where all the money is coming from but I guess I'll learn that later. Looking forward to more.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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I guess I'm going to need to be your fan so I'll know when you post. This is interesting even though I'm not getting in on the beginning. It reminds me of the TV job where the guy read the news before it happened and had to stop it. I wonder where all the money is coming from but I guess I'll learn that later. Looking forward to more.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your kind words. I hope to have the next chapter done this week.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh! What a place to stop! I hope Lew will be alright. I think he has saved the wife, the son and the marriage, but I'm hoping he's going to be saved too! I can't see God allowing Lew to die now. Well done, another amazing chapter in this fascinating story. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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Oh! What a place to stop! I hope Lew will be alright. I think he has saved the wife, the son and the marriage, but I'm hoping he's going to be saved too! I can't see God allowing Lew to die now. Well done, another amazing chapter in this fascinating story. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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I've been warning people, the twist in the story is about to happen. Thank you for your kind words.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from royowen
I always love these stories, I wonder what people think of the miraculous gift of the predictive seeing ability of Lewis Bradley, but what saddens me is that one needs the compassion and willing to sacrifice oneself in a Christ-like way for it to be given, it would be close to what Jesus had, not all situations will be saved, God rescued me years ago, but then, He had my life mapped out. Beautifully written Mike, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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I always love these stories, I wonder what people think of the miraculous gift of the predictive seeing ability of Lewis Bradley, but what saddens me is that one needs the compassion and willing to sacrifice oneself in a Christ-like way for it to be given, it would be close to what Jesus had, not all situations will be saved, God rescued me years ago, but then, He had my life mapped out. Beautifully written Mike, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Hello, my friend! Many thanks for your kind words.
Have a grerat day and God bless.
mike
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You too
Comment from JudyE
Another easy-to-read chapter.
Just a couple of small points:
"I wish you would tell my wife that," we both laugh - period after 'that'
He doesn't see me standing by the large tree - the security lights trigger when I step on the sidewalk in front of the house - I would have used a period after 'tree'
Counsilman Gray stops in his tracks. - spelling - Councilman
He pulls a large gun out then points it at my head - I would have said 'He pulls out a large gun'
Enjoy your day
Judy
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Another easy-to-read chapter.
Just a couple of small points:
"I wish you would tell my wife that," we both laugh - period after 'that'
He doesn't see me standing by the large tree - the security lights trigger when I step on the sidewalk in front of the house - I would have used a period after 'tree'
Counsilman Gray stops in his tracks. - spelling - Councilman
He pulls a large gun out then points it at my head - I would have said 'He pulls out a large gun'
Enjoy your day
Judy
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the exquisite review and edit for this story. You are amazing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from KatyM
Good chapter. I can't believe you are almost finished with this book. I only saw one little thing. The word Councilman is spelled with a c and not an s: Counsilman.
I checked with Grammarly as well. Other than that very good chapter. It held my attention. katy
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Good chapter. I can't believe you are almost finished with this book. I only saw one little thing. The word Councilman is spelled with a c and not an s: Counsilman.
I checked with Grammarly as well. Other than that very good chapter. It held my attention. katy
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Many thanks for your kind words. I wonder why my Grammerly didn't catch it.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from estory
I like the drama in this; this is almost good enough for a TV script, if you polish it up. The detailed drive in the cab was hair raising, a real white knuckle ride, as we careen around corners with the cab floored. Then you have this great confrontation in front of the house with Grey, and I think you handled it really well. Lew steps out to talk Grey out of the murder, there's great tension in Grey pointing the gun at him; than the cops arrive and one of them gets antsy and pulls the trigger, and Lew dives out in front of the bullet. Excellent action and great suspense as the scene ends with Lew feeling the bullet in the shoulder. We can't wait for the next chapter to see what happens. I think this would make a great TV series. estory
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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I like the drama in this; this is almost good enough for a TV script, if you polish it up. The detailed drive in the cab was hair raising, a real white knuckle ride, as we careen around corners with the cab floored. Then you have this great confrontation in front of the house with Grey, and I think you handled it really well. Lew steps out to talk Grey out of the murder, there's great tension in Grey pointing the gun at him; than the cops arrive and one of them gets antsy and pulls the trigger, and Lew dives out in front of the bullet. Excellent action and great suspense as the scene ends with Lew feeling the bullet in the shoulder. We can't wait for the next chapter to see what happens. I think this would make a great TV series. estory
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Hello, my friend! A warning, the twist in the story is about to happen. Many thanks for your kind words and for those shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Sally Law
Aw, too bad this ended in tragedy for our man with the special gift from above. I hope he lives to see another day. I love the scene in the cab with the tip. He buys his way to where he needs to be in a hurry. I often wonder if Yellow Cab is still around, too.
A deep chapter with a spiritual theme within. Giving in to despair and taking a life, is never a good option.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Aw, too bad this ended in tragedy for our man with the special gift from above. I hope he lives to see another day. I love the scene in the cab with the tip. He buys his way to where he needs to be in a hurry. I often wonder if Yellow Cab is still around, too.
A deep chapter with a spiritual theme within. Giving in to despair and taking a life, is never a good option.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Hi, Sally! Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Wow. What a chapter. Smooth conversations, fast paced action, believable characters. Sure would like to read more of this story. You have a talent for writing.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Wow. What a chapter. Smooth conversations, fast paced action, believable characters. Sure would like to read more of this story. You have a talent for writing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Hello, my friend! Many thanks for your kind words.
Have as great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from John bailey
this is another chapter, that keeps the mind bouncing around, a very nice piece of work, this is another book I would like to read, I think it will pull me in.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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this is another chapter, that keeps the mind bouncing around, a very nice piece of work, this is another book I would like to read, I think it will pull me in.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Hello, my friend! Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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you are very welcome my friend.
Comment from GE Parson
Hey,Papa Mike,
Very interesting story. It reminds me of a TV program a few years ago about this guy who was able to read the paper headlines and he was ways rushing around to save someone ANYWAY, Thanks for sharing your brains with us -Parson
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Hey,Papa Mike,
Very interesting story. It reminds me of a TV program a few years ago about this guy who was able to read the paper headlines and he was ways rushing around to save someone ANYWAY, Thanks for sharing your brains with us -Parson
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Yes, I remember that show, but I can't remember the title. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
