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Departure

Goodbye

8 total reviews 
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt.
This short story tells of an alien surveying Earth.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Thanks for your review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Well then, goodbye. You did a good job, Mystery Author, with your contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. I like the POV of the character. I can understand its decision. Your words create great imagery. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Thank you for your review
Comment from BethShelby
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Nicely written flash fiction. It sounds as though our planet had been rejected. I'm sure someone from a superior place wouldn't want to call this place home. Especially if they've been handing around here the last few months and listening to the news. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Thanks for your review. Not sure if I'd want to live here either if I was alien.
Comment from Janet Foor
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Great story for the 100 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt with a nice twist at the end.

Very well done and good luck in the contest.

Blessings
janet

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Bill Pinder
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I enjoyed reading this flash fiction story about an alien visiting the earth and returning with the report that it is unsuitable for habitation. I like the double meaning that you could be talking about the problems of dealing with life in reality. Bill

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Natalie Goodwin
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I didn't see that ending coming but I like it. I liked the line "My human skin slips away as I slither into my ship and set coordinates." I also liked that the code was ninga, ninga. Somehow that sounds like what I would imagine an alien would say. Good flash fiction story.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Short and sweet. veni, vidi and sayonara, Earth is not suitable so I am taking my alien body back to the space. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Thanks for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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This is an excellent story of alien life living transiently on Earth, and the failure of humans to live up to expectations and requirements. Neither of these things surprises me, there is no twist here, but it is set out so neatly, and irrevocably. Well-done. I am sorry not to have any six stars left.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Thanks for this very positive review. Much appreciated.