The Note
Last Moments6 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
Nice flash fiction. It has a the necessary twist at the end when it is revealed that it is his grandparents who have celebrated their last meal together. It is sad flash fiction but nevertheless well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Nice flash fiction. It has a the necessary twist at the end when it is revealed that it is his grandparents who have celebrated their last meal together. It is sad flash fiction but nevertheless well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Thanks for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Dancemom
This is a great entry for the seventy word flash fiction contest. This is a sad story, but it is well written. I feel bad for the poor officer having to discover his grandparents. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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This is a great entry for the seventy word flash fiction contest. This is a sad story, but it is well written. I feel bad for the poor officer having to discover his grandparents. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thanks very much for your review.
Comment from Ricky1024
I've heard of similar examples especially when I worked on Long Beach island
This man used to come in the store everyday older man he was happy until his wife died.
And he was devastated I could tell he was going downhill quickly!
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you see she did everything from cooking cleaning to washing his clothing she was more of his mother than this is wife.
I told him when he was in the store to buy Stouffer's get yourself a microwave and heat it up and you enjoy the meals.
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and I guess he did because he was there for a while before I had to leave the store after the loss of my son.
This was well written and
rich in Theme and Imagery
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It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
As well.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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I've heard of similar examples especially when I worked on Long Beach island
This man used to come in the store everyday older man he was happy until his wife died.
And he was devastated I could tell he was going downhill quickly!
...
you see she did everything from cooking cleaning to washing his clothing she was more of his mother than this is wife.
I told him when he was in the store to buy Stouffer's get yourself a microwave and heat it up and you enjoy the meals.
...
and I guess he did because he was there for a while before I had to leave the store after the loss of my son.
This was well written and
rich in Theme and Imagery
.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
As well.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thanks very much for your review.
Comment from RodG
This flash fiction is very poignant. I can easily visualize this young officer viewing his long-time married grandparents now dead together at the table after writing/completing their suicide pact.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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This flash fiction is very poignant. I can easily visualize this young officer viewing his long-time married grandparents now dead together at the table after writing/completing their suicide pact.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thanks very much for your review.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Author, you have written what we used to call a 'real tear jerker'. . . I hope it is not autobiographical.
The illustration that you have posted , in my humble opinion, is perfect for this entry, Thank you for contributing. My only complaint is that entries like this make it so very hard to choose only one.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Dear Author, you have written what we used to call a 'real tear jerker'. . . I hope it is not autobiographical.
The illustration that you have posted , in my humble opinion, is perfect for this entry, Thank you for contributing. My only complaint is that entries like this make it so very hard to choose only one.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thanks very much for your review. Don't worry, it is totally fiction.
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I am glad to know, it was only fiction !
Comment from tfawcus
Exactly 70 words as per the contest requirement.
It must, at the best of times, be a harrowing experience for a young policeman to confront a double suicide. When the subjects are his own grandparents, doubly so.
Your flash fiction gives a good sense of the emotional impact.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Exactly 70 words as per the contest requirement.
It must, at the best of times, be a harrowing experience for a young policeman to confront a double suicide. When the subjects are his own grandparents, doubly so.
Your flash fiction gives a good sense of the emotional impact.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thanks very much for your review.
