The Book of Retirement
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Her dream"Short story about a fictive retirement
9 total reviews
Comment from Rikki66
This dream only happens on Hallmark, the file clerk is given a world cruise to write her adventures and her loves. It is not a dream. She has amazing adventures and falls hopelessly in love with the man of her dreams.
RikkiLXXIII
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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This dream only happens on Hallmark, the file clerk is given a world cruise to write her adventures and her loves. It is not a dream. She has amazing adventures and falls hopelessly in love with the man of her dreams.
RikkiLXXIII
Comment Written 29-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Interesting interpretation:) thank you
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A Retired welcome to you.
Rikki
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi Iza. This is a very creative idea and an amusing story. I like your dialogue and the comments from the Husband about God and the Lottery. I like this. I like your stories. Write some more.
Suggestion:
In the evening my husband come home => came home.
Robert
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Hi Iza. This is a very creative idea and an amusing story. I like your dialogue and the comments from the Husband about God and the Lottery. I like this. I like your stories. Write some more.
Suggestion:
In the evening my husband come home => came home.
Robert
Comment Written 29-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Thank you again and I really appreciate the grammar corrections.
Comment from Tami Urbanek
At first I thought she would learn it was a hoax and the check was no good. Then I see it's a dream. The dream of escaping reality-of which many have. It flowed well and didn't add unnecessary description.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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At first I thought she would learn it was a hoax and the check was no good. Then I see it's a dream. The dream of escaping reality-of which many have. It flowed well and didn't add unnecessary description.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review
Comment from Raul1
This is an interesting story, but you need to correct your spelling. The dialogue is a bit off. Mention who is talking to whom. Anyway, it is a very good story. Just revise it and re-edit it.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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This is an interesting story, but you need to correct your spelling. The dialogue is a bit off. Mention who is talking to whom. Anyway, it is a very good story. Just revise it and re-edit it.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much Raul
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You're welcome
Comment from royowen
Yes, that would be my dream too Iza, the problem is, I'd have to bring Elaine along too, traveling unrestricted is both our dream, but I'd have to bring her otherwise I'd refuse, she is my right arm. What a beautiful dream, well done, most imaginative, blessings, Roy
Typo : I start(ed) walking on a boat. 2 And he, as usual(,) 3: all the stupid idea(s) oh no, (is) my latest story.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020
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Yes, that would be my dream too Iza, the problem is, I'd have to bring Elaine along too, traveling unrestricted is both our dream, but I'd have to bring her otherwise I'd refuse, she is my right arm. What a beautiful dream, well done, most imaginative, blessings, Roy
Typo : I start(ed) walking on a boat. 2 And he, as usual(,) 3: all the stupid idea(s) oh no, (is) my latest story.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020
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I know you will bring Elaine along, but my husband hates to be on a boat, so he will stay with the kitties:)
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Well done
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written short story about dreaming about retirement most of our working days. When it finally happens we are not sure where to start being retired.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020
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A very well-written short story about dreaming about retirement most of our working days. When it finally happens we are not sure where to start being retired.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020
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So true, working days sometimes are a torture
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Iza, a marvelous Monday to you, I hope this finds you in good health and spirits. Thank you for sharing your story, I wish I could start dreaming of retirement. The only problem is if I start now, I'll be dreaming for the next 20 years unless they decide to push the retirement age back even further. LOL. Good job and have a great day!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Hello Iza, a marvelous Monday to you, I hope this finds you in good health and spirits. Thank you for sharing your story, I wish I could start dreaming of retirement. The only problem is if I start now, I'll be dreaming for the next 20 years unless they decide to push the retirement age back even further. LOL. Good job and have a great day!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Yeah you and me both, I will have to work until I am 100. My years of work and study from my country are recognized here, so I have ruffly 4 years of paid retirement so far:(
Comment from L. R. Jensen
Wouldn't it be wonderful if that was how it worked with publishers?! It was a nice dream to read about.
Your opening line starts with "As I was sitting on my coach..." I think you meant "couch." Then again, it is a dream so I guess your character can sit wherever she wants. ;)
It sounds like this will be an interesting book! Best wishes.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Wouldn't it be wonderful if that was how it worked with publishers?! It was a nice dream to read about.
Your opening line starts with "As I was sitting on my coach..." I think you meant "couch." Then again, it is a dream so I guess your character can sit wherever she wants. ;)
It sounds like this will be an interesting book! Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for catching that mistake and for reviewing:)
Comment from papa55mike
Daydreams are a perfect way to leave town and never go out of the door. What a wonderfully written chapter in your book. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Daydreams are a perfect way to leave town and never go out of the door. What a wonderfully written chapter in your book. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 27-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much Mr. Mike:)
