The Piper
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Comment from May 1
That's smart thinking. Perhaps that was their biggest mistake because the lack of trace itself is suspicious. Oh, no, this sounds like bad news to me. I admire his cleverness but also wish he wasn't that clever.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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That's smart thinking. Perhaps that was their biggest mistake because the lack of trace itself is suspicious. Oh, no, this sounds like bad news to me. I admire his cleverness but also wish he wasn't that clever.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Hi May 1,
Thank you for another excellent review and encouraging comments. I love that you have definite thoughts about Captain Burkehart.
Thank you for taking the time to catch up on the story. Now I need to get busy and post the next chapter soon.
Debi
Comment from TallySally
I love fantasy stories. Yours is written so well it pulls you in immediately - I surrendered my rational thoughts immediately and just enjoyed the ride.
For me, the detail you included was the right amount in the right places. I didn't have to reset to get back on track. Very smooth.
Your character was colorful. Seem to know Burkehart already. And just the lead in from the prior chapter makes Piper one anyone would like to know.
Great read.
God bless and my best.
Relda
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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I love fantasy stories. Yours is written so well it pulls you in immediately - I surrendered my rational thoughts immediately and just enjoyed the ride.
For me, the detail you included was the right amount in the right places. I didn't have to reset to get back on track. Very smooth.
Your character was colorful. Seem to know Burkehart already. And just the lead in from the prior chapter makes Piper one anyone would like to know.
Great read.
God bless and my best.
Relda
Comment Written 30-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Hi Relda,
Thank you for the encouraging comments about the writing, the details and the characters. I appreciate it.
Debi
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Well, Debi, this chapter was a
big surprise I did not see coming.
-All devoted to Capt. Burkehart.
-The description and flow of
movements is done very well.
-You show how Burkehart is
strategizing to get a glimpse
of any of the Fair Folk.
-I find it interesting that he
is giving himself three days.
-Then, after he establishes himself
in a protected area, he is rewarded
with some people showing up
at the waterfall, and how lucky for
him that he saw them go behind it.
-The question is, just because
he saw others do it, will he be
able to? If he is, what will his
approach be, and how will he
be regarded, and so much more.
-You left us with a cliffhanger!
-Well done!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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-Well, Debi, this chapter was a
big surprise I did not see coming.
-All devoted to Capt. Burkehart.
-The description and flow of
movements is done very well.
-You show how Burkehart is
strategizing to get a glimpse
of any of the Fair Folk.
-I find it interesting that he
is giving himself three days.
-Then, after he establishes himself
in a protected area, he is rewarded
with some people showing up
at the waterfall, and how lucky for
him that he saw them go behind it.
-The question is, just because
he saw others do it, will he be
able to? If he is, what will his
approach be, and how will he
be regarded, and so much more.
-You left us with a cliffhanger!
-Well done!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Hi Pam,
First, thank you for the six star rating. It is appreciated.
Well, Burkehart was lurking out there in the woods somewhere when last we saw him so...
I so enjoy reading your comments--and the questions you pose.
I am happy to hear you enjoyed the cliffhanger.
Debi
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Debi. I know Burkehart was out there, but we hadn't seen him in a long time, and he even got a chapter to himself. I am glad you like my questions; I have fun coming up with them.
Comment from padumachitta
Hello , a well written chapter, though i admit I have read few and far between. But i kept reading and sorting through it, it kept me engrossed. Burkhart doesn't seem to get the idea of intrusion, geez
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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Hello , a well written chapter, though i admit I have read few and far between. But i kept reading and sorting through it, it kept me engrossed. Burkhart doesn't seem to get the idea of intrusion, geez
Comment Written 29-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the encouraging comments. I loved the comment about Burkehart.
Debi
Comment from Writingfundimension
I think you did a great job with this chapter, Debi. Although it's been a while since I've read this story, I easily fell back into its rhythm due to your excellent pacing and deep POV. Very enjoyable, my friend. I look forward to reading more.
XX Bev
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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I think you did a great job with this chapter, Debi. Although it's been a while since I've read this story, I easily fell back into its rhythm due to your excellent pacing and deep POV. Very enjoyable, my friend. I look forward to reading more.
XX Bev
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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Hi Bev,
Thank you for the generous six star rating and your encouraging comments. I am happy to hear you enjoyed the story and were able to connect.
Debi
Comment from estory
I'm walking in on the middle of this, but I can tell you I liked the writing; vivid scene setting, good articulation of the thoughts of Burkhart while he is watching, hiding, and a mysterious sense of magic in the air as the fae folk disappear into the waterfall. We get a sense of Burkhart intruding on their ways and their land, his guile in breaking their hidden code. It's very much like watching a hunter going after deer. I felt like I was in the middle of this and right there with him at the waterfall. Nice job with it. estory
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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I'm walking in on the middle of this, but I can tell you I liked the writing; vivid scene setting, good articulation of the thoughts of Burkhart while he is watching, hiding, and a mysterious sense of magic in the air as the fae folk disappear into the waterfall. We get a sense of Burkhart intruding on their ways and their land, his guile in breaking their hidden code. It's very much like watching a hunter going after deer. I felt like I was in the middle of this and right there with him at the waterfall. Nice job with it. estory
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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Hi story,
Thank you for your analysis and the encouraging comments. I loved your review.
Debi
Comment from Benny Beeharry
HI friend, this is a most beautiful piece of story and accurate description, what with the waterfall and the dense foliage and other things, bring a great imagery in my mind. The piece that realy works magic is when he discovered the way to the fairy land. That was great. I always like the style...short sentences ,simple and not overworded. Well done!
Benny
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020
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HI friend, this is a most beautiful piece of story and accurate description, what with the waterfall and the dense foliage and other things, bring a great imagery in my mind. The piece that realy works magic is when he discovered the way to the fairy land. That was great. I always like the style...short sentences ,simple and not overworded. Well done!
Benny
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020
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Hi Benny,
Thank you for the gracious and encouraging comments. I appreciate you continuing to follow the story.
Debi
Comment from Ricky1024
"The Piper part, 32"
Was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly!
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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"The Piper part, 32"
Was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly!
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 27-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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Hi Doctor Ricky,
Thank you for the encouraging comments and for taking the time to read and review my work.
Debi
Comment from rspoet
Hello Debi,
One knew Burkehart was lurking about and had to reappear sooner or later, of course, we were all hoping for later. :)
It's good that the Captain is crafty and an experienced woodsman, he makes a good antagonist. (of course, he could be the protagonist. After all, we don't know for sure that Piper is not human)
Excellent description in this excellent chapter. You appear to be a knowable woods person yourself.
Will he go back to get his men and lose time, or will he stealthily venture in alone.
Excellent chapter in the tale, enjoying each episode.
Well done, my friend.
Robert
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020
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Hello Debi,
One knew Burkehart was lurking about and had to reappear sooner or later, of course, we were all hoping for later. :)
It's good that the Captain is crafty and an experienced woodsman, he makes a good antagonist. (of course, he could be the protagonist. After all, we don't know for sure that Piper is not human)
Excellent description in this excellent chapter. You appear to be a knowable woods person yourself.
Will he go back to get his men and lose time, or will he stealthily venture in alone.
Excellent chapter in the tale, enjoying each episode.
Well done, my friend.
Robert
Comment Written 27-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020
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Hi Robert,
I love your comments about hoping Burkehart would show up later. Thank you for continuing to follow the story and all the kind comments. Thank you for the six star rating as well. I appreciate it!
Debi
Comment from Ulla
Hi there. I am new to this story so I'm grabbing at straws. As I see it, going behind the water fall is the perfect hiding place. Now I need to catch up with more of this well written story. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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Hi there. I am new to this story so I'm grabbing at straws. As I see it, going behind the water fall is the perfect hiding place. Now I need to catch up with more of this well written story. Ulla:))
Comment Written 27-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020
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Hi Ulla,
Thank you for taking a chance on this story midway through. I appreciate the encouraging comments.
Debi
