Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

I liked the snoring paragraph, many would say that's a great comparison.LOL Great finish to another good chapter, leaving us with the tension high. Going well Tony,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020

Ha! Ha! Snoring has been a sticking point in many a relationship. I enjoyed your review. All good wishes, Tony.

Comment from Therese Caron

Excellent

Great chapter, held my attention from start to finish. I am wondering if the blood on his hands will be a problem due to the crime committed. I guess I will have to wait until the next chapter to find out! Very well written, good grammar and punctuation.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

Thanks, Therese, for your interest and support. Sincerely, Tony

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Well, this is not a good development. I am not at all happy about it as I am sure Kayla won't be. Now how are they going to rescue Helen. Or maybe it wasn't Chaprasi at who stole the money, but Kayla so the men wouldn't go with her. HMMMM

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

Thanks, Barbara, for your continued interest and support. Good detective work!
Sincerely, Tony

Comment from royowen

Excellent

It seems that Charles may well be implicated in the robbery of Ash of the ransom money, he did, after all genuinely happen by the window, but then he saw the briefcase chained to the bed. Bisto seems to think that it's pointless going to release Helen without the ransom money, well done Tony, good scribing, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

Thanks, Roy, for your continued interest and support. Sincerely, Tony

reply by royowen on 28-Jan-2020

Welcome Tony

reply by royowen on 28-Jan-2020

Welcome

Comment from RShipp

Excellent

"Three stooges darting from rock to rock trying to keep out of sight was a vaudeville act bound to end in disaster" ... A great picture!!!

"It'll be no trouble tracking down the thief. There are footprints all through the flower bed,..." Oh, no???

I enjoyed this installment!

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

Thanks, Rshipp, for your continued interest and support. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Pam (respa)

Exceptional

-A very good chapter, Tony, that is certainly
packed with action and mishaps.
-Interesting name for the lodge,
given the differences between
Helen and Bisto on that earlier in the story.
-Bisto keeps things lively with his
"gnome under a mushroom" comment
and others directed at Ash!
-Poor Charles, he kind of reminds
me of Peter Falk in "Columbo." I don't
know if you ever watched that show.
-As the story moves along, you could also
say Murphy's Law was in play, as well.
-By the end, Charles has done a good job
of unwittingly implicating himself.
-I am sure the author will not let us down, though:)
-I like how you end with Ash's comment.
-Well done.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

Thanks, Pam, for your most encouraging comments and for the sixth star. Very much appreciated.
I rarely watch TV but do remember watching Columbo occasionally and enjoying it. Best wishes, Tony

reply by Pam (respa) on 28-Jan-2020

You are very welcome and deserving, Tony.

Comment from Bill Pinder

Excellent

Another excellent chapter in your book. It sounds like they've gotten themselves into another pickle. I like this line about gallantry not being dead.

I never thought I'd see the word "gnome" in one of these chapters.
Bill

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020

I originally had ?dwarf? but someone thought I was demeaning dwarfism!
Glad you?re still enjoying it.
Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Hi Tony. great write as usual. Sorry now I have missed so much. As always I admire your use of imagery like this:
"I thought I'd better look in on him so went down the passage and tapped on his door. There was no response. I bent to look through the keyhole and could see his light on. I tapped again, this time a little louder."

And here: "Ash was lying in bed fast asleep. A book he'd been reading lay open on his chest."

And here: ". I sat bolt upright in a cold sweat, terrified at the thought of being torn to pieces by a wild boar. Even when I was wide awake, the snorting and snuffling didn't go away. Bloody Bisto! If I'd had a dummy at hand, I'd have stuck it in his mouth."

Bravo Tony. :) Bob

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

Thanks, Bob. I appreciate your positive comments and the sixth star. Most affirming. All good wishes, Tony

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Again: brisk pacing, sharp dialog, and quite a cast characters!
Vivid imagery: Pancake atop coiled rope; gnome under mushroom.
Portobella crepes, anybody? Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

Thanks, Bob. I appreciate your positive comments and mouth-watering suggestion. All good wishes, Tony

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

Oh dear, Charles could find himself in a lot of trouble now!

Just one comment:
"Good evening, gentlemen and welcome." - I might have put a comma after 'gentlemen'

Cheers
Judy

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

Thanks, Joan. I appreciate your review and discovery of the missing comma. I trust you're having a great time in Nepal. All good wishes, Tony

reply by JudyE on 23-Jan-2020

You've done it again!!! It's JUDY. I bet I've embarrassed you now. lol It's all good. :)

reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020

I should be writing in pink to go with my face! No idea where that came from.
I had a spate of calling Sandra Helen early last year. LOL