Twenty Twenty Vision
A tribute to Fanstory15 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
What a fun entry for the contest. There are so many good reasons to be on the site: the friendship, the contests, and the reason many join--to get help in improving our writing, or just to share.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2020
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What a fun entry for the contest. There are so many good reasons to be on the site: the friendship, the contests, and the reason many join--to get help in improving our writing, or just to share.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2020
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Hi w.j.bebi Thank you for your review and yes there are so many reasons to be here. I enjoy all aspects Cheers
Comment from Janet Foor
A fun twenty twenty poem for the new decade. I just had cataract surgery so now I am 20/20 ready.
Sweet tribute to FanStory.
Well done.
Blessings for the new year.
Janet
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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A fun twenty twenty poem for the new decade. I just had cataract surgery so now I am 20/20 ready.
Sweet tribute to FanStory.
Well done.
Blessings for the new year.
Janet
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Hi Janet Thank you for your review and glad your vision is now 20/20 Cheers
Comment from Dancemom
This is a creative entry for the 2020 vision contest. Your subject matter of the fanstory website was fun and unique. I love your flow and rhyming pattern.
There may be a few punctuation issues. I have been out of college a long time, so disregard this if I'm wrong.
Semicolon after skill - line 3
Comma after fun - line 9
Semicolon after write - line 11
Comma after rhymes - line 13
Semicolon after prose - line 15
Comma after reading - line 16
Semicolon after Fanstory - line 18
Period after clear - line 19
Semicolon after ready - line 20
Again, forgive me if I'm wrong. I'm not a grammar expert especially with poetry. Your poem overall was a great job.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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This is a creative entry for the 2020 vision contest. Your subject matter of the fanstory website was fun and unique. I love your flow and rhyming pattern.
There may be a few punctuation issues. I have been out of college a long time, so disregard this if I'm wrong.
Semicolon after skill - line 3
Comma after fun - line 9
Semicolon after write - line 11
Comma after rhymes - line 13
Semicolon after prose - line 15
Comma after reading - line 16
Semicolon after Fanstory - line 18
Period after clear - line 19
Semicolon after ready - line 20
Again, forgive me if I'm wrong. I'm not a grammar expert especially with poetry. Your poem overall was a great job.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Hi Heather.
Many Thanks for reading my poem for this contest, and I have taken up your suggestions with the punctuation.
So appreciate your comments and help
i am going to do a a writing course this year to refresh my grammar and punctuation skill from long ago LOL
Cheers
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No problem. I?m glad I could help.
Comment from Sally Law
Best wishes for the twenty twenty contest, and your writing endeavors, dear poetress. Beautifully penned and illustrated with the all seeing eye.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the new year,
Sally :)
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Best wishes for the twenty twenty contest, and your writing endeavors, dear poetress. Beautifully penned and illustrated with the all seeing eye.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the new year,
Sally :)
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Hi Sally, Thanks for your review ,kind words, and kind words for my poem Much appreciated Cheers
Comment from Gail Denham
It's true - Fanstory does offer all that. It's sort of consuming to keep on top of reviews and the challenges of the contests. It helps to write fast - try new forms, make friends.
I liked your poem.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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It's true - Fanstory does offer all that. It's sort of consuming to keep on top of reviews and the challenges of the contests. It helps to write fast - try new forms, make friends.
I liked your poem.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Hi Gail, Thank you and yes it does get busy with writing and tryong to review etc so being fast helps. LOL Glad you like this effort Cheers
Comment from Therese Caron
What a wonderful happy poem to read to start the new year on FanStory! It challenges us to do better and tells us what is offered to help us out. Even if we never win any contests, it's fun to read the reviews from other poets and then read theirs in return. Great job!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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What a wonderful happy poem to read to start the new year on FanStory! It challenges us to do better and tells us what is offered to help us out. Even if we never win any contests, it's fun to read the reviews from other poets and then read theirs in return. Great job!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Hi Therese, Thank you and I thought this contest allowed me to do a fun poem incorporating all aspects here at FS . we do have fun Cheers
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Mystery writer. I like the message in the poem. It is an interesting place here and there are many kinds of writers on the site. You can find a little bit of everything on the site. Good luck in the contest. Robert
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Hello Mystery writer. I like the message in the poem. It is an interesting place here and there are many kinds of writers on the site. You can find a little bit of everything on the site. Good luck in the contest. Robert
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Hi Robert, Thank you for your review and yes it is very versatile in many ways . everyone contributes lots of great work and we do help each other and make friends Cheers
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You're welcome
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your lines flow smoothly, the rhymes are great, the many reasons to like FS are wonderful, and the message is clear. I have one tiny suggestion--a comma instead of question mark in last line of 4th verse. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your lines flow smoothly, the rhymes are great, the many reasons to like FS are wonderful, and the message is clear. I have one tiny suggestion--a comma instead of question mark in last line of 4th verse. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Hi Jan, Thank you for your review and have removed the question mark in line four. just needed someone to comment I did wonder if it should go in so Cheers for that in appreciation
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add a comma where the ? was
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and a clear vision for twenty-twenty from your perspective. We are all gathered here to express our feelings and make use of knowledge to try and make the world a better place.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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A very well-written poem and a clear vision for twenty-twenty from your perspective. We are all gathered here to express our feelings and make use of knowledge to try and make the world a better place.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Hi Sandra, Thank you for reviewing this and yes we have a purpose here on FS how good Cheers
Comment from June Sargent
Very exciting to be starting a new year on the site. There seems to be more of a variety of prompts now. Here's hoping our muses are as raring to go as we are! Happy writing!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Very exciting to be starting a new year on the site. There seems to be more of a variety of prompts now. Here's hoping our muses are as raring to go as we are! Happy writing!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Hi June Thank you for your review and yes let out muses and see what they produce . Cheers
