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Betrayed by You

The Awdl Sonnet

30 total reviews 
Comment from Mark Schardine
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Despite betrayal, I forgive you dear,
for grief and loss had clearly caused this rift,

Is it good to forgive, or foolish? You may set yourself up for the next betrayal.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
    Thank you Mark for your review, forgive, but not forget, love Dolly x
Comment from judiverse
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It really hurts when you're betrayed. I can think of a person that this poem describes--someone I put my trust in only to find that I was betrayed. It does make you feel like a fool when you realize your trust was misplaced. Forgiveness is the appropriate thing, but sometimes it's hard to forgive. I realize how these things can continue to hurt. Excellent Awdl sonnet, and your internal rhyme works in very smoothly. judi

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
    Thank you Judi for your review, I appreciate your words here, love Dolly x
reply by judiverse on 15-Jan-2020
    You're very welcome judi
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Dolly. It is almost catastrophic when there are people in our lives that portray themselves one way, and act another. All of these events are the construction materials for the rest of our lives. Robert

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
    Thank you Robert for your review, much appreciated, love Dolly x
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 15-Jan-2020
    You're welcome
Comment from jenintorre
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Well done Dolly for your forgiveness. One of my downfalls is that I find it hard to forgive once I've been betrayed. I really enjoyed your poem and your painting. Have a nice day.
Love Jen. X

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Thank you Jen for your review, glad you liked this one, you have a lovely day too! love Dolly x
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written Awdl Sonnet about betrayal that hurts when it comes from the one person we never thought will do that and it takes a long time to get over the shock.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Thank you Sandra for your review, you are so right here, love Dolly x
Comment from Ricky1024
Exceptional
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This was beautifully written as I was reading it and got to the second from the last paragraph be kind of lost the rhyming scheme.
I would suggest the word "Drift"
To match your word "rift."
With your perception of the Eternal Connection of bridge.
...
Otherwise, this was Rich in Theme and Imagery.
And, it read well and Flowed well.
...
Also, the Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks Dolly and have a Blessed rest of your week!
Ricky

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Thank you Ricky for your review and your six stars, your words here are much appreciated, have a wonderful day Ricky, love Dolly x
Comment from rhymelord
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Dear Dolly,
Real rousing words and phrases make this a wonderful reveal of emotion. Excellent format and some very good "part" rhymes in "gold" and "soul", "rift" and bridge", which unless one searches, pass by without a pause.
Regards,
Reg

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Thank you Reg for your review, glad the close rhymes were acceptable, I appreciate your words here, love Dolly x
Comment from Diana L Crawford
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Deeply emotional piece! So sorry to hear of your real sorrow, water under the bridge or not. A fool to hurt a heart as beautiful as yours.

Thank you for sharing such a personal memory. xoxo

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Thank you Diana for your review, it was all so hard at the time, but we all heal eventually, love Dolly x
reply by Diana L Crawford on 14-Jan-2020
    Thankfully! And we are made stronger too from the experience. xoxo
Comment from BeasPeas
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Hi Dolly. Love your beautiful art work that is well displayed. Your Awdl Sonnet poem tells of a time when you felt betrayed when you were most vulnerable. These types of things are painful. Marilyn

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Thank you Marilyn for your review, glad you liked this one and you could identify with my words, much appreciated, love Dolly x
Comment from lauralumummu
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This I understand completely, as it happened to me, when my mom died. I was the one that took care of her and was there whenever she needed something. She was 86 and ready to go and my sister blamed me out of grief and guilt but it was terrible to be grieving and have her so unfairly treating me. Now four years later she sent me presents at Christmas. I forgave her and understand though it wasn't really fair and was heartbreaking at that time. Well written and heartfelt, Laura xo

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Thank you Laura for your review and your six stars, your story is sad Laura and very similar to my situation. Spiteful things happened at my Mother?s funeral and I shall not forget, but I have forgiven, love Dolly x