Hawk Soars
Hunter and hunted - nature's ploys41 total reviews
Comment from Tina Crute
What a beautiful way to describe the natural order of things! You may have 6 syllables, not 5, in the first line? Pardon me if I am wrong! Just checking since its a contest and this is a great entry!
Tina
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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What a beautiful way to describe the natural order of things! You may have 6 syllables, not 5, in the first line? Pardon me if I am wrong! Just checking since its a contest and this is a great entry!
Tina
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Hi Tina, I did check and it is 5/7/5 thanks for looking at this however, I would hate be be DQ'd
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Ok good! My mistake. I wanted to make sure. This is a great entry then!!
Tina
Comment from Malerie
As a young girl growing up in 5he country/rural area, I witnessed many time the hunter and the hunted. Although I never saw the scene your work describes, your words give a clear vision the picture you selected.
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As a young girl growing up in 5he country/rural area, I witnessed many time the hunter and the hunted. Although I never saw the scene your work describes, your words give a clear vision the picture you selected.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Malerie, thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your haiku, JLR. Your image is a good pairing although your words create their own picture. Your syllable count is correct per line with the short-long-short format. Good use of 'h' alliteration in hunter/hinder/hawk. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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I enjoyed your haiku, JLR. Your image is a good pairing although your words create their own picture. Your syllable count is correct per line with the short-long-short format. Good use of 'h' alliteration in hunter/hinder/hawk. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Jan, thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
They do have really sharp eyes and can spot the smallest rodent from high up in the sky. Your 5-7-5 poem has very well chosen words that detail this perfectly. I hope the rabbit got away this time! Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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They do have really sharp eyes and can spot the smallest rodent from high up in the sky. Your 5-7-5 poem has very well chosen words that detail this perfectly. I hope the rabbit got away this time! Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Sandra, thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from Patty Palmer
The hawk flies overhead with the rabbit insight for his supper. The rabbit tries scampering away so the hawk can't find him. I think the hawk is going to win! The picture of the hawk flying overhead is a perfect picture for your poem.
Hope you're having a great day!
Patty
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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The hawk flies overhead with the rabbit insight for his supper. The rabbit tries scampering away so the hawk can't find him. I think the hawk is going to win! The picture of the hawk flying overhead is a perfect picture for your poem.
Hope you're having a great day!
Patty
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Patty, thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
It seems like this rabbit has two adversaries. One flying above and one on the ground. Who will be victorious here? I like this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
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It seems like this rabbit has two adversaries. One flying above and one on the ground. Who will be victorious here? I like this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Jeffrey, thank you for your review and comments. The fittest wins!
Comment from nomi338
In the circle of life, you do not want to be that part of the circle that gets eaten. Unfortunately, there will always be one unhappy victim. Man, who sits at the top of the food chain is rarely the one who is consumed, is sometimes the unwitting victim. Such times as being in shark filled waters with the protection of a boat or a ship, or dying out in the desert or in the woods where wolves might get at him, or in the jungle in lion territory let's say.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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In the circle of life, you do not want to be that part of the circle that gets eaten. Unfortunately, there will always be one unhappy victim. Man, who sits at the top of the food chain is rarely the one who is consumed, is sometimes the unwitting victim. Such times as being in shark filled waters with the protection of a boat or a ship, or dying out in the desert or in the woods where wolves might get at him, or in the jungle in lion territory let's say.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Nomi, thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from royowen
I think you've scribed an excellent entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest. These wonderfully designed predators of the sky have fascinated poets and humankind for eons, but they masters of the skies there is little doubt, well done, Good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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I think you've scribed an excellent entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest. These wonderfully designed predators of the sky have fascinated poets and humankind for eons, but they masters of the skies there is little doubt, well done, Good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Roy, thank you for your review and comments.
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Welcome
Comment from Drew Delaney
I believe you captured what is expected in the Haiku 5/7/5 form. Though this form has always been difficult to assess, the final line sums up the initial entirety, in my opinion. Nice work.
Drew
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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I believe you captured what is expected in the Haiku 5/7/5 form. Though this form has always been difficult to assess, the final line sums up the initial entirety, in my opinion. Nice work.
Drew
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Drew, it is true how amazingly challenging Haiku poetry form is. I appreciate your validation.
Comment from Barbaraj1
A very good Haiku. A duel between hunter and prey. Personally I hope
the hunter misses that poor rabbit when it swoops down. Hope you do
well in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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A very good Haiku. A duel between hunter and prey. Personally I hope
the hunter misses that poor rabbit when it swoops down. Hope you do
well in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Barbara, thanks for the validation!
