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Hawk Soars

Hunter and hunted - nature's ploys

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Comment from heavenempress
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hi, excellent piece of work. I liked the idea behind the poem and how you managed to come up with it. Simple but powerful, I liked it. Keep it up and I highly recommend your work to others. Nice image and presentation.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
    Heavenempress, I thank you for the validation and support.
Comment from dmt1967
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This is a well written poem. It paints a picture of a hunter concentrating on a rabbit while the bird has a lucky escape. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
    thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this nature 5-7-5.
Sometimes when I am enjoying such a scene, I don't think about the fact that the creatures I'm watching are looking for supper!

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
    Thank you
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very well written 5-7-5 you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
    Teri, thanks
Comment from Jmf4119
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Great picture to convey your message of the hunter and the hunted in this terrific haiku. Beautiful image of the hawk as it flew over the field.

Well done and good luck in the contest.

blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
    Janet, I appreciate your validation.
Comment from Joan E.
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We see soaring hawks in the canyons around us--we are never able to see what they are hunting. Your haiku helped to answer that question. Your artwork selection was perfect and I enjoyed your alliteration of "h's". Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Joan it must be a delight to witness. Thanks for the review.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
    Joan it must be a delight to witness. Thanks for the review.
reply by Joan E. on 16-Jan-2020
    No hawks at the moment--but many doves, bluejays and grosbeaks at our bird feeder, looking out at the Pacific! Have a healthful and productive 2020- Joa
Comment from estory
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The balance is there, the nature image is there, and I think you did a good job of articulating this struggle between predator and prey in this haiku piece. Very oriental feel, nicely done. I liked the alliterations for musical element. estory

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Smiling back, thank yoiu...
Comment from padumachitta
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Hi
A strong photo to go with a picture of words for the contest.
I did stumble a bit on hinder, but understand you wanted the alliteration of the Hs
good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Thanks for your review and comments.
Comment from dragonpoet
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Well matches words and picture for this haiku. I hope the rabbit gets away. Though it does seem improbable.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Joan, thank you for the validation and good wishes.
reply by dragonpoet on 14-Jan-2020
    Don't mention it, JLR
    Joan
Comment from Alchera
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The syllables counting in the first line is wrong because "soars" is one syllable not two so there are four syllables in all. The rest of the haiku narrative story lined content is good and acceptable.

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 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    THANKS
reply by Alchera on 15-Jan-2020
    I was sorry and surprised that no one else had notice it! Have a nice day JLK