Shoots Of Green
In the aftermath of the present Australian bushfires.25 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Lisa,
The frree verse used repetition and internal rhyme well to tell us
that life returns after grief of a lost love one and that there is
also eternal life for the one who left earthly life.
Congrats on tying for third in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
PS you are talented photographer too.
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Lisa,
The frree verse used repetition and internal rhyme well to tell us
that life returns after grief of a lost love one and that there is
also eternal life for the one who left earthly life.
Congrats on tying for third in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
PS you are talented photographer too.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2020
Comment from Tina Crute
I think this should have won! This is awesome. I don't seem to know what the committee is looking for, lol. I just had to tell you how intelligent and compassionate this is. Great job...a worthy poem for a horrific event!
Have a great day!
Tina
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I think this should have won! This is awesome. I don't seem to know what the committee is looking for, lol. I just had to tell you how intelligent and compassionate this is. Great job...a worthy poem for a horrific event!
Have a great day!
Tina
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
Comment from BeasPeas
One of the most important aspects of managing wild terrain is bush/brush abatement. Where I lived in the mountains of California we were always under threat of forest/brush fires. It was mandatory to keep brush abated so as not to fuel fire. From what I have read, brush abatement was not done in Australia. Therefore, once started, the fires roared onward. I'm hoping that the fires are soon extinguished. The loss of life and property have been devastating. After one of the fires in California, new growth almost immediately sprang from the charred trees and ground. Your piece is well composed. Thank you for sharing. Marilyn
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One of the most important aspects of managing wild terrain is bush/brush abatement. Where I lived in the mountains of California we were always under threat of forest/brush fires. It was mandatory to keep brush abated so as not to fuel fire. From what I have read, brush abatement was not done in Australia. Therefore, once started, the fires roared onward. I'm hoping that the fires are soon extinguished. The loss of life and property have been devastating. After one of the fires in California, new growth almost immediately sprang from the charred trees and ground. Your piece is well composed. Thank you for sharing. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your poem is truly geared to encourage those who have seen the devastation of the Australian fires. We never give up on Nature. She replenishes over and over and over again. The photos are like a light at the end of the tunnel. Thanks for sharing.
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Your poem is truly geared to encourage those who have seen the devastation of the Australian fires. We never give up on Nature. She replenishes over and over and over again. The photos are like a light at the end of the tunnel. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
Comment from Therese Caron
This poem Is very sad and heartfelt, yet full of positive comments about the future. Your words are lovely and fitting, and flow nicely. You picked a great picture to complement your work. Good luck in the contest!
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This poem Is very sad and heartfelt, yet full of positive comments about the future. Your words are lovely and fitting, and flow nicely. You picked a great picture to complement your work. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
Comment from juliaSjames
An exceptional poem of faith, faith in the power of regenerative life, faith in the power of a new generation. Your words are powerful conjuring images of horror, "charred charnel-house" and of rebirth "sap will surge again".
It's declamatory poetry, composed to be read aloud.
I pray for Australia's recovery from this catastrophe, and I wish you the best in the contest.
Blessings Julia
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An exceptional poem of faith, faith in the power of regenerative life, faith in the power of a new generation. Your words are powerful conjuring images of horror, "charred charnel-house" and of rebirth "sap will surge again".
It's declamatory poetry, composed to be read aloud.
I pray for Australia's recovery from this catastrophe, and I wish you the best in the contest.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written uplifting faith poem. We may think circumstances are impossible to change for the better, but nothing is impossible with God, He is the only one who can bring new life from the ashes.
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A very well-written uplifting faith poem. We may think circumstances are impossible to change for the better, but nothing is impossible with God, He is the only one who can bring new life from the ashes.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Beautifully said, LisaMay and we pray with you that you will see "life's sweet urge." Great use of internal rhymes here and I hope that all will see truth as well as new ways to keep the fires from returning. The US parks have learned from past mistakes and realize the need to clear brush to avoid feeding future fires. It's such a balancing act. I think you'll do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Beautifully said, LisaMay and we pray with you that you will see "life's sweet urge." Great use of internal rhymes here and I hope that all will see truth as well as new ways to keep the fires from returning. The US parks have learned from past mistakes and realize the need to clear brush to avoid feeding future fires. It's such a balancing act. I think you'll do well in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Thanks for your wonderful review, and also for using the certificate to boost the poem. Much appreciated!
Comment from Joan E.
I did not realize you live Down Under. Thank you for capturing the beginning of this catastrophe with your photograph and your contagious hope for regeneration in your poem. I admired your repeats for emphasis plus your "charnel-house" and "burning torch" metaphors. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
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I did not realize you live Down Under. Thank you for capturing the beginning of this catastrophe with your photograph and your contagious hope for regeneration in your poem. I admired your repeats for emphasis plus your "charnel-house" and "burning torch" metaphors. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
Comment from Ulla
Hi Lisa May. I do hear you. Such devastation that Australia has suffered during the last many months is hard to imagine. I loved your poem and its positive note. All the best.Ulla:)))
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Hi Lisa May. I do hear you. Such devastation that Australia has suffered during the last many months is hard to imagine. I loved your poem and its positive note. All the best.Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
