Terror of the Mind
Is it a waking nightmare or is it real...?22 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
Wow, this was haunting and reminded of the recent plane being blown up over Iran.
I could relate to this as I saw the Challenger explode as I was driving down the road to pick up my oldest from school. I pulled over and sat on the hood of my car, crying hysterically. I won't ever forget it. This stirred me to that thought today.
A winner for the contest and emotionally impacting.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxo
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Wow, this was haunting and reminded of the recent plane being blown up over Iran.
I could relate to this as I saw the Challenger explode as I was driving down the road to pick up my oldest from school. I pulled over and sat on the hood of my car, crying hysterically. I won't ever forget it. This stirred me to that thought today.
A winner for the contest and emotionally impacting.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxo
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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This was my first kyrielle... takes more patience than I usually have so it won't be on the top of repeats - LOL!! ;) :) Thanx for the wonderful review, my lady! ;) Yvette
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading this kyrielle poem. It is very well costructed and meaningful. Well chosen artwork. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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I really enjoyed reading this kyrielle poem. It is very well costructed and meaningful. Well chosen artwork. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thanx, Kerry, it was my first Kyrielle and your words are encouraging... :) :) Take care out there! ;) Yvette
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Hello there! This is a lovely kyrielle you've penned, my friend.
The repetitive line was a great choice giving it more impact.
Good luck to you. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Hello there! This is a lovely kyrielle you've penned, my friend.
The repetitive line was a great choice giving it more impact.
Good luck to you. ~Kerry
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thanx, Kerry, it was my first Kyrielle and your words are encouraging... :) :) Take care out there! ;) Yvette
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You're welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a well written Kyrielle and has won my vote, I love the sentiments and the clever rhyme scheme and well chosen words, a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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This is a well written Kyrielle and has won my vote, I love the sentiments and the clever rhyme scheme and well chosen words, a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Soooo... I will consider that my six-star review for the week, Dolly - your words, talented one, are enough! This was my first kyrielle and your words mean a whole lot!! Thank you!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
What a cool poem. *smile* I love the images I'm seeing here as I read. It can be interpreted as a spooky poem, yes, but it's such a neat thing. The rhyme and flow are perfect and the meter is superb. I think this is the best one I have read in the booth so far! Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Dear Mystery Writer,
What a cool poem. *smile* I love the images I'm seeing here as I read. It can be interpreted as a spooky poem, yes, but it's such a neat thing. The rhyme and flow are perfect and the meter is superb. I think this is the best one I have read in the booth so far! Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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This was my first attempt a kyrielle, Robyn -- so glad you enjoyed! Thank you for such a wonderful review!
Comment from angel123
I like the message of your poem, but it does not consistently rhyme. It flows well and your artwork choice enhances your message. I like that you added the whippoorwill bird to your story. It made it interesting. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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I like the message of your poem, but it does not consistently rhyme. It flows well and your artwork choice enhances your message. I like that you added the whippoorwill bird to your story. It made it interesting. Best wishes!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
A thoroughly enchanting and haunting read that sticks with me. Really good choice of art accompaniment. The sentence you crafted for the repeating one is dramatic and interesting.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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A thoroughly enchanting and haunting read that sticks with me. Really good choice of art accompaniment. The sentence you crafted for the repeating one is dramatic and interesting.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Marilyn, for this outstanding review and those bright, shiny stars!! This was my first Kyrielle, so you have just started my new year out on a joyful note!!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is not a good condition to be in. I only know one solution for an unstable mind. It's getting help from above. I was a child that was tortured and tormented in my mind. I thought that I was unloved, worthless, and that nobody wanted me around. Jesus came by and changed all of that. He changed me from a boy who couldn't look anyone in the face or want to be around them to someone with some confidence and self worth. I like the message of this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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This is not a good condition to be in. I only know one solution for an unstable mind. It's getting help from above. I was a child that was tortured and tormented in my mind. I thought that I was unloved, worthless, and that nobody wanted me around. Jesus came by and changed all of that. He changed me from a boy who couldn't look anyone in the face or want to be around them to someone with some confidence and self worth. I like the message of this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Thank you for sharing a part of you, Jeffrey... and thank you for the awesome review!!
Comment from RShipp
It appears that you followed all the requirements for a kyrielle.
"The sky turned grey and fell today... What an ominous phrase to use as your phrase for repetition. Well chosen!
Your picture went great with your poem.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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It appears that you followed all the requirements for a kyrielle.
"The sky turned grey and fell today... What an ominous phrase to use as your phrase for repetition. Well chosen!
Your picture went great with your poem.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Thank you!!
Comment from Justin Chopin
Sounds more like a very detailed nightmare to me. I was intrigued by how you used the whippoorwill in this piece as a kind of Edgar Allan Poe styled demonic bird that is sounding your catastrophic fate. The image of the gray sky falling was also a great symbol because along with the bird it brings a wild amount of intensity to your piece. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Sounds more like a very detailed nightmare to me. I was intrigued by how you used the whippoorwill in this piece as a kind of Edgar Allan Poe styled demonic bird that is sounding your catastrophic fate. The image of the gray sky falling was also a great symbol because along with the bird it brings a wild amount of intensity to your piece. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much. This was my first Kyrielle.
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You're welcome.
