A Shadow On The Street
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Christmastime"One man's blessing can be another's curse.
13 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
I've been off site for a few weeks and I couldnt get this story off of my mind. It goes beyond a man with a gift/curse. It's about hope. Big hope and little hope and all the hope that's in between. And Lew is a great character. Love the Christmas chapter. Jesus fed a crowd with a few fish and bread. Lew is the Christ figure in this. Loving it.
Have a great night, Gretchen
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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I've been off site for a few weeks and I couldnt get this story off of my mind. It goes beyond a man with a gift/curse. It's about hope. Big hope and little hope and all the hope that's in between. And Lew is a great character. Love the Christmas chapter. Jesus fed a crowd with a few fish and bread. Lew is the Christ figure in this. Loving it.
Have a great night, Gretchen
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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That's what I try to do with all of my stories, give hope. Many thanks for your kind words and for those shiny six stars!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Ricky1024
"Christmas time's
What more can I say?
Loved this and it was rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It also read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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"Christmas time's
What more can I say?
Loved this and it was rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
It also read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Hi, Ricky. Many thanks for your kind words and encouraging review!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Barbaraj1
This is a warm, wonderful story about a Christmas that brings joy to
everyone. The story kept my interest from beginning to end. I like stories
that are inspiring.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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This is a warm, wonderful story about a Christmas that brings joy to
everyone. The story kept my interest from beginning to end. I like stories
that are inspiring.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Many thanks for your kind words and encouraging review!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Teri7
Mike, This is a wonderful Christmas story you have written my friend. It made my heart happy as I read it. You used such great descriptive words and very nice dialogue. I hope you and your family had a great Christmas and New Years! May God bless you! Teri
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Mike, This is a wonderful Christmas story you have written my friend. It made my heart happy as I read it. You used such great descriptive words and very nice dialogue. I hope you and your family had a great Christmas and New Years! May God bless you! Teri
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Hi, Terri. I wanted to get it out before Christmas, but I couldn't do it. Many thanks for your kind words and encouraging review!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from susand3022
Hi Papa Mike, What a lovely Christmas story you have written here. We need a lot more Lew's in the world or people with money that behave like Lew on a regular basis! The world needs help, Papa Mike, that's for sure.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Hi Papa Mike, What a lovely Christmas story you have written here. We need a lot more Lew's in the world or people with money that behave like Lew on a regular basis! The world needs help, Papa Mike, that's for sure.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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I wanted to get it out before Christmas, but couldn't do it. Many thanks for your kind words and encouraging review!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a wonderful story, Mike. I felt the warmth in the fellowship and giving spirit that came from Lew. It would be a wonderful thing if more people felt this way, and not just at Christmas but every day of the year. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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This is a wonderful story, Mike. I felt the warmth in the fellowship and giving spirit that came from Lew. It would be a wonderful thing if more people felt this way, and not just at Christmas but every day of the year. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Hi, Nancy. I wanted to get it out before Christmas, but I couldn't do it. Many thanks for your kind words and encouraging review!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from RShipp
A great story of Christmas spirit being shared. The idea of a Christmas picnic meal (almost pre-prepared!) what a great deal.
As stated earlier... the reading of minds gift, is not a gift I would pursue.
Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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A great story of Christmas spirit being shared. The idea of a Christmas picnic meal (almost pre-prepared!) what a great deal.
As stated earlier... the reading of minds gift, is not a gift I would pursue.
Enjoyed!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Many thanks for your kind words and encouraging review!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from JudyE
This is an inspirational Christmas story.
I found quite a few glitches so have only given four stars but I'm happy to give five once a few edits have been made.
It is now December Twenty-third - I think 'twenty-third' should be lower case.
Even if it's just showing them, someone cares - delete comma
A hundred homeless people live all around downtown. - replace period with question mark but either would do
"You're going to cook that much food?!" - I would never have put a question mark AND an exclamation mark but I gather it's now considered okay.
I didn't wrap it because I don't know-how - delete hyphen or make it 'I don't have the know-how'.
"How do you plan to carry all of this home - question mark after 'home'
I'm thinking fifteen two liters, - I don't understand 'fifteen two liters' but maybe it will make sense to Americans
It's two o'clock in the afternoon, Caleb and Terrel left - replace comma with a period.
"Lew, do you realize how much food you bought. - replace period with a question mark.
Both families pitch in, Earl and Amy, start carrying the rolls and pies - period after 'in'. Delete comma after 'Amy'
All of this worry about the bill could have killed their baby - I don't remember reading anything about 'the bill'
The rain stopped before the guests started to leave. I'm standing in the door of the office watching Caleb, Kathy, and Terrel hug our last guests before they headed to where they were staying. - You've changed tenses here. Should be 'The rain stops before the guests start to leave. I'm standing in the door of the office watching Caleb, Kathy, and Terrel hug our last guests before they head to where they are staying.'
It's Christmas day. - capital - Christmas Day
I hope 2020 is a magical year for you.
Judy
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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This is an inspirational Christmas story.
I found quite a few glitches so have only given four stars but I'm happy to give five once a few edits have been made.
It is now December Twenty-third - I think 'twenty-third' should be lower case.
Even if it's just showing them, someone cares - delete comma
A hundred homeless people live all around downtown. - replace period with question mark but either would do
"You're going to cook that much food?!" - I would never have put a question mark AND an exclamation mark but I gather it's now considered okay.
I didn't wrap it because I don't know-how - delete hyphen or make it 'I don't have the know-how'.
"How do you plan to carry all of this home - question mark after 'home'
I'm thinking fifteen two liters, - I don't understand 'fifteen two liters' but maybe it will make sense to Americans
It's two o'clock in the afternoon, Caleb and Terrel left - replace comma with a period.
"Lew, do you realize how much food you bought. - replace period with a question mark.
Both families pitch in, Earl and Amy, start carrying the rolls and pies - period after 'in'. Delete comma after 'Amy'
All of this worry about the bill could have killed their baby - I don't remember reading anything about 'the bill'
The rain stopped before the guests started to leave. I'm standing in the door of the office watching Caleb, Kathy, and Terrel hug our last guests before they headed to where they were staying. - You've changed tenses here. Should be 'The rain stops before the guests start to leave. I'm standing in the door of the office watching Caleb, Kathy, and Terrel hug our last guests before they head to where they are staying.'
It's Christmas day. - capital - Christmas Day
I hope 2020 is a magical year for you.
Judy
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Many thanks for helping me edit all of my stories. I made sure to recognize you when I won the Christmas Story Contest. I could not have done it without you. Thank you for always being there with a kind word.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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You're more than welcome. Can you tell me please where to find the results of the Christmas Story contest? I must have missed it at the time. Maybe it's no longer available. Thanks.
Comment from Cass Carlton
I read this with complete relish and unadulterated pleasure. It is a true Christmas story in every sense of the word. The main character, Lew, is totally fixed on doing God;s work and he does it magnificently. It would be wonderful if everyone had a clear line like he has to the will of God.To feed a hundred plus people is a blessed thing to do and your account of it is truly inspiring. well done. Cheers Cass
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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I read this with complete relish and unadulterated pleasure. It is a true Christmas story in every sense of the word. The main character, Lew, is totally fixed on doing God;s work and he does it magnificently. It would be wonderful if everyone had a clear line like he has to the will of God.To feed a hundred plus people is a blessed thing to do and your account of it is truly inspiring. well done. Cheers Cass
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Wow, what a review! Many thanks for your kind words and for those shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from royowen
The homeless, the destitute, the ones who seemingly have no hope, are really only a heartbeat from joy, and those of us who are full of hope and substance are only a heartbeat from the streets. I thought of those in our local country who have lost all in the raging fires we had. But God loves all equally with ardour and his passion is for someone to hear that call. Beautifully written Mike, look at all that imagery you roused in me. Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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The homeless, the destitute, the ones who seemingly have no hope, are really only a heartbeat from joy, and those of us who are full of hope and substance are only a heartbeat from the streets. I thought of those in our local country who have lost all in the raging fires we had. But God loves all equally with ardour and his passion is for someone to hear that call. Beautifully written Mike, look at all that imagery you roused in me. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Hello, my friend! Many thanks for your kind words and encouraging review.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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Well done
