Ocean Depths
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Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and well written 5-7-5 poem about the ocean depths. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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This is a very nice and well written 5-7-5 poem about the ocean depths. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thanks very much for your review.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is compliant with the syllabic form of 5-7-5 but i can't help feeling it has missed an opportunity to say more. There is too much repetition, squandering those syllables:
(The x 4 syllables) + (Ocean x 2 = 4 syllables) =8 syllables leaving you only 9 to say something.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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This is compliant with the syllabic form of 5-7-5 but i can't help feeling it has missed an opportunity to say more. There is too much repetition, squandering those syllables:
(The x 4 syllables) + (Ocean x 2 = 4 syllables) =8 syllables leaving you only 9 to say something.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thanks for your feedback. I was trying to get the point across that the ocean is a creature's home, something that tends to get forgotten at times.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Ocean Poem writing prompt.
This short verse tells of creatures living on the ocean floor.
Nicely done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Ocean Poem writing prompt.
This short verse tells of creatures living on the ocean floor.
Nicely done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thanks Sharon, for your feedback
Comment from Dancemom
This is a very nice 575 poem about the ocean. Your syllable count is correct. I don't know about you, but those creatures look scary. They are in their home though and not mine. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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This is a very nice 575 poem about the ocean. Your syllable count is correct. I don't know about you, but those creatures look scary. They are in their home though and not mine. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thanks very much for your review. Yes, they do look scary but as you say it is their home
Comment from Fonda Little
Love the colors you chose to go along with this poem! God bless you In Jesus's Almighty, All Powerful, Divine, Holy, Majestic Name, The Name Above All Names I pray, amen, Amen, AMEN!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Love the colors you chose to go along with this poem! God bless you In Jesus's Almighty, All Powerful, Divine, Holy, Majestic Name, The Name Above All Names I pray, amen, Amen, AMEN!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Those are rather gross little creatures. There are some really strange things living in the ocean. Makes one cautious. =} Well done. I do hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Those are rather gross little creatures. There are some really strange things living in the ocean. Makes one cautious. =} Well done. I do hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thanks for your review.
