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Viewing comments for Chapter 163 "Springdom Come"Assorted poetry
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Comment from lauralumummu
I like this 5-7-5 poem. I find it unique for a little haiku it has a lot to say. The last line is cute and my favorite. I am already looking forward to spring. We have snow and it will be -16 Celsius tonight. Great entry for the contest all the best, Laura.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I like this 5-7-5 poem. I find it unique for a little haiku it has a lot to say. The last line is cute and my favorite. I am already looking forward to spring. We have snow and it will be -16 Celsius tonight. Great entry for the contest all the best, Laura.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Laura.
Comment from BeasPeas
Very nice, very cleverly composed 5-7-5. I think you've done a good job with this play on words. Illustration is appropriate to theme. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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Very nice, very cleverly composed 5-7-5. I think you've done a good job with this play on words. Illustration is appropriate to theme. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 03-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Marilyn
Comment from nomi338
It most certainly wood be good to wake up and shake up the wooden king and all the citizens of holly wood land. They should however avoid having too hot of a time, as intense heat is forbidden in the land of holly wood.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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It most certainly wood be good to wake up and shake up the wooden king and all the citizens of holly wood land. They should however avoid having too hot of a time, as intense heat is forbidden in the land of holly wood.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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Thanks, nomi. I got it. Prevent forest fires.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL!! Sometimes, I would swear you were the King of Pun or, at the very least, Jack of All Plays (on words, that is!)... ;) :) This is such a wonderful offering the contest, Bill -- starts off so very serious and then it's a smile and then a chuckle! :) You and your talented pen, sir!! ;) ) Thanx for sharing, your majesty, and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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LOL!! Sometimes, I would swear you were the King of Pun or, at the very least, Jack of All Plays (on words, that is!)... ;) :) This is such a wonderful offering the contest, Bill -- starts off so very serious and then it's a smile and then a chuckle! :) You and your talented pen, sir!! ;) ) Thanx for sharing, your majesty, and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Yvette, for the very kind review. Bill
Comment from damommy
Clever play on words with 'springdom come' and 'wooden.' Now, you've made me wonder if trees dream of Spring. Delightful poem and lovely photo. Good luck.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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Clever play on words with 'springdom come' and 'wooden.' Now, you've made me wonder if trees dream of Spring. Delightful poem and lovely photo. Good luck.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Yvonne
Comment from Mistydawn
I love your play on words here, wooden, springdom lol, cute. Your poem is well-written, great description. Your artwork is perfect for the poem. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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I love your play on words here, wooden, springdom lol, cute. Your poem is well-written, great description. Your artwork is perfect for the poem. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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Thanks, MD
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a technically sound 5-7-5 with correct line and syllable count throughout. The content is clever in its use of word play. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a technically sound 5-7-5 with correct line and syllable count throughout. The content is clever in its use of word play. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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Thanks, MA
Comment from lyenochka
That's a clever new word combining Spring with Kingdom! I like how sleep leads to dreams in the next line and the pun of "wooden" for wouldn't. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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That's a clever new word combining Spring with Kingdom! I like how sleep leads to dreams in the next line and the pun of "wooden" for wouldn't. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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Thanks, lyenochka, for the excellent review.
Comment from judiverse
I see you used VMarguarite's artwork. I really like her work. Great use of wording in this. "Springdom come" and wooden" are very effective. Spring can't come too soon, as far as I'm concerned. Excellent work and good luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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I see you used VMarguarite's artwork. I really like her work. Great use of wording in this. "Springdom come" and wooden" are very effective. Spring can't come too soon, as far as I'm concerned. Excellent work and good luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 30-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Judi.
Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
This is a clever entry. I enjoyed the fast, but delightful read. It has an easy flow. I believe it is a strong contender in the contest, so, good luck to you!!!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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This is a clever entry. I enjoyed the fast, but delightful read. It has an easy flow. I believe it is a strong contender in the contest, so, good luck to you!!!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Marilyn, for the kind review. Bill
