Stolen Blooms
Influenced by Wordsworth and Yeats.34 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
I am not sure which I loved more-- your notes or the poem itself. Okay, I am exaggerating -- your free verse echoes with melancholy, but hope, too. But your notes appeal to the high road that is in all of us and says what can't be said often enough. Homelessness is one of my biggest peeves -- I live in a country where people can (and do!) freeze to death in winter.
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I am not sure which I loved more-- your notes or the poem itself. Okay, I am exaggerating -- your free verse echoes with melancholy, but hope, too. But your notes appeal to the high road that is in all of us and says what can't be said often enough. Homelessness is one of my biggest peeves -- I live in a country where people can (and do!) freeze to death in winter.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2019
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Thank you
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You are very welcome.
Comment from BlueTiger
Great work on this poem; I love the imagery and passion in your words. You tell an entire story in just a few short lines. The poem seems to move from darkness to light as it progresses. I really enjoyed reading this, looking forward to seeing more of your work.
-BT
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Great work on this poem; I love the imagery and passion in your words. You tell an entire story in just a few short lines. The poem seems to move from darkness to light as it progresses. I really enjoyed reading this, looking forward to seeing more of your work.
-BT
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you so very much BT for the sixer. :) Yes I see hope too for fixing this homeless problem that has gripped so many.
Best
John
Comment from Janet Foor
I think you walked the line with of Yeats and Wordsworth perfectly in the thoughtful and thought provoking piece. A short succinct and poignant poem.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
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I think you walked the line with of Yeats and Wordsworth perfectly in the thoughtful and thought provoking piece. A short succinct and poignant poem.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you
Comment from estory
This is interesting, I think the long lines evoke something of the romantic feel of Wordsworth and early Yeats. But I don't know that they contain the rhythmic mastery and music of those titanic poets. I liked the images. Very abstract, almost surreal. You have that dream like view of the street scene, the interwoven crowds, some compassionate, some lost. estory
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This is interesting, I think the long lines evoke something of the romantic feel of Wordsworth and early Yeats. But I don't know that they contain the rhythmic mastery and music of those titanic poets. I liked the images. Very abstract, almost surreal. You have that dream like view of the street scene, the interwoven crowds, some compassionate, some lost. estory
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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To be sure, I am less than the dust beneath the soles of their worn out shoes.
I can only strive to evoke an echo of their great works. I tried to be careful to try not to plagiarize their prose whilst still giving it a reverent nod.
Best
John
Comment from Sanku
This is a poignant poem forcing many of us to pay a little attention to the homeless and unfortunate. Yes you have personified human kindness and it is a nice metaphorical way of saying that they need our kind attention
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This is a poignant poem forcing many of us to pay a little attention to the homeless and unfortunate. Yes you have personified human kindness and it is a nice metaphorical way of saying that they need our kind attention
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you
Comment from Ogden
Yes, they know no prejudice. (And, regardless of class or poverty, all souls love flowers.)
Good luck in the free verse contest, Lordinajamjar.
Ogden (Don)
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Yes, they know no prejudice. (And, regardless of class or poverty, all souls love flowers.)
Good luck in the free verse contest, Lordinajamjar.
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
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You're very welcome.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a sad poem about those homeless and needy people that some just like to ignore. Why is this person just watching someone help them instead of helping him/herself? It would probably make her much happier.
Perfect subject for the time of year.
Happy Holidays
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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This is a sad poem about those homeless and needy people that some just like to ignore. Why is this person just watching someone help them instead of helping him/herself? It would probably make her much happier.
Perfect subject for the time of year.
Happy Holidays
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
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No problem.
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Comment from Hitcher
There seems to be more and more of those precious lives stolen these days friend. The homeless numbers around the globe are soaring and a strong dose of human kindness is definitely what is needed : ))
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There seems to be more and more of those precious lives stolen these days friend. The homeless numbers around the globe are soaring and a strong dose of human kindness is definitely what is needed : ))
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Stolen Blooms", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a privilege to both read and review this talented poet's work. To me, this is definitely a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"The Stolen Blooms", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a privilege to both read and review this talented poet's work. To me, this is definitely a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much for the sixer duchess. Your comments are very generous and much appreciated by this writer.
Best
John
John,
you certainly deserved the sixer.
God bless and take care,
the Duchess
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Lordinajamjar LOL - this is a well written, unusual free verse. A bold piece of writing and especially brave to move in the circles of Wordsworth and Keats. A good read and I enjoyed it. Well done and warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Hello Lordinajamjar LOL - this is a well written, unusual free verse. A bold piece of writing and especially brave to move in the circles of Wordsworth and Keats. A good read and I enjoyed it. Well done and warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
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Thank you. :)
