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Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "St. Louis Chapter 17 part 3"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
15 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a well written chapter to your story, my friend. I see a romance in their future. I enjoy your mystery romance stories very much~Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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This is a well written chapter to your story, my friend. I see a romance in their future. I enjoy your mystery romance stories very much~Debbie
Comment Written 27-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.wilkey,
Lovely piece of Romance Fiction having smooth, spontaneous, and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Impressive and perfectly matching the theme phraseology.
Interesting INDEED, and I'm waiting for the next part.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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Hello Barbara.wilkey,
Lovely piece of Romance Fiction having smooth, spontaneous, and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Impressive and perfectly matching the theme phraseology.
Interesting INDEED, and I'm waiting for the next part.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Supe
"Women!" not ?
I'm sorry I laughed (no comma)
I'll never hurt you in any way (not anyway)
I like your characters and your dialogue sounds real. A couple of little things above. Your door fan art is a perfect fit for this chapter.
Really glad you sorted out the names for us all. I should have read that first. I thought Edger was a person. lol
Nice job. I'll look for more in the future.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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"Women!" not ?
I'm sorry I laughed (no comma)
I'll never hurt you in any way (not anyway)
I like your characters and your dialogue sounds real. A couple of little things above. Your door fan art is a perfect fit for this chapter.
Really glad you sorted out the names for us all. I should have read that first. I thought Edger was a person. lol
Nice job. I'll look for more in the future.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the help editing. I make the changes.
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you are welcome.
Comment from Therese Caron
Wow, that sounds like a very interesting book or story. I'm just joining in now so obviously I've missed a lot but I am currently liking what I read. The slamming door adds to the story and what's going on.Hopefully I can find out the rest! Nice job.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019
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Wow, that sounds like a very interesting book or story. I'm just joining in now so obviously I've missed a lot but I am currently liking what I read. The slamming door adds to the story and what's going on.Hopefully I can find out the rest! Nice job.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the kind review and welcome to FS.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Barbara a marvelous Monday to you. I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for another chapter of the story, Logan and Mac are two of my favorite FanStory characters, I love the back and forth between the two. Is it me or are things starting to heat up? LOL Good job! I can't wait to see how the story progresses.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Hello Barbara a marvelous Monday to you. I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for another chapter of the story, Logan and Mac are two of my favorite FanStory characters, I love the back and forth between the two. Is it me or are things starting to heat up? LOL Good job! I can't wait to see how the story progresses.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Life does get more difficult for them, does that count? LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was brilliantly written, Barb. You handled her fears of sex in a very sensitive way already knowing a little bit of what she has been through with her grandfather. She is going to be wary of men until Logan can prove he's not like that. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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That was brilliantly written, Barb. You handled her fears of sex in a very sensitive way already knowing a little bit of what she has been through with her grandfather. She is going to be wary of men until Logan can prove he's not like that. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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You're correct. Thank you for understanding. Some readers want them to jump into bed. I don't see it, but I know the entire picture. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
Possibly the best chapter I've read in this book so far. The dialogue is spot on. The emotions are real and there is nothing to detract from the central focus. Good writing.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Possibly the best chapter I've read in this book so far. The dialogue is spot on. The emotions are real and there is nothing to detract from the central focus. Good writing.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Sweet scene. Mac is acting like a woman now, confiding in a man. This could lead somewhere. I wonder if she knows that, being rather inexperienced. But Logan understands that she's just confused and needs to find her place in this friendship. So he does the right thing, assuring her he won't make any moves on her. That makes her feel safe. But somewhere inside, she doesn't want to be safe. Hehe. Verrry well done!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Sweet scene. Mac is acting like a woman now, confiding in a man. This could lead somewhere. I wonder if she knows that, being rather inexperienced. But Logan understands that she's just confused and needs to find her place in this friendship. So he does the right thing, assuring her he won't make any moves on her. That makes her feel safe. But somewhere inside, she doesn't want to be safe. Hehe. Verrry well done!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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No she doesn't. LOL We will see what happens. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Miranda Langston
this is a fantastically written chapter. i did notice a few SPAGs, but not too many. i absolutely love the dialogue at the end between them. very believable and it really makes the characters seem human
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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this is a fantastically written chapter. i did notice a few SPAGs, but not too many. i absolutely love the dialogue at the end between them. very believable and it really makes the characters seem human
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. I wish you would have pointed out the SPAGS so I could fix them.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello barbara.wilkey
so McKenzie and Logan have known each other for only 7 days. Both of them definitely should take time and spill out their thoughts of what irks them.
I know it takes more than seven days to sort out what is in plain words, what is real bugging them.
I know it works that is why my husband and I have being married for 65 years
Gert
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Hello barbara.wilkey
so McKenzie and Logan have known each other for only 7 days. Both of them definitely should take time and spill out their thoughts of what irks them.
I know it takes more than seven days to sort out what is in plain words, what is real bugging them.
I know it works that is why my husband and I have being married for 65 years
Gert
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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I think they will get to it, only taking the long route. Thank you for the kind review.
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Barb you are welcome
Gert
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Barb you are welcome
Gert
