Redeeming One's Identity
Book Intro - A teen's perspective on divorce and desertion16 total reviews
Comment from RShipp
What a sad event for one's life at an early age.
In the second paragraph- with the ages- you have two different references of how old the children are. I think that one would be more beneficial to your essay.
"I wore the mask of deceptive happiness ... what a grand turn of phrase! Excellent!!!
I am glad you are telling your story.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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What a sad event for one's life at an early age.
In the second paragraph- with the ages- you have two different references of how old the children are. I think that one would be more beneficial to your essay.
"I wore the mask of deceptive happiness ... what a grand turn of phrase! Excellent!!!
I am glad you are telling your story.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Thanks so much for your kind review and suggestions. I greatly appreciate it. Happy Holidays.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a very sad and heartfelt story of a family devastated by divorce and the ensuing chaos that embedded itself in all your lives. It is unfortunate that because your Mother was suffering so much grief at the loss of her husband in these circumstances, that she was unable to give you all the emotional support you needed at this time. So much pressure must have been put on all of you and the shock of this changes your lives forever. These knocks in life can have long lasting effects. I shall tune in for your continuation of this story, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2019
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This is a very sad and heartfelt story of a family devastated by divorce and the ensuing chaos that embedded itself in all your lives. It is unfortunate that because your Mother was suffering so much grief at the loss of her husband in these circumstances, that she was unable to give you all the emotional support you needed at this time. So much pressure must have been put on all of you and the shock of this changes your lives forever. These knocks in life can have long lasting effects. I shall tune in for your continuation of this story, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2019
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Thank you Dolly, as always, for your kind review and always words of encouragement. I so treasure your comments.
God bless you and yours and have a wonderful holiday season!
Comment from w.j.debi
You sound like a strong lady, even as a teenager. Of course, you probably didn't feel like you were strong as you went through the desertion of your father and then your husband.
Thanks for having the courage to share your story.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2019
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You sound like a strong lady, even as a teenager. Of course, you probably didn't feel like you were strong as you went through the desertion of your father and then your husband.
Thanks for having the courage to share your story.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2019
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Thanks to being a member of fanstory, I found the courage to share this as difficult time in my life because of all the support and mentorship I have received from this great online family.
Have a wonderful holiday season.
Comment from Allieas
You did a wonderful job sharing your most painful memories in an engaging way in this chapter. I was similarly abandoned by a parent when I was 8, and reading your story brought back memories for me. Thank you for sharing this part of your story.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2019
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You did a wonderful job sharing your most painful memories in an engaging way in this chapter. I was similarly abandoned by a parent when I was 8, and reading your story brought back memories for me. Thank you for sharing this part of your story.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review and sharing what you went through as well.
I am in such a better place now. I have a wonderful husband, family and friends, especially my FanStory friends. Have a wonderful holiday season.
Comment from Therese Caron
This is truly a wonderful story, however said it may be. You sound like you were very brave person growing up, although I don't think you know that. The people reading this will discern that from your writing. I have no criticism, constructive or otherwise, about the story. It is well written, grammatically correct, and grabs the reader at the start.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
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This is truly a wonderful story, however said it may be. You sound like you were very brave person growing up, although I don't think you know that. The people reading this will discern that from your writing. I have no criticism, constructive or otherwise, about the story. It is well written, grammatically correct, and grabs the reader at the start.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review and caring thoughts. I challenged myself to try writing a memoir. I am in a good place in my life now but writing it, though very healing for me, had me thinking I was reading someone else's story. God bless you and yours always.
Comment from estory
It seems like the bones and skeleton of a good novel. All you have to do is bring the characters to life; write the dialogue, set the scenes, take us into the journey and get us to feel the emotions roiling around this family. Sometimes you need some perspective to write these things well; but generally, I think writing from experience and what you know produces the best pieces. estory
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
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It seems like the bones and skeleton of a good novel. All you have to do is bring the characters to life; write the dialogue, set the scenes, take us into the journey and get us to feel the emotions roiling around this family. Sometimes you need some perspective to write these things well; but generally, I think writing from experience and what you know produces the best pieces. estory
Comment Written 14-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review and encouraging thoughts and suggestions. I am ever so humbled and will try to look into writing a novel.
Blessings to you and yours.
Comment from LeannaP
I think this makes a grand entry for the contest.
Its hard to know that your mother didnt receive child support when you were younger as that would've helped a ton.And it made me tear up when you stated that you cried when your father left your mother and you ran to your neighbors.
Must've been tough on your mother.
Much luck to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
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I think this makes a grand entry for the contest.
Its hard to know that your mother didnt receive child support when you were younger as that would've helped a ton.And it made me tear up when you stated that you cried when your father left your mother and you ran to your neighbors.
Must've been tough on your mother.
Much luck to you in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review and caring thoughts. It was a very tough time but I was blessed to have faith, family and friends. Blessings to you and yours.
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Your welcome
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Have a wonderful weekend!
Comment from lauralumummu
I love your heartfelt story. Childhood scars are so deep but with God's help we can heal. I think you story is very well written and so brave of you to share. I noticed you said my Bryan twice was this something you called him or an endearment. I would remove the "my" unless you explain why you call him that. I would also love it if you could make the font a little bigger and space your paragraphs more often this would make it much easier to read. All the best, Laura.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
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I love your heartfelt story. Childhood scars are so deep but with God's help we can heal. I think you story is very well written and so brave of you to share. I noticed you said my Bryan twice was this something you called him or an endearment. I would remove the "my" unless you explain why you call him that. I would also love it if you could make the font a little bigger and space your paragraphs more often this would make it much easier to read. All the best, Laura.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
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Thanks so much for your kind review and suggestions. I will revisit and correct.
God bless you and your always.
Comment from Pam Norris
You have had more than your for fair share of sadness. I hope that life has improved for you and your extended family. It was nice to read that you did have a network of support.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2019
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You have had more than your for fair share of sadness. I hope that life has improved for you and your extended family. It was nice to read that you did have a network of support.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind thoughts and 5 star review. My life is much happier.
Kind regards.
Comment from royowen
Desertion is an apt word for what your father did. I don't think I could have ever deserted my family, I guess I got the strength from God, but my heart bleeds for you, this is more than any child should endure. Children deserve all the love, devotion and kindness a parent can give, one not only destroys one generation, but the ones to come. Beautifully written, I feel for you. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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Desertion is an apt word for what your father did. I don't think I could have ever deserted my family, I guess I got the strength from God, but my heart bleeds for you, this is more than any child should endure. Children deserve all the love, devotion and kindness a parent can give, one not only destroys one generation, but the ones to come. Beautifully written, I feel for you. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 10-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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Thanks so much Roy for your understanding and caring thoughts. It wasn't easy but with faith and family I got through it. Now, fortunately even though some sad memories linger I have a wonderful loving husband and family. Thanks for reading.
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With God all things are possible, I?m so glad things have worked out.
