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Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "St. Louis Chapter 17 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
14 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
Everything looked peachy-keen to me, and you know I'd tell you if it were otherwise. *smile* I'm evil that way. hahaha
This was one of your best chapters that I think I've read. It flowed beautifully. The characters were clear and distinct and I could always tell who was doing what. My 'flow' was never interrupted and it was a pleasant and enjoyable read. Thanks so much!
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Barbara,
Everything looked peachy-keen to me, and you know I'd tell you if it were otherwise. *smile* I'm evil that way. hahaha
This was one of your best chapters that I think I've read. It flowed beautifully. The characters were clear and distinct and I could always tell who was doing what. My 'flow' was never interrupted and it was a pleasant and enjoyable read. Thanks so much!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Coming from you this review is extra special. I just might frame it. LOL
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hahahaha
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
There is a lot going on in this part, Barbara, it's quite scary stuff. Now that they've found Donny's body so far away. What on earth was Megan into? I loved the way you managed to cleverly stop Logan or Mac coming out the winner in the card game, that would have riled the loser, lol! Well done, my friend, you keep the story going on high intensity yet still manage to add the humour too. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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There is a lot going on in this part, Barbara, it's quite scary stuff. Now that they've found Donny's body so far away. What on earth was Megan into? I loved the way you managed to cleverly stop Logan or Mac coming out the winner in the card game, that would have riled the loser, lol! Well done, my friend, you keep the story going on high intensity yet still manage to add the humour too. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Yep! We played poker much in service. I think you are doing a good job on this write. I see it heading toward possible marriage in the future, Has anyone looked under the sisters; bed for the phone or did she have it with her when things went down?
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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Yep! We played poker much in service. I think you are doing a good job on this write. I see it heading toward possible marriage in the future, Has anyone looked under the sisters; bed for the phone or did she have it with her when things went down?
Comment Written 19-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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I have no clue where this phone is. LOL I guess I'd better hurry and figure it out. LOL Thank you for the encouraging review.
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Everything is always under the bed. LOL.
Comment from tfawcus
The poker game is an interesting device for showing different facets of your characters. It seems that this chapter is something of a lull before the storm. Good pacing and balance. Looking forward to the next part.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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The poker game is an interesting device for showing different facets of your characters. It seems that this chapter is something of a lull before the storm. Good pacing and balance. Looking forward to the next part.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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Things are building up to some big stuff. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
There's so many loose ends confronting Logan, Mac, Bill, Jose' and co. Many clues, a couple of suspicious suspects, but nothing concrete, and another dead body has turned up in one of Megan's boyfriends in Donny Carton. A great episode Barbara. Excellent scribing, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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There's so many loose ends confronting Logan, Mac, Bill, Jose' and co. Many clues, a couple of suspicious suspects, but nothing concrete, and another dead body has turned up in one of Megan's boyfriends in Donny Carton. A great episode Barbara. Excellent scribing, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your continued support.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Barbara, your work never disappoints. You can never go wrong with great story telling coupled with good characters and dialogue, it's a recipe for success every time. I enjoyed as always. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Hello Barbara, your work never disappoints. You can never go wrong with great story telling coupled with good characters and dialogue, it's a recipe for success every time. I enjoyed as always. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, This is a great new chapter, and well written. Yes, the plot is indeed thickening after they've found the body of Donny Carlton. I think you handle this story very well. Looking forward to what's next.
Just a minor thing: Can we work together and make this work?" I think one of the 'work' has to be changed. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Hi Barbara, This is a great new chapter, and well written. Yes, the plot is indeed thickening after they've found the body of Donny Carlton. I think you handle this story very well. Looking forward to what's next.
Just a minor thing: Can we work together and make this work?" I think one of the 'work' has to be changed. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 18-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. I will see what I can do about one of those 'what's'
Comment from Thomas Bowling
The mystery builds and tension increases. Good chapter. I am interested in seeing where your story goes. You are a talented writer. Your stories are always readable.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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The mystery builds and tension increases. Good chapter. I am interested in seeing where your story goes. You are a talented writer. Your stories are always readable.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Than
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My computer acted up and wouldn't allow me to input a response. Computers and I don't get along. Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I agree with the question What was Megan into?"
and another part that caught my attention
was-- when Bill walked into the room and hugged McKenzie. "For real?"
"We're not sure, but it looks like a possibility," answered Jose. "What brings an important guy like you to my humble abode, twice within twenty-four hours?"
And yes I also will be waiting for Megan's results.
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Hello Barb
I agree with the question What was Megan into?"
and another part that caught my attention
was-- when Bill walked into the room and hugged McKenzie. "For real?"
"We're not sure, but it looks like a possibility," answered Jose. "What brings an important guy like you to my humble abode, twice within twenty-four hours?"
And yes I also will be waiting for Megan's results.
Gert
Comment Written 17-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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I am waiting for Megan's autopsy results myself. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Well done once again. Great drama and suspense. NO spags at all. For some reason I can still review. I am wondering if someone has paid to keep me on Premier because the time is up unless Tom has given me an extension or something.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Well done once again. Great drama and suspense. NO spags at all. For some reason I can still review. I am wondering if someone has paid to keep me on Premier because the time is up unless Tom has given me an extension or something.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
