one snowy morning
a short story7 total reviews
Comment from Elljae
Great beginning. This seems as if it's going to be a story about magical things and leaves me wanting much more. I want to know what Alice's sister is going to say next and what will Alice say and do about the leprechaun and the pot of gold? How much gold is there? Really a Great way to start a story.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Great beginning. This seems as if it's going to be a story about magical things and leaves me wanting much more. I want to know what Alice's sister is going to say next and what will Alice say and do about the leprechaun and the pot of gold? How much gold is there? Really a Great way to start a story.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review. i was practicing my flash fiction that day, but i agree with you. Next one i will elaborate, haha, cheers
Comment from JudyE
What a great story. And perfectly believable. I didn't find any glitches and have no suggestions for improvement. Best of luck in the Sentence writing contest.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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What a great story. And perfectly believable. I didn't find any glitches and have no suggestions for improvement. Best of luck in the Sentence writing contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review and sparkly stars Judy. some readers wanted more info, but i thought leaving the story to the imagination might be fun, cheers.
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It all made perfect sense to me, or at least, I was happy with my interpretation of what happened. lol
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Thanks Judy, i feel better haha. i do like writing about those little dudes with their pots of gold. Have a great weekend, cheers.
Comment from w.j.debi
What a creative take on the contest. I certainly didn't expect the pot of gold and the leprechaun. What a happy surprise for the sisters. The cozy little cottage just got even cozier. Unless the leprechaun is the typical trickster his kind is known for. Hehehe.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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What a creative take on the contest. I certainly didn't expect the pot of gold and the leprechaun. What a happy surprise for the sisters. The cozy little cottage just got even cozier. Unless the leprechaun is the typical trickster his kind is known for. Hehehe.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review. I try to write at least one thing a day. Someone said to elaborate more, but I thought it was fun just to plant the scenario.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You set the magical scene here with surprise and joy and your snowy story gave me a tingle down my spine, I was left wanting more, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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You set the magical scene here with surprise and joy and your snowy story gave me a tingle down my spine, I was left wanting more, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review Dolly, it was a little glimpse ha ha.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I would have loved to have seen this developed a bit more. Some more suspense and drawing the plot out more. There's no word limit on the competition.
full~time free spirit and part time writer.- might be better to hyphenate part-time as you do with full-time.
On his feet were sturdy black shoes with shiny buckles. He stood proudly beside a black cauldron filled with shiny gold coins. - I would suggest maybe using gleaming or polished for buckle to avoid the repetition of shiny.
"Here you go Missy. My word is my bond. One pot of gold for you catching me unawares! - need closing speech marks here.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Hi there,
I would have loved to have seen this developed a bit more. Some more suspense and drawing the plot out more. There's no word limit on the competition.
full~time free spirit and part time writer.- might be better to hyphenate part-time as you do with full-time.
On his feet were sturdy black shoes with shiny buckles. He stood proudly beside a black cauldron filled with shiny gold coins. - I would suggest maybe using gleaming or polished for buckle to avoid the repetition of shiny.
"Here you go Missy. My word is my bond. One pot of gold for you catching me unawares! - need closing speech marks here.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review and suggestions. Just a little glimpse today, cheers.
Comment from Sugarray77
I really enjoyed reading this fantastical story of leprechauns, fairy woods, and buckets of gold. It is a wonderful entry for this prompt!! Well written.
Melissa
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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I really enjoyed reading this fantastical story of leprechauns, fairy woods, and buckets of gold. It is a wonderful entry for this prompt!! Well written.
Melissa
Comment Written 17-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thanks for your encouraging review, just a little fun, cheers.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a complete story beginning with the appropriate sentence. The story progresses in a fluid and logical manner making for an easy read. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a complete story beginning with the appropriate sentence. The story progresses in a fluid and logical manner making for an easy read. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the insightful review, it was just a little fun today, cheers.
