The Blowing Wind Of Salt
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Comment from LeannaP
Oh nice! How fun.
I love the animated blinds.
It helps to bring forth clarity in your words.
Nice.
This resonated with me and I'm sure, with others.
Great job!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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Oh nice! How fun.
I love the animated blinds.
It helps to bring forth clarity in your words.
Nice.
This resonated with me and I'm sure, with others.
Great job!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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thank you
Comment from Mackenzie Schmidt
Your Poem Mist of Sea Salt fit the qualifications for the two line poem contest. The Picture elevated the message of the poem. I would suggest capitalizing all the words in the title and changing the name to be more symbolic of the feeling you get when you breathe in the misty sea salt, Other than that Your poem was, Well Done!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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Your Poem Mist of Sea Salt fit the qualifications for the two line poem contest. The Picture elevated the message of the poem. I would suggest capitalizing all the words in the title and changing the name to be more symbolic of the feeling you get when you breathe in the misty sea salt, Other than that Your poem was, Well Done!
Comment Written 13-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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thank you so very much for helping me
Comment from Ogden
That's a very inviting seaside scene described in your two-liner. I thought I could feel the breeze, and taste the salt.
Good luck in the contest.
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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That's a very inviting seaside scene described in your two-liner. I thought I could feel the breeze, and taste the salt.
Good luck in the contest.
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 13-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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thank you
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You're very welcome.
Comment from rjuselius
aàaawwee, this is such a sweetheart of a poem dear anonymous! i think it should do well in the contest. a very beautiful piece of poetry!
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
rebekka xxx
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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aàaawwee, this is such a sweetheart of a poem dear anonymous! i think it should do well in the contest. a very beautiful piece of poetry!
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
rebekka xxx
Comment Written 13-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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thank you very kindly
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and
presentation, Donette.
-The syllable count and
end rhyme are good,
as well as the imagery.
-Effective alliteration, as well.
-You paint a vivid word picture.
-You are missing the internal
rhyme, but otherwise it is
a good entry.
-Look at the example in the
prompt for the basic idea.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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-Very nice image and
presentation, Donette.
-The syllable count and
end rhyme are good,
as well as the imagery.
-Effective alliteration, as well.
-You paint a vivid word picture.
-You are missing the internal
rhyme, but otherwise it is
a good entry.
-Look at the example in the
prompt for the basic idea.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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thank you so very much i did change that and for your help
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You are welcome.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
What a sensational portrayal with this living picture. The picture is exquisite. The few words you have chosen convey your message quite succinctly.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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What a sensational portrayal with this living picture. The picture is exquisite. The few words you have chosen convey your message quite succinctly.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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thank you kindly
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your two-line poem is vividly descriptive. Here's why I gave a 3: (1) The essence poem should have end rhyme. "Waves" and "today" don't rhyme. (2) It should also have internal rhyme. It doesn't.
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Your two-line poem is vividly descriptive. Here's why I gave a 3: (1) The essence poem should have end rhyme. "Waves" and "today" don't rhyme. (2) It should also have internal rhyme. It doesn't.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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thank you so much for helping me
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I am SO glad to know I helped you! :-)
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I'd love to be right there. I can picture the scene with the curtains being blown open and that lovely fragrance of sea salt penetrating the air. You've set the scene beautifully with just a few well placed words. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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I'd love to be right there. I can picture the scene with the curtains being blown open and that lovely fragrance of sea salt penetrating the air. You've set the scene beautifully with just a few well placed words. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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thank you so very much
Comment from Therese Caron
Your words are perfect at conjuring up a visit to the ocean, my favorite place on earth. The blowing curtains add a perfect touch, and the walkway invites you to head right to the water. Perfect two line poem.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Your words are perfect at conjuring up a visit to the ocean, my favorite place on earth. The blowing curtains add a perfect touch, and the walkway invites you to head right to the water. Perfect two line poem.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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thank you
Comment from jenintorre
This is a really great two line poem. I love the artwork that you have chosen and your words describe it so well. Nice one. Good luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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This is a really great two line poem. I love the artwork that you have chosen and your words describe it so well. Nice one. Good luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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thank you