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A '5-7-5 Bye Bye Blackbird' Contest Entry9 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Bye bye blackbird contest.
Your story of the attaching Mockingbird is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Bye bye blackbird contest.
Your story of the attaching Mockingbird is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this 5-7-5 that meets the requirements for the contest. Yes, those little creatures are
VERY protective, Get too close to the babies -- wish you were wearing a helmet!
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this 5-7-5 that meets the requirements for the contest. Yes, those little creatures are
VERY protective, Get too close to the babies -- wish you were wearing a helmet!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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LOL! Don't cha just..?!! ;) :) Thanx for the 'relatability', Janice, and have a great week ahead! ;) Yvette
Comment from Ogden
After reading and re-reading your poem, I couldn't make heads of tails of it. I know mocking birds can't fly very high, so I had my doubts about them having an air force, but then I saw your notes that justified my skepticism, and now I'm okay with the poem. (I do like the girl in the illustration, but I wish she would turn around.)
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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After reading and re-reading your poem, I couldn't make heads of tails of it. I know mocking birds can't fly very high, so I had my doubts about them having an air force, but then I saw your notes that justified my skepticism, and now I'm okay with the poem. (I do like the girl in the illustration, but I wish she would turn around.)
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Thank you.
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Don't mention it.
:)
Don
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Great job on 'n' alliteration with 'nobly' and 'nesting' and 'niche.' I think it is funny to personify mockingbirds as being part of the Air Force, but it is not too far a stretch after a moment's thought! Funny photo, too, (well, probably not for the girl in it). Great entry!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Great job on 'n' alliteration with 'nobly' and 'nesting' and 'niche.' I think it is funny to personify mockingbirds as being part of the Air Force, but it is not too far a stretch after a moment's thought! Funny photo, too, (well, probably not for the girl in it). Great entry!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Sallyo
Good one! I like the mock-reporter tone. We have plovers and magpies swooping at up. The stupidity of it is that if they didn't do that we wouldn't even know they had young!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Good one! I like the mock-reporter tone. We have plovers and magpies swooping at up. The stupidity of it is that if they didn't do that we wouldn't even know they had young!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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lol! Thank you, SallyO!!
Comment from lauralumummu
What a clever choice of words in your well-written haiku poem. Thanks for the information about this interesting bird. All the best in the contest, Laura
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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What a clever choice of words in your well-written haiku poem. Thanks for the information about this interesting bird. All the best in the contest, Laura
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the mocking bird attacking the girl when she comes too close to the nest without probably knowing about the nest that is there.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the mocking bird attacking the girl when she comes too close to the nest without probably knowing about the nest that is there.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from kahpot
An excellent 5-7-5 poem for this prompt with great chosen artwork, your notes "Watch a determined mockingbird attack this guy..." not sure if the photo suits that description-(girl) best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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An excellent 5-7-5 poem for this prompt with great chosen artwork, your notes "Watch a determined mockingbird attack this guy..." not sure if the photo suits that description-(girl) best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Evan Baughfman
This is a humorous, little haiku. I like your use of hyperbole when comparing the bird's actions to a military strike.
My mother is afraid of birds. Your attached photograph would certainly give her nightmares!
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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This is a humorous, little haiku. I like your use of hyperbole when comparing the bird's actions to a military strike.
My mother is afraid of birds. Your attached photograph would certainly give her nightmares!
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you!
