The French Letter
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That could be a problem, they seem to be excellent trackers. I hope Helen knows what she's doing going to her aunt's place, it could get her into trouble. I know she wouldn't like that! There is a lot of tension in this part, Tony, and a bit of a worry as to whether their mission will succeed! Well done, my friend, another excellent part. xxx Sandra
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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That could be a problem, they seem to be excellent trackers. I hope Helen knows what she's doing going to her aunt's place, it could get her into trouble. I know she wouldn't like that! There is a lot of tension in this part, Tony, and a bit of a worry as to whether their mission will succeed! Well done, my friend, another excellent part. xxx Sandra
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Again, thank you. As you will find out shortly, things go from bad to worse for this foolhardy pair of adventurers! They'd have done better to cruise the Caribbean. LOL
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Another good addition to this story Tony from - the winding ribbon of road - through to Helen's stand against Bistro animal trophy as she stands up against hunting. Good read,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Another good addition to this story Tony from - the winding ribbon of road - through to Helen's stand against Bistro animal trophy as she stands up against hunting. Good read,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thanks, Valda. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Pam Norris
I was intrigued from the start. Wanting to know more about the characters and how they came to be in their current situation.
I found myself wanting to read on to see if they would make it and what hazards they might face,
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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I was intrigued from the start. Wanting to know more about the characters and how they came to be in their current situation.
I found myself wanting to read on to see if they would make it and what hazards they might face,
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Thanks, Pam. I appreciate your review and kind comments. The next chapter is now posted, if you are interested. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-An excellent chapter, Tony, that continues
with Helen and Charles in their snow tunnel.
-The imagery is vivid as you describe various scenes.
-You also include a bit of humor here and
there, like "The sky is falling," although
Helen didn't appreciate it.
-The reference to Bisto is appreciated,
and I am glad you are reminding us of him.
-Helen seems to have a reasonable plan since
her aunt is conveniently not too far away,
but they just have to get there first.
-We are reminded at the end that as easy as she
makes it sound, there are still obstacles to deal with,
including detection, police, and a sprained ankle.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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-An excellent chapter, Tony, that continues
with Helen and Charles in their snow tunnel.
-The imagery is vivid as you describe various scenes.
-You also include a bit of humor here and
there, like "The sky is falling," although
Helen didn't appreciate it.
-The reference to Bisto is appreciated,
and I am glad you are reminding us of him.
-Helen seems to have a reasonable plan since
her aunt is conveniently not too far away,
but they just have to get there first.
-We are reminded at the end that as easy as she
makes it sound, there are still obstacles to deal with,
including detection, police, and a sprained ankle.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Thanks, Pam. I appreciate your comments and the sixth star. All good wishes, Tony.
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You are very welcome and deserving, Tony!
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
I was hoping the markhor would reappear in the story
and tie many aspects of present and past together again.
Well done.
Invisibility is their only hope, but the markhor has generations
of instinct and experience in its favor.
Of course, our two intrepid travelers have the presence of Helen in their favor.
Charles is rather quick-witted (or as Helen would likely say, dim-witted)
despite the effects of lack of ventilation. :)
All-in-all a marvelous continuation of the story.
Robert
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Hello Tony,
I was hoping the markhor would reappear in the story
and tie many aspects of present and past together again.
Well done.
Invisibility is their only hope, but the markhor has generations
of instinct and experience in its favor.
Of course, our two intrepid travelers have the presence of Helen in their favor.
Charles is rather quick-witted (or as Helen would likely say, dim-witted)
despite the effects of lack of ventilation. :)
All-in-all a marvelous continuation of the story.
Robert
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Thanks, Robert. These intrepid travellers may be glad of the light from your six stars if they embark on a night journey. Appreciated, as always.
Comment from JudyE
I'm glad you didn't have the hero shot. That might have thrown a spanner in the works.
One tiny point: In the following, "Am I? Because of the likes of him, markhors are an endangered species." I turned to have one last look, but the beast had disappeared. - it seems a bit as though Charlies is saying 'Am I?...' I might have put 'I turned to have one last look' as a new paragraph.
Cheers
Judy
I'd place 'I turned to have...' as a new paragraph. Run on, in the way it is, it makes it seem as though Charles is saying 'Am I?...'
"Am I? Because of the likes of him, markhors are an endangered species." I turned to have one last look, but the beast had disappeared.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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I'm glad you didn't have the hero shot. That might have thrown a spanner in the works.
One tiny point: In the following, "Am I? Because of the likes of him, markhors are an endangered species." I turned to have one last look, but the beast had disappeared. - it seems a bit as though Charlies is saying 'Am I?...' I might have put 'I turned to have one last look' as a new paragraph.
Cheers
Judy
I'd place 'I turned to have...' as a new paragraph. Run on, in the way it is, it makes it seem as though Charles is saying 'Am I?...'
"Am I? Because of the likes of him, markhors are an endangered species." I turned to have one last look, but the beast had disappeared.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Thanks, Judy. I?ve altered that now. Was trying to avoid the one-sentence paragraph but can see that it?s probably justified here. I appreciate the sixth star. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I was surprised by the short length of this chapter, Tony. Helen's plan sounds like it will work. Maybe when they get to her aunt's home, they will find out the answer to the mystery of the French Letter. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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I was surprised by the short length of this chapter, Tony. Helen's plan sounds like it will work. Maybe when they get to her aunt's home, they will find out the answer to the mystery of the French Letter. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 02-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Thanks, Jan. Yes, a bit shorter than usual. Most are between 1000 and 1500 words. This was at the lower end. I edited quite a bit out before posting.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am glad it was a markhor. I feared it was the enemy. I guess Helen's plan is as good as any. I know it will bring about some interesting reading. You already know I like this story.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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I am glad it was a markhor. I feared it was the enemy. I guess Helen's plan is as good as any. I know it will bring about some interesting reading. You already know I like this story.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Very many thanks for another six star review, Barbara. Always appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Mistydawn
I thought his joke was rather funny, made me laugh. I guess it wouldn't be as funny if your the one under the avalanche. A heck of a way to wake up for sure. The chapter is well-written, very interesting. I do hope they make it to safety. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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I thought his joke was rather funny, made me laugh. I guess it wouldn't be as funny if your the one under the avalanche. A heck of a way to wake up for sure. The chapter is well-written, very interesting. I do hope they make it to safety. Nicely done.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Thanks. I appreciate your review. I?m rather hoping they make it to safety, too! Otherwise I?m short of my two main characters! LOL
Comment from sunnilicious
"Expecting to wake up dead," that's like an oxymoronic statement. Hahahahaha. The story has ramped up to more action and drama. I am sitting on the edge. Well thought out. Clearly written. Good narration mixed with dialogue. Keep up the great work. God bless you :)
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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"Expecting to wake up dead," that's like an oxymoronic statement. Hahahahaha. The story has ramped up to more action and drama. I am sitting on the edge. Well thought out. Clearly written. Good narration mixed with dialogue. Keep up the great work. God bless you :)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Thanks very much for your review, Alicia. Enjoy those donuts! All good wishes, Tony
