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Viewing comments for Chapter 91 "Gone to Ground"
A Novel

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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I'm back!! Well, you haven't been sitting on your backside doing nothing, have you?? Goodness me! I have some catching up to do. This was a great part, Tony. The descriptions of them digging out a tunnel to hide and survive in was extremely well done. I'm giving this, and probably the others, a virtual 6 because I want to give this weeks one a six. (having already glanced at it!!) I've so man stories to catch up on. Well done with this part, at least this way I get to read the next part straight away! :)) Sandra xxxx

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
    Great to hear from you again, Sandra. I hope you had a thoroughly good holiday. I appreciate your generous comments about the descriptions here. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Sankey
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I can see some areas of highlighting over the fonts I have had that before probably needs correcting. Good chapter. Interesting geography and elements lesson as well.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Geoffrey. I appreciate your review and comments. Someone else mentioned this highlighting problem. It doesn't show up on my computer or iPhone, so I"m not sure what to do about it. Best wishes, Tony
reply by Sankey on 01-Nov-2019
    Have a look in the fonts selection or colour either of font or background. It drove me nuts. I think I managed to get rid of it eventually.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019
    Thanks for that. I'll give it a go.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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snowploughs (snowplows-at least in the US)

Blood swamped the flower as he slumped (floor--I hate bloody flowers)

small, straight branch, about six feet long. (maybe a thin straight branch--six feet doesn't sound small)

stop water dripping down onto us,(either the water dripping--if it is happening, or water from dripping -- if it hasn't yet)

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
    Thanks, Debbie. I?ll consider those suggestions. I appreciate your close reading and input.
Comment from rspoet
Exceptional
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Hello Tony,
An excellent chapter that puts the reality of the scene and the danger of the area and mission into sharp focus. One had to expect that people would die at some point in this "operation." At least Helen didn't lose her sense of humor.
The descriptions and the sense of unease and instability set the mood very well. RAF training comes in handy, even after many years.
Will be interesting to see how they get out of this mess.
Well done
Robert



 Comment Written 30-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
    Thanks, Robert. Nothing like a bit of melodrama to liven things up. Now I?ve got to find a way out of this mess. Appreciate the extra star. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Mastery
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Hello my friend. I continue to enjoy your story each time I can read some of it. Your imagery continues to amaze, like:
"Shadowy figures stumbled here and there, scarcely visible in the whiteout conditions. Some were waving their arms, beckoning the traffic through."

And: " The windscreen shattered, and his head jerked back. I saw a hole above his left eye, surrounded by curled vestiges of skin like the petals of a wilted daisy. Blood swamped the flower as he slumped forward over the steering wheel."

Good stuff, my friend. :) Bob

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
    Thanks, Bob. Good of you to drop by. I appreciate your comments and the sixth star. All good wishes, Tony.
reply by Mastery on 31-Oct-2019
    Same to you, my friend. :) Bob
Comment from lyenochka
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Wow! What a scary chapter with all kinds of dangers attacking our poor Helen and Charles. Glad that Charles had all that RAF survival experience. (maybe a little biograhical?) I'm sure the Helen is quite impressed and hope her leg is okay.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
    Thanks, Helen. You?re right. I did excavate a snow hole once. Not a very comfortable night! All the best, Tony.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-This was an excellent chapter, Tony, from start to finish.
-The descriptions were detailed and vivid.
-You involve us in the scenes in the tunnel and in the snow.
-There is good foreshadowing in the beginning
with Hassim's comments about driving conditions,
and Helen's observation about the tunnel being eerie.
-The scene with the minibus was most unfortunate,
but Helen and Charles managed to escape, and now they
have to deal with the icy cold wind and snow.
-This is written so well, I did not want to stop reading.
-Every minute counted before they would feel the
consequences of being out in this too long.
-Charles definitely had his wits about him,
and that RAF training certainly came in handy!
-I don't think Helen was too sure about the whole
process, but eventually, they were set for the
long night ahead, and possibly more.


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 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
    Thanks, Pam. Glad this chapter worked well for you. I was a bit uncertain about it. I appreciate the sixth star. All good wishes, Tony.
reply by Pam (respa) on 31-Oct-2019
    You are very welcome and deserving, Tony. You did a great job with it.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Hassim isn't very reassuring, just as well the tunnel was opened. Much drama in this chapter Tony, and Charles comes through with flying colours. Good on him.LOL
cheers.
valda

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
    Thanks, Valda. Poor Hassim doesn?t have a very large part in this tale.
Comment from AvL
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Like the best of Hemingway's prose, this chunk of text by tfawcus engages the reader immediately in an intriguing plot. His diction is spot-on ... pellucid, I daresay; and the dialogue between our hero and Helen is eminently believable. The scene in which they collaborate to excavate a shelter-cave in the snow is especially well-done. Kudos!


AvL

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
    Very many thanks for this highly supportive and encouraging review, and for the sixth star. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from sunnilicious
Exceptional
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Another great novel installment. You are well thought out. Clearly written as you're story is filled with many intricate details. Good presentation with synopsis from last installment. Also, good character reference list. Good flow of storytelling. Great narration. Good dialogue. Nice work :)

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
    Thanks for another most encouraging review. Delighted that you thought this chapter worth a sixth star. Best wishes, Tony