Perfection
An Acrostic- Loop Poem16 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This acrostic loop poem about a lack of PERFECTION, follows the vertical formatting and finds that one's need to be without flaw becomes a dig that no one feels but us.
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This acrostic loop poem about a lack of PERFECTION, follows the vertical formatting and finds that one's need to be without flaw becomes a dig that no one feels but us.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is nothing to fear, but fear itself! This is a clever acrostic/loop poem, neatly presented showing us that your flaw is fear, we all suffer, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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There is nothing to fear, but fear itself! This is a clever acrostic/loop poem, neatly presented showing us that your flaw is fear, we all suffer, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a well written poem which is a combination of acrostic and loop poems. Best wishes in the contest with this skillful entry, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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This is a well written poem which is a combination of acrostic and loop poems. Best wishes in the contest with this skillful entry, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 25-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a very good poem for the I Am Not Perfect contest.
I think we all have a somewhat flawed perfection.
Well written, well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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I think this is a very good poem for the I Am Not Perfect contest.
I think we all have a somewhat flawed perfection.
Well written, well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
Excellent poem. Congratulations on writing such a difficult poem. You were very clever to write a poem of this style. You didn't need an image to show how great the poem is. Well penned, great job. Good luck in the contest. ~Brenda
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Excellent poem. Congratulations on writing such a difficult poem. You were very clever to write a poem of this style. You didn't need an image to show how great the poem is. Well penned, great job. Good luck in the contest. ~Brenda
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Jesse James Doty
"Perfection" is amazing. An acrostic that loops, as well. What an achievement. From the first line, you have me hooked. I like the term, "clouded expectation". It is an unusual way to describe it but, I 'get' what you mean. Then the term, "brightens" sounds positive, but your rejection is your "darkest flaw", so, I now, can see the opposites you use to describe your features. Very creative. Another phrase I like is "Imagination blinding my objective". You are articulate with your descriptions, which add flavor to the piece. So, your imagination blinds you from noticing rejection as your greatest flaw. Thus, you possess flawed perfection. I like the way you lead me through, and end up, with the last word being, the title and theme of the poem. Well written with a revealing personal message. I enjoyed reading this a lot. Thank you for sharing, and for putting in the effort to explain, your main flaw, through the means of an acrostic loop poem.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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"Perfection" is amazing. An acrostic that loops, as well. What an achievement. From the first line, you have me hooked. I like the term, "clouded expectation". It is an unusual way to describe it but, I 'get' what you mean. Then the term, "brightens" sounds positive, but your rejection is your "darkest flaw", so, I now, can see the opposites you use to describe your features. Very creative. Another phrase I like is "Imagination blinding my objective". You are articulate with your descriptions, which add flavor to the piece. So, your imagination blinds you from noticing rejection as your greatest flaw. Thus, you possess flawed perfection. I like the way you lead me through, and end up, with the last word being, the title and theme of the poem. Well written with a revealing personal message. I enjoyed reading this a lot. Thank you for sharing, and for putting in the effort to explain, your main flaw, through the means of an acrostic loop poem.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Wow! your review and encouraging comments are just wonderful, sadly the "CEC" did not like (rejection) being a flaw, I have changed a couple of words in this poem to try and satisfy them, if not I shall take it out of the prompt and return it to the original post, I would like your opinion on this as I want to stay true to this/the best and most helpful review I have recieved
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My opinion is, it is great just the way it is. If I were you, I'd stay true to my muse and forget about the 'prompt' if they don't like it the way it is. But that's me. You do what you feel in your gut is right.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from brenda bickers
Oh this is such a neat little poem.
I have not tried this form of poetry yet, but when I do I hope it will be as good as this one.
Thank you for sharing it.
Brenda.x
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Oh this is such a neat little poem.
I have not tried this form of poetry yet, but when I do I hope it will be as good as this one.
Thank you for sharing it.
Brenda.x
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging review, and do try this it is challenging and fun
Comment from Gloria ....
Author such a fantastic entry into the I am not perfect contest. Perfectionism is a terrible affliction as it can lead to absolutely never getting anything finished. You've added an additional touch of OCD by using not only an acrostic, but also a loop poem which lends some humour to the flaw. lol
Best of luck to you in the voting booth. This is most clever.
Gloria
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Author such a fantastic entry into the I am not perfect contest. Perfectionism is a terrible affliction as it can lead to absolutely never getting anything finished. You've added an additional touch of OCD by using not only an acrostic, but also a loop poem which lends some humour to the flaw. lol
Best of luck to you in the voting booth. This is most clever.
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written acrostic poem about perfection. To be
Perfect in every way is extremely hard work. If we are all perfect without any flaws there will be nothing to work on.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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A very well-written acrostic poem about perfection. To be
Perfect in every way is extremely hard work. If we are all perfect without any flaws there will be nothing to work on.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This certainly meets the requirements of the contest along with a plus being the Loop type poem you have created. A very flowing narrative. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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This certainly meets the requirements of the contest along with a plus being the Loop type poem you have created. A very flowing narrative. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much
