Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Ah, Cindy, those two small dragons, the dragoyles, are just too fun. They are up to a lot of fun and a lot of mischief. I still love your story and I'm looking forward to what is next. All best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019

Thanks. I'm so glad you're still enjoying it.

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Good personification presented. The dragoyles seem to be little wimps. A fun addition to the Dragon ensemble. Holds interest throughout. Well done.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019

Thanks. I expect they'll be a little more feisty when they get over their bellyaches. LOL Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Good illustration for presentation. Great storytelling. Good narration. Good dialogue. Hatchlings should be welcomed not questioned. I liked the personification between humans and fictional animals. Nice work.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019

Thanks. I'm glad you liked my story.

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

I've only read one other chapter but I'm getting quite fond of these dragons.

I picked up a few points but ignore them if you wish:
Some can do a lot worse than that," said Aaron. If you want to eat a mushroom, you better show it to me first." - speech marks needed before 'If'

Red, Green, Sky, White, and Pink huddled together in the lower branches of pine tree - should be 'the pine tree'

Minutes later Aaron found himself again - comma after 'later'

Best wishes
Judy

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019

Glad you like my dragons. Thanks for catching the spag. I'll fix it right now.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

The dragoyles sound cute but mischievous. They should be a fun addition to your story, Cindy. You did a good job with the discussions about ideas/words the dragons don't know. Thanks for sharing, Respectfully with Love, Jan

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019

Thanks. This was a fun chapter to write.

Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

This chapter continues to do a good job in delineating the different characters of each in this tribe of dragons, and your use of humour is great. The idea of the dragons not understanding the concept of laughter is hilarious! This makes a fine interlude in the main action of your story.

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019

Thanks! I'm so glad you liked this fun chapter.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Interesting episode. How sad that dragons don't laugh. Life must be so different... can't imagine not ever laughing. And too bad they didn't heed the warning about the mushroom. You'd think they would trust an elder, someone who was not just hatched! LOL! Well, they'll listen next time! :)

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019

Thanks. They'll figure things out quickly. Sometimes the young just have to learn the hard way. They're not so good at listening.

Comment from damommy

Exceptional

Poor little guys. You do so well showing each individuals thoughts and feelings. They are so distinctive. Who knew they wouldn't have any concept of laughter or pain. Aaron has his hands full just teaching them about the world around them.

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019

Thanks for the six! I think they've figured out that some things hurt, especially Black, but sickness is something they've never seen or experienced. Now they know. I think at least some will develop a sense of humor.

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

Cindy, you're great at character delineation, even when it comes to dragons. You showed the determination of the dragoyles to perfection. It's a stroke of genius that the dragons have no sense of humour. Made for an entertaining write. Happy that Black is being accepted a little more by the others.

Very well written chapter.

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019

Thanks. I see them figuring things out quickly, like small children. Some were hatched with no sense at all! The dragoyles will be more careful what they eat, but they'll keep that determination.

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

This was a fun chapter, well-written, interesting. It allowed the readers to get to know the dragons better. I feel so sorry for the two newest additions, bellyaches on their first day. Glad black and the others are finally getting along. I love your artwork it's so ugly that it's kind of cute.

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019

Thanks. I thought the artwork suited, since the little dragoyles are so ugly they're cute. Yes, this silly chapter was to let the readers get to know the dragons better.

reply by Mistydawn on 27-Oct-2019

I really like Pink. She's a no-nonsense take charge kind of gal.