So Full
Gluttony or Self Indulgence?16 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'So Full", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With craft and well-honed skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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'So Full", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With craft and well-honed skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
Comment from patcelaw
We as a people tend to eat too much food. Since being on my diet and having lat 93 pounds, I no longer eat much food and am usually quite satisfied.
Patricia
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We as a people tend to eat too much food. Since being on my diet and having lat 93 pounds, I no longer eat much food and am usually quite satisfied.
Patricia
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
I enjoyed this little piece. The image certainly goes well with your poem. You said so much with just three lines. Yes many of us overeat (but don't like to admit it). Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. ~Brenda
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I enjoyed this little piece. The image certainly goes well with your poem. You said so much with just three lines. Yes many of us overeat (but don't like to admit it). Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. ~Brenda
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
Comment from Mark D. R.
Miranda,
Your contest entry is so true to life, especially if eating at a buffet. However, I do have two stomachs - one for food and the other for desserts. Apparently, my dessert one is never filled enough (-;
Your selected illustration reinforces the eating problem - just too much AND on a big serving plate! And, you slyly you slipped in three 'ate's' into this foodie verse.
IMHO your presentation would have greater eye appeal if you increased your FS default font size. This, however, does not detract from how you wrote this 5-7-5 poem.
Good luck in the voting.
Mark
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Miranda,
Your contest entry is so true to life, especially if eating at a buffet. However, I do have two stomachs - one for food and the other for desserts. Apparently, my dessert one is never filled enough (-;
Your selected illustration reinforces the eating problem - just too much AND on a big serving plate! And, you slyly you slipped in three 'ate's' into this foodie verse.
IMHO your presentation would have greater eye appeal if you increased your FS default font size. This, however, does not detract from how you wrote this 5-7-5 poem.
Good luck in the voting.
Mark
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
Comment from Gail Denham
One of the rules of dieting is that you do not have to finish everything on the plate - you can leave some and walk away. That's a hard thing when you remember your mom saying "eat - there's starving children in china". Times I wanted to say "well, send these veggies to them."
Good poem
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One of the rules of dieting is that you do not have to finish everything on the plate - you can leave some and walk away. That's a hard thing when you remember your mom saying "eat - there's starving children in china". Times I wanted to say "well, send these veggies to them."
Good poem
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry contest.
Your short verse tells such a truth. I think we've all been there.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry contest.
Your short verse tells such a truth. I think we've all been there.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 21-Oct-2019
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Taken as seen, you have eaten enough and yet there is so much more. Well, if this is metaphoric, the message is the same and your picture shows a thousand words. When we just have had enough; enough is enough, right. Well done
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Taken as seen, you have eaten enough and yet there is so much more. Well, if this is metaphoric, the message is the same and your picture shows a thousand words. When we just have had enough; enough is enough, right. Well done
Comment Written 21-Oct-2019
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all syllables in this 5-7-5 about what
COULD be termed as gluttony. I am guilty of it often--the results of giving myself too-large portions, then eating more than I can comfortable hold!
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You have made excellent use of all syllables in this 5-7-5 about what
COULD be termed as gluttony. I am guilty of it often--the results of giving myself too-large portions, then eating more than I can comfortable hold!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2019
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the food on our plate sometimes seems too much and we are unable to finish it all and we start to feel full and bloated.
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the food on our plate sometimes seems too much and we are unable to finish it all and we start to feel full and bloated.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2019
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I've been there and I often think of my Mother's words, 'don't leave anything on your plate!' But if we are full we should not continue and now I often leave food, but I try not to waste it too. Few words, but a plateful of food to go with them, love Dolly x
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I've been there and I often think of my Mother's words, 'don't leave anything on your plate!' But if we are full we should not continue and now I often leave food, but I try not to waste it too. Few words, but a plateful of food to go with them, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Oct-2019
