A Bit Of Fluff
Just suck it up.9 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The poem does all that a poem should do. It rhymes, it flows, it lilts. Yet I have a feeling about the message that it is a tongue in cheek type of message and I am not privy to its meaning. Good picture. A bit of a mystery.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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The poem does all that a poem should do. It rhymes, it flows, it lilts. Yet I have a feeling about the message that it is a tongue in cheek type of message and I am not privy to its meaning. Good picture. A bit of a mystery.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Thanks for your review. No special meaning - just a lightweight bit of fluff to fit the contest brief - inconsequential. I save deep and meaningful for other poems.
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I look forward to those. Thanks for answering my question.
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I look forward to those. Thanks for answering my question.
Comment from poetwatch
And i thought I was metaphorical in hiding my meaning with in the words, author. i take my hat off to you. :) We all look for fluff within the boundary of our stuff, but, once in a while, a good cleaning out of all those dust bunnies gives us life to continue.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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And i thought I was metaphorical in hiding my meaning with in the words, author. i take my hat off to you. :) We all look for fluff within the boundary of our stuff, but, once in a while, a good cleaning out of all those dust bunnies gives us life to continue.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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It's a pity we have to break up the dust bunnies home. Under the bed, out of sight seems OK to me - I don't get asthma.
Comment from gudbjorg
A poet with a real sense of humour and fun. This flows with both a good rhyme and rhythm, bouncing us through a tongue-in-cheek poke at poetry contests that deserves to do well in the same! You certainly thought of and covered 'The most inconsequential, overlooked, insignificant, neglected thing you can think of' very effectively! Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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A poet with a real sense of humour and fun. This flows with both a good rhyme and rhythm, bouncing us through a tongue-in-cheek poke at poetry contests that deserves to do well in the same! You certainly thought of and covered 'The most inconsequential, overlooked, insignificant, neglected thing you can think of' very effectively! Well done!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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I love your review! Thank you. I didn't find any fluff when I put my tongue in my cheek - it was all in my navel.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the overlooked and neglected things we as poets and writers avoid to write about because it seems to ordinary and gross to interest anyone else.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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A very well-written poem about the overlooked and neglected things we as poets and writers avoid to write about because it seems to ordinary and gross to interest anyone else.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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We're all just dust in the wind. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Gail Denham
For sure these contests bring out the funny - even from under the bed. Or in the navel. Cute. Remember the story of the little boy who'd learned that we were made from dust by God - so he runs to mom - "Mom, come quick, there's someone either coming or going under the bed."
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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For sure these contests bring out the funny - even from under the bed. Or in the navel. Cute. Remember the story of the little boy who'd learned that we were made from dust by God - so he runs to mom - "Mom, come quick, there's someone either coming or going under the bed."
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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I liked your funny story about the child's comment to his mom.
Thanks for your review.
Comment from JLR
A great graphic, a muse with humor and a charming invitation to alow one to smile and reflect on the often overlooked and neglected little things in our lives. thanks for evoking humor at these little writing challenges.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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A great graphic, a muse with humor and a charming invitation to alow one to smile and reflect on the often overlooked and neglected little things in our lives. thanks for evoking humor at these little writing challenges.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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The world can be a big, bad, taking-itself-too-seriously place of darkness and horror. I laugh in its face as I slip into the abyss.
Comment from Patty Palmer
I guess a bit of fluff might not be important enough to give much thought to. I'm glad you were able to find some fluff when you needed it! You need a little fluff jar to collect it in.LOL
Good job!
Patty
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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I guess a bit of fluff might not be important enough to give much thought to. I'm glad you were able to find some fluff when you needed it! You need a little fluff jar to collect it in.LOL
Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Your suggestion of putting collected fluff in a jar reminds me of the historic home where I work. There we have a pebble jar, for putting little pebbles in that we find tracked into the house on people's shoes. These days a lot of shoes do not have smooth soles and the little pebbles from the driveway get stuck in people's ripple soles. It is amazing how quickly our jar fills up. The pebbles stuck on the bottom of shoes can damage the house's wooden floors.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Those bits of fluff are the bane of my life as we have a lot of dust on this island! My house is covered is sand from the Sarah desert! This is an unusual write and the ability to write about a speck of dust made me smile! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Those bits of fluff are the bane of my life as we have a lot of dust on this island! My house is covered is sand from the Sarah desert! This is an unusual write and the ability to write about a speck of dust made me smile! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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I'll remember to bring my bucket and spade if I come visiting !
It's nice you can smile about dust fluff.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a great entry for the writing prompt in terms of style and content. The rhyme scheme works well within the poem and you chose a most appropriate picture.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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This is a great entry for the writing prompt in terms of style and content. The rhyme scheme works well within the poem and you chose a most appropriate picture.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Thanks for reviewing, Susan.
