A Night of Passion
Sedoka Poem Contest Entry12 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Mystery poet, I gave you your 3rd vote.
There is a lot more to a relationship than passion..in time that weens off, so couples need to find other common ground ...things they like to do together.
Today people are just not willing to invest in a relationship ..the first obstacle and they are already ready to part ways.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Ciao Mystery poet, I gave you your 3rd vote.
There is a lot more to a relationship than passion..in time that weens off, so couples need to find other common ground ...things they like to do together.
Today people are just not willing to invest in a relationship ..the first obstacle and they are already ready to part ways.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review and support, Tempeste. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have a wonderful day.
Ron
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Sedoka about the man's only interest is sex no matter how tired we are that is their first priority and there is little we can do to change that we just have to play along.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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A very well-written Sedoka about the man's only interest is sex no matter how tired we are that is their first priority and there is little we can do to change that we just have to play along.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review and generous stars, Sandra. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
Ron
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your sedoka is very well-written and descriptive. The first stanza describes, for many women, the only-in-my-dreams scenario; the second
tells the bloomin' truth. LOL! Very amusing
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Your sedoka is very well-written and descriptive. The first stanza describes, for many women, the only-in-my-dreams scenario; the second
tells the bloomin' truth. LOL! Very amusing
Comment Written 13-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review and gracious stars, Janice. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
Comment from LyndaS
Ha! Ha! There isn't a woman on the planet who has not lived this moment! Way to nail this art form. Two different views indeed! LOVE the art that goes with this. A perfect Sedoka and funny as hell to boot. Thanks for making me laugh this morning. Excellent! Lynda
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Ha! Ha! There isn't a woman on the planet who has not lived this moment! Way to nail this art form. Two different views indeed! LOVE the art that goes with this. A perfect Sedoka and funny as hell to boot. Thanks for making me laugh this morning. Excellent! Lynda
Comment Written 12-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Wow, thank you so much for the great review and giant six, Lynda. I sure didn't plan on seeing one of those for this silliness. Made my day. Thank you. The pic is actually 2 different pics I found in a Google search and combined them. Have a fantastic rest of your weekend. Thank you again.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Gail Denham
Sad comment but I understand. Not necessarily boring, but with work and so much to do when one gets home, falling asleep in one's easy chair sounds more inviting. There, I've said it. However, that's behind me - at our age, we do fall asleep in our recliners. oi vey.
Good poem
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Sad comment but I understand. Not necessarily boring, but with work and so much to do when one gets home, falling asleep in one's easy chair sounds more inviting. There, I've said it. However, that's behind me - at our age, we do fall asleep in our recliners. oi vey.
Good poem
Comment Written 12-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Yes, after work, relaxing sometimes is better. Lol. Thank you for the excellent review, Gail.
Comment from Pantygynt
I have a sneaking suspicion that there just might be more than a grain of truth concealed between the lines of this sedoka.
Was it a katauta caught a daughter
or a tanka thank a wanker
when a stoker wrote sedoka on the slaughter of a broker?
Answer on one side of the paper only.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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I have a sneaking suspicion that there just might be more than a grain of truth concealed between the lines of this sedoka.
Was it a katauta caught a daughter
or a tanka thank a wanker
when a stoker wrote sedoka on the slaughter of a broker?
Answer on one side of the paper only.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Lol. Excellent review, Pantygynt. Thank you. Yeah, I think my wife thinks like this sometimes. Haha
Comment from JLR
Ouch, honest, unabashed, strained, eloquent truth telling. Captured in a balanced poetic style. Enjoy the fruits of your writing...may your weekend unfold with the magic if wonder and awe. Write on and write often.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Ouch, honest, unabashed, strained, eloquent truth telling. Captured in a balanced poetic style. Enjoy the fruits of your writing...may your weekend unfold with the magic if wonder and awe. Write on and write often.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review, JLR. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a structurally sound Sedoka with correct perspective change, line and syllable count. The content is interesting as it moves from the elation of that first date to the boredom evoked by familiarity years later. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a structurally sound Sedoka with correct perspective change, line and syllable count. The content is interesting as it moves from the elation of that first date to the boredom evoked by familiarity years later. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review and generous stars, MA. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece.
Comment from RodG
You certainly have addressed this special evening from two DIFFERENT perspectives--his and hers--in this sedoka. Light-hearted humor which certainly brightened my morning. Rod
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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You certainly have addressed this special evening from two DIFFERENT perspectives--his and hers--in this sedoka. Light-hearted humor which certainly brightened my morning. Rod
Comment Written 12-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Rod. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Romance starts with wine, candle light and soft music, makes a night of passion, but same routine gets boring with repetition, birthday celebration is different; life is there beyond romance; well said, well done.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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Romance starts with wine, candle light and soft music, makes a night of passion, but same routine gets boring with repetition, birthday celebration is different; life is there beyond romance; well said, well done.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Dr. Al. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
