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Poetry at it's finest.
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Comment from
Mystic Angel 7777
AMEN! The demise of the mortal body is not an ending but just a beginning. We were not meant to live on this earthly plane for long as our true home in heaven is where each eternity is spent. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
Comment from
Alex Rosel
I like your constant refrain repeated at the end of each stanza:
"Even after, that very last Breath!";
"You too can Live again and take in a large and generous Breath!";
"Even after that very, last, Breath of *Life!".
It's a very effective literary/poetic technique {smiles}.
Nicely structured {thumbs up}.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
Thanks Alex always a pleasure to work with you.
Have a Blessed Weekend.
Ricky
Comment from
kahpot
This story and notes though very sad is quite encouraging, I would how ever like to see the paragraph that starts "and finally" to be the last paragraph just before your word count, thank you very much for sharing this****kahpot
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
My pleasure to provide and produce this product.
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