Motivated
Turning tricks11 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Candy seems to be the way of the world from September to December around this nation. So many new things to try this year too. Funny poem with a bit of truth to it. Nice work. Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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Candy seems to be the way of the world from September to December around this nation. So many new things to try this year too. Funny poem with a bit of truth to it. Nice work. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
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Thanks.
Comment from moongirlwriter
Okay. . .this is interesting. Burying children alive doesn't quite do it for me the artwork is enchanting so I'm sure it works for some. The poem works with all the right counting and of course the candy at the end says it all.
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Okay. . .this is interesting. Burying children alive doesn't quite do it for me the artwork is enchanting so I'm sure it works for some. The poem works with all the right counting and of course the candy at the end says it all.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
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Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. I found your poem not only in compliance with the 5-7-5 style, but I also found it very amusing. You have identified the frenzy of seeking candy as blinding the children to the falling leaves. They can't help themselves as they walk right into the orange, brown, red and yellow abyss. Good luck in the contest.
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Hello mystery writer. I found your poem not only in compliance with the 5-7-5 style, but I also found it very amusing. You have identified the frenzy of seeking candy as blinding the children to the falling leaves. They can't help themselves as they walk right into the orange, brown, red and yellow abyss. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
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you're welcome
Comment from Ogden
What a tragic way to go, unseen under all those decaying leaves! That hardly ever happens.
(I can't figure out what the candy is doing in this poem.)
Ogden (Don)
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What a tragic way to go, unseen under all those decaying leaves! That hardly ever happens.
(I can't figure out what the candy is doing in this poem.)
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
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Trick or treaters go door to door getting candy on Halloween.
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The trick-or-treaters buried alive are fueled by candy?
Comment from Alex Rosel
Ha, ha! This is a neat Halloween 5-7-5 poem with a "twist".
You capture the time of year and the spirit of the eve of All Saints' Day well {smiles}.
Best of luck with this when the voting booth opens {smiles}.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Ha, ha! This is a neat Halloween 5-7-5 poem with a "twist".
You capture the time of year and the spirit of the eve of All Saints' Day well {smiles}.
Best of luck with this when the voting booth opens {smiles}.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness this is a fearful Halloween write filled with much horror! It actually sent a chill down my spine, but the candy gave me some relief! Love Dolly x
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Oh my goodness this is a fearful Halloween write filled with much horror! It actually sent a chill down my spine, but the candy gave me some relief! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
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Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
This was a fun one! Got me into the spirit of Halloween. Well done with the requirements. Sounds like a winner. I really like the last line which is the reason for it all, so to speak!
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This was a fun one! Got me into the spirit of Halloween. Well done with the requirements. Sounds like a winner. I really like the last line which is the reason for it all, so to speak!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
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Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
I gotta admit, I'm not a big fan of these images. *smile* Nasty, grimy, wet, decaying leaves covering children to the point of DEATH?! Yuck. Though it does fit the scary Halloween theme, I suppose. blech.
Good luck!
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Dear Mystery Writer,
I gotta admit, I'm not a big fan of these images. *smile* Nasty, grimy, wet, decaying leaves covering children to the point of DEATH?! Yuck. Though it does fit the scary Halloween theme, I suppose. blech.
Good luck!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
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Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. I really enjoyed reading it, and I liked your picture selection. My only concern was the last line. Doesn't fueled count as one syllable?
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. I really enjoyed reading it, and I liked your picture selection. My only concern was the last line. Doesn't fueled count as one syllable?
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
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Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent 5-7-5 poem for Halloween
with solid imagery of the candy-seeking children
buried by autumn's falling leaves.
Excellent picture for the poem
Good luck in the contest
Robert
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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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You've written an excellent 5-7-5 poem for Halloween
with solid imagery of the candy-seeking children
buried by autumn's falling leaves.
Excellent picture for the poem
Good luck in the contest
Robert
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
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Thank.
