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The Gardens at Weatherbury

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Comment from Ricky1024
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This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
    Thanx so much for your review on this chapter, Doctor Ricky -- so good to hear from you!! ;) Take care and have a great week ahead! ;) Yvette
reply by Ricky1024 on 14-Oct-2019
Comment from robyn corum
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Yvette,

I'm so glad you are continuing this story. It is simply delightful. The imagination shown in the creation is out of the box. *smile* These characters are just sooooo stinking FUN!

One note:
1.) He eyed me suspiciously as he stared for (a) few silent moments.

Thanks a bunch! Looking forward to more!

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
    Hey there, LadyR! ;) Thanx for the catch and for keeping up with Nicholas and all the shenanigans at the Gardens -- gonna try to stay up on things this time... ;) :) Yvette :)
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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Can I be bold enough to suggest the first paragraph is a run-on sentence?

From "Constantine to grin" is another.

"Stared for few silent moments" seems to be missing the word "a" to make the sentence read "Stared for a few silent moments".

Possibly in order to keep the entire sentence in the past tense make "Constantine huffed. Rolling his eyes, and elbowed Archie" to "Constantine huffed. He rolled his eyes and elbowed Archie".

These are mere suggestions so feel free to use any that may help or toss the whole lot.

Enjoyed this encounter between Archie and the Gardener. Archie is indeed an interesting character.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    Thank you for your review.
Comment from Nowhereman1
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Interesting story. It is very well written. You paint a vivid picture with your words and the story is entertaining. I am going to have to go and read the other chapters soon. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
    Look forward to hearing what you thought.... and glad you enjoyed the shenanigans of Nicholas and company ! ;) :) Have a great evening! ;) Yvette
Comment from royowen
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What a fun Place to be, in a garden with all the appropriate people in attendance Yvette, I can just imagine what it would be like there. Love the dialogue, with all the imagery deftly in place with its fascinating inhabitants on display, well done my friend, enjoyable read, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
    Glad you enjoyed the continued shenanigans of Nicholas and company, Roy -- and thanx for the review... Again: HAPPY BELATED BIRTHDAY!! ;) :) Yvette
reply by royowen on 12-Oct-2019
    Well done
Comment from Bill Pinder
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Alright! Another chapter about the magical gardens! That is a great name, "sir Archibald of the shed." This is a great book that I look forward to reading every time a chapter comes out. Thanks for sharing your magical gift.
Bill

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
    Glad you enjoyed the continued shenanigans of Nicholas and company, Bill -- always great to hear from you over here!! ;) :) Have a great evening! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written chapter. When there is mutual respect between the management and the workers it is always a pleasure to work together and everyone seems happy to be working.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    Oh, you're so right there, Sandra!! ;) :) Trying to get the whole 'respect' thing across with this chapter so thanx so much for catching it! ;) :) Take care over there - Yvette :)
Comment from lyenochka
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I like your pink armadillo! He's a character and I like the
snort that is " like the lower note of a saxophone. " Good characterization and I like the narrator's pleasant way of building up his relationship with him.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    You know, the little critters do 'snort' a bit when they're digging... cute (although their digging makes my husband CRAZY!!) but I thought it needed to be brought forward as a bit more musical and definitely not when he was digging...LOL! ;) :) Thanx for the review, Helen, and you take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
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Yvette, I'm glad you decided to write your 500 word chapters again. I'm still missing Maggie but Sir Archie is OK. Still, if I was the Groundskeeper and I had a pink Knight the nights would be painted rainbow colors. :) Thank you for this entertaining story.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    LOL!! ;) Rainbow, eh? I'll keep that in mind! :) And don't worry, I'm working toward some other installments... just trying to get over the 'blues' that moved in a couple of weeks ago -- I'm getting there!! ;) :) Take care over there, Jose, and have a wonderful evening! ;) Yvette
Comment from Rikki66
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I have been waiting, I thought you might be teaching and not writing so I was patient. Sir Archie seems to be a character to be watched and I think will help Nicholas into the cabinet.
Rikki

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    And you would be write -- the whole teaching gig is a bit of a bummer toward the end of the quarter, but grades are in and I'm breathing again! ;) :) LOL! Thanx for the review, Rikki, always so good to hear from you -- glad you enjoyed this chapter to the fun! ;) :) Yvette
reply by Rikki66 on 10-Oct-2019
    Your's is a welcome voice from the ether-net.
    Rikki


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