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Comment from Rikki66
Do they still suggest this errant process of birth control or do they have something more modern? This was well-conceived and well written.
RikkiLXXIII
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Do they still suggest this errant process of birth control or do they have something more modern? This was well-conceived and well written.
RikkiLXXIII
Comment Written 22-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Many thanks
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Truly welcome.
Rikki
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading this story. It is well written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest! I like this story.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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I have enjoyed reading this story. It is well written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest! I like this story.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thanks a lot
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You're welcome.
Comment from Mia Twysted
This made me laugh out loud. What a funny pun to include in your piece. I felt like I was sitting beside you while you just opened up and started telling the room a joke.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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This made me laugh out loud. What a funny pun to include in your piece. I felt like I was sitting beside you while you just opened up and started telling the room a joke.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much
Comment from Susan Morritt
This is a very clever piece of flash fiction. The dry, factual manner in which you began up until the hilarious ending is brilliant. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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This is a very clever piece of flash fiction. The dry, factual manner in which you began up until the hilarious ending is brilliant. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Many thanks
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, this is my favourite flash fiction, a clever write and you made me smile, a magical post that amused me, well you get my vote here, good luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Ha ha ha, this is my favourite flash fiction, a clever write and you made me smile, a magical post that amused me, well you get my vote here, good luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thanks dolly
Comment from juliaSjames
This is funny. I really didn't see the twist coming. Well written dribble. I suppose one could say that the priest successfully practised what he preached. Good luck in the voting booth, my friend.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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This is funny. I really didn't see the twist coming. Well written dribble. I suppose one could say that the priest successfully practised what he preached. Good luck in the voting booth, my friend.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Many thanks. So glad you liked it.
Comment from Cindy Warren
Haha, I guess that's why there are so many Catholics. Love your little pun, but I think I'd bail too if I had to give a talk on birth control to Catholics.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Haha, I guess that's why there are so many Catholics. Love your little pun, but I think I'd bail too if I had to give a talk on birth control to Catholics.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Many thanks Cindy
Comment from tim dodd
ha ha ha that made me chuckle thank you
I just finished a quiz on pediatric disorders andI needed a
pick me up. You got my vote if there is one.
Thanks again.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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ha ha ha that made me chuckle thank you
I just finished a quiz on pediatric disorders andI needed a
pick me up. You got my vote if there is one.
Thanks again.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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There is. Thanks for the great review and stars.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer!
Good ending! In fact, this flash fiction has potential, but it needs some editing:
The chairs had been arranged in rows
In (in) front of the stage in the church hall
for tonight's lecture by the local priest.
Most of the nearby residents would have attended.
He was to talk on the subject of Catholic birth control, (;)
however (,) he pulled out at the last minute.
Best Wishes!
diane
Editing noted!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Hello Mystery Writer!
Good ending! In fact, this flash fiction has potential, but it needs some editing:
The chairs had been arranged in rows
In (in) front of the stage in the church hall
for tonight's lecture by the local priest.
Most of the nearby residents would have attended.
He was to talk on the subject of Catholic birth control, (;)
however (,) he pulled out at the last minute.
Best Wishes!
diane
Editing noted!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thanks for your help
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Did I help?
That was my intention!
Please let me know!
diane
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Of course. I appreciate it.
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Of course. I appreciate it.
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Of course. I appreciate it.
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Of course. I appreciate it.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL! Funny little play on words there... be sure to pop back in and remove all the unnecessary breaks in your first and last sentences. Thank you for sharing and best of luck at the polls! :)
rows In front --> rows in front
control, however he --> control; however, he
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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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LOL! Funny little play on words there... be sure to pop back in and remove all the unnecessary breaks in your first and last sentences. Thank you for sharing and best of luck at the polls! :)
rows In front --> rows in front
control, however he --> control; however, he
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Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thanks for your help
