A Piece of Work
very free verse8 total reviews
Comment from LovnPeace
Ha Ha Ha. I hope you win this contest. It would be well earned. I wish I was this clear in my inner conversations. Brilliantly done. I love your humor. Blessings, Barbara
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Ha Ha Ha. I hope you win this contest. It would be well earned. I wish I was this clear in my inner conversations. Brilliantly done. I love your humor. Blessings, Barbara
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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why, thank you so much! I guess i'm still anonymous, but I really appreciate your saying that!! so thanks from anonymous! Oh, my goodness, a 6!! I am honored! muchisimas gracias!!!
Comment from Ogden
This is quite a hoot, and my only reservation is, what in the world makes you think clams are happy? Their expressions? Well, I defer to your seemingly manifold areas of experince, and conclude that clams, indeed, must delight in their inactivity. That sort of does make sense. Reservation reversed!
;)
Don
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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This is quite a hoot, and my only reservation is, what in the world makes you think clams are happy? Their expressions? Well, I defer to your seemingly manifold areas of experince, and conclude that clams, indeed, must delight in their inactivity. That sort of does make sense. Reservation reversed!
;)
Don
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Don, as I'm not 'spose to tell you my identity (I guess) I'll just say it was an expression we used in the south. my mother said it all the time. just consider it another of my funky quirks - when you find out who I am.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a well constructed Free Verse spot on for the topic. It's quite the narrative and combines humor with frustration nicely. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a well constructed Free Verse spot on for the topic. It's quite the narrative and combines humor with frustration nicely. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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And thank you for reading it. I wrote it last night, and did go on for a bit. Woke up this morning and thought, well, you surely spilled all.
Thank you for your kindness in your review. Sorry I have no more recs.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This was very interesting
and entertaining to read,
especially with the style you chose.
-You do a good job talking
about, and to, yourself.
-I like how you just let
the ideas flow.
-That is what adds the humor,
especially when you comment
on the you/I/are/am confusion.
-I like the ending, too, it made
me laugh. So through it all,
you also made up a new word.
-Good luck in the contest;
I can't wait to see who you are!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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-This was very interesting
and entertaining to read,
especially with the style you chose.
-You do a good job talking
about, and to, yourself.
-I like how you just let
the ideas flow.
-That is what adds the humor,
especially when you comment
on the you/I/are/am confusion.
-I like the ending, too, it made
me laugh. So through it all,
you also made up a new word.
-Good luck in the contest;
I can't wait to see who you are!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thanks, Pam, for the great review and the 6!!!
I will surely recommend you, if I have any left.
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You are very welcome and deserving. That is very kind of you, but the thought is the most important thing.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Well done with the poem! Eloquoop. I love the word. Whether you forget that eloquent word in t ime of need. Or use it when a simpler one would do (and your listeners label you as pretentious.) I found the prompt difficult, and didn't attempt, but you did it well.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Well done with the poem! Eloquoop. I love the word. Whether you forget that eloquent word in t ime of need. Or use it when a simpler one would do (and your listeners label you as pretentious.) I found the prompt difficult, and didn't attempt, but you did it well.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Darlene. I appreciate your comments. I sort of wandered, I know, but it all just slipped out.
Thanks again!
Comment from Patty Palmer
Absolutely adorable. I loved your rambling on. I wondered how this contest would work and now I see a splendid example of what it might be like. You gave me a great laugh this morning!
Patty
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Absolutely adorable. I loved your rambling on. I wondered how this contest would work and now I see a splendid example of what it might be like. You gave me a great laugh this morning!
Patty
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much. You made my day!
(yeah, I do tend to ramble. awful habit.)
Would love to recommend your review - you made me feel so good - but I don't have any left. sorry.
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You're welcome!!!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
When I first read the opening lines I thought the poem was about me! I talk to myself all the time, tell myself I am good, bad, lazy, indulgent and sometimes I say I am not bad for my age! However I don't have plants to water anymore, I had to get rid of them because they attracted the cats! The mess they made was unbelievable. I liked the sound of your writing group, I would like to join! Your words here are honest and an insight into who you are, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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When I first read the opening lines I thought the poem was about me! I talk to myself all the time, tell myself I am good, bad, lazy, indulgent and sometimes I say I am not bad for my age! However I don't have plants to water anymore, I had to get rid of them because they attracted the cats! The mess they made was unbelievable. I liked the sound of your writing group, I would like to join! Your words here are honest and an insight into who you are, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thanks, Dolly,
I wish you could be in our group, too. Wouldn't that be fun. We have food and talk for a few minutes, then get down to work.
I woke up this morning thinking - wow, you really poured out your feelings. Maybe too much insight, but I do thank you for a lovely review, for which I have no more recs. wish I did.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
The last line made me smile. Definitely a prose poem! I think Classical music is a great way to relate to older people. This is a friendly kind of poem and also full of little details such as what other people are writing. The 'about kill myself' is what over-exercising will feel like, all right. Fun share.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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The last line made me smile. Definitely a prose poem! I think Classical music is a great way to relate to older people. This is a friendly kind of poem and also full of little details such as what other people are writing. The 'about kill myself' is what over-exercising will feel like, all right. Fun share.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thanks so much. I appreciate your reading it and your kind comments.
