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Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "St. Louis Chapter 13 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
16 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your story. I found it interesting and enjoyed reading it. The only suggestion I could make would be to lengthen it. Good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your story. I found it interesting and enjoyed reading it. The only suggestion I could make would be to lengthen it. Good luck.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Barbara I finally found some time to catch up on all my back logged reviews I needed to get to. I was glad to see that this was one story I needed to catch up on. It's good to see McKenzie finally opening up a bit. Can't wait to see what happens next. Good job!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Hello Barbara I finally found some time to catch up on all my back logged reviews I needed to get to. I was glad to see that this was one story I needed to catch up on. It's good to see McKenzie finally opening up a bit. Can't wait to see what happens next. Good job!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Thank you for going back and catching up. I appreciate it. Sorry there's no money still attached.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very well written chapter, my friend. I didn't see any spags or issues with it. Her mom sounds much like my mother--emotionally unavailable. I wish I had a family. I have no contact with any of them anymore which unfortunately is the healthiest thing for me. They are all sick people~Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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A very well written chapter, my friend. I didn't see any spags or issues with it. Her mom sounds much like my mother--emotionally unavailable. I wish I had a family. I have no contact with any of them anymore which unfortunately is the healthiest thing for me. They are all sick people~Debbie
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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We are here for you, along it's long distance. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Beautiful chapter that brings up the emancipation of the women but also the insecurities of being wife material as you are saying in this paragraph:"Learning to repair cars, playing poker, and pool aren't bad things," teased Logan. "I'm sure they're an important skill set for P.I.'s."
"Just not for being a future wife."
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Beautiful chapter that brings up the emancipation of the women but also the insecurities of being wife material as you are saying in this paragraph:"Learning to repair cars, playing poker, and pool aren't bad things," teased Logan. "I'm sure they're an important skill set for P.I.'s."
"Just not for being a future wife."
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thankk you for the kind review.
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
I didn't see any nits, but the font was really small. Is it always this small?
The setting was sweet and I enjoyed this quiet time between them. I think it was due. No problems here. I enjoyed!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Barbara,
I didn't see any nits, but the font was really small. Is it always this small?
The setting was sweet and I enjoyed this quiet time between them. I think it was due. No problems here. I enjoyed!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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It should be the same size font. I always type in 20. My eyes are old. I have no clue what happened. LOL Thank you for the kind reveiw.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Another superb part, Barbara. You brought the strong emotions of poor Mac out perfectly. Fortunately, Logan is a sensitive listener and is proving to be a good friend to her. I'm sure romance will develop but at the moment there is much to sort out with Logan's sister's murder. Not only that, but also who is trying to get at Mac. Something about Mac's grandfather is also simmering in the background. Well done, my friend, this is another brilliant part. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Another superb part, Barbara. You brought the strong emotions of poor Mac out perfectly. Fortunately, Logan is a sensitive listener and is proving to be a good friend to her. I'm sure romance will develop but at the moment there is much to sort out with Logan's sister's murder. Not only that, but also who is trying to get at Mac. Something about Mac's grandfather is also simmering in the background. Well done, my friend, this is another brilliant part. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tootsie55
Still great reading. We pointed out some stuff elsewhere. I always enjoy your writing. You never disappoint. Suggestions already made so keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Still great reading. We pointed out some stuff elsewhere. I always enjoy your writing. You never disappoint. Suggestions already made so keep up the good work.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Mac and Sheila are getting along well. Sheila has some good advice for Mac. Mac feels compelled to apologize to Logan for her behavior, but Logan says she needs to unload. Mac explains that because of her mother's emotional issues, she was pretty much raised by her father, more like a son. Logan asks if her grandfather might be behind the threats, but to me that isn't too likely. Because of his age, he might not be capable of behavior like that. Great chapter. judi
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Mac and Sheila are getting along well. Sheila has some good advice for Mac. Mac feels compelled to apologize to Logan for her behavior, but Logan says she needs to unload. Mac explains that because of her mother's emotional issues, she was pretty much raised by her father, more like a son. Logan asks if her grandfather might be behind the threats, but to me that isn't too likely. Because of his age, he might not be capable of behavior like that. Great chapter. judi
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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I'll give you a secret. Her grandfather is dead. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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So we still don't know who's behind the threats! judi
Comment from tfawcus
Another strong chapter, Barbara. Great emotional tension in the dialogue between Logan and Mac, and well supported with action tags. They really seem to be getting to know each other, though, as your closing lines suggest, Mac still has some raw issues bubbling away below the surface.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Another strong chapter, Barbara. Great emotional tension in the dialogue between Logan and Mac, and well supported with action tags. They really seem to be getting to know each other, though, as your closing lines suggest, Mac still has some raw issues bubbling away below the surface.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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She sure does and it will be awhile before we find out exactly what. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Perhaps Mackenzie is softening as a woman, and is really very much in love with Logan. I like this episode Barbara, she actually leaned into Logan, as I've said before, I also like the moral fibre of the girls, and the respect, galant, but yet manly behaviour of your heroes. An excellent episode Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Perhaps Mackenzie is softening as a woman, and is really very much in love with Logan. I like this episode Barbara, she actually leaned into Logan, as I've said before, I also like the moral fibre of the girls, and the respect, galant, but yet manly behaviour of your heroes. An excellent episode Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : The men were watching (a) cardinal('s) baseb
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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I'll fix that area. Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your comments about the moral fiber. I've taken some hits because I haven't had my couples jump into bed. I don't write that stuff. Thank you.
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I?m pleased you stick to your guns Barbara, hard in a world without integrity.
