Unrequited
Teen love, a mix of excitement and disappointment.13 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Kazzawin!
I so enjoyed and appreciated your Loop poetic offering. Your words, do, indeed, capture the angst of teen "love" - the excitements, the highs, the lows. Also appreciated the addition of dialogue = added to the delivery.
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Hello Kazzawin!
I so enjoyed and appreciated your Loop poetic offering. Your words, do, indeed, capture the angst of teen "love" - the excitements, the highs, the lows. Also appreciated the addition of dialogue = added to the delivery.
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 25-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your very encouraging review. I?m glad you liked the dialogue, I must admit it took a bit of jiggling around to use it but I?m glad I did.
Thank you again, always appreciated: )
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is an excellent and romantic entry into the Loop poetry contest. The end surprised me because I didn't see it coming. The title says it all, but maybe as the song says "he was too young to fall in love and I was too young to know." Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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This is an excellent and romantic entry into the Loop poetry contest. The end surprised me because I didn't see it coming. The title says it all, but maybe as the song says "he was too young to fall in love and I was too young to know." Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review and rating. Always appreciated: )
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I've never written a poem of this style even though I've read a few. I must give it a go as it really does look challenging. You have managed it so well!
Each end and start word fits in so well, you don't really notice that it is a continuous repeat. It's a sad poem, a love that was not returned is always painful, as we see vividly in your words. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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I've never written a poem of this style even though I've read a few. I must give it a go as it really does look challenging. You have managed it so well!
Each end and start word fits in so well, you don't really notice that it is a continuous repeat. It's a sad poem, a love that was not returned is always painful, as we see vividly in your words. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for such a lovely review. Always appreciated: )
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written loop poem about a love that seems not to work out as well as we hope. At the time we feel devastated and betrayed, but years later we realize it should happen the way it did and we can find peace in our hearts.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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A very well-written loop poem about a love that seems not to work out as well as we hope. At the time we feel devastated and betrayed, but years later we realize it should happen the way it did and we can find peace in our hearts.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and the rating. Always appreciated : )
Comment from Aiona
"Cheek of it!" LOL! I will say that when my husband kisses me tonight. What a fun poem. Heartbreaking, but fun. You did indeed follow the Loop Poem format, and in a funny and skillful way!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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"Cheek of it!" LOL! I will say that when my husband kisses me tonight. What a fun poem. Heartbreaking, but fun. You did indeed follow the Loop Poem format, and in a funny and skillful way!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Wow! Thank you so much for the lovely review and six stars. So very much appreciated: )
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is such a well written loop that flowed like a dream and this is so hard to achieve, I must say this is the best poem I have read for the contest! I know there are a lot of entries and I wish you luck with this one, it is a winner for me, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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This is such a well written loop that flowed like a dream and this is so hard to achieve, I must say this is the best poem I have read for the contest! I know there are a lot of entries and I wish you luck with this one, it is a winner for me, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Oh wow. Thank you so much, from you it?s a real honour. Your kind and encouraging words are so much appreciated: )
Comment from Gail Denham
Good job in this form. And it did hold the interest of "how will this turn out" - certainly teen love doesn't always become long -term, atho the stories of when it does are interesting such as: "we started dating when we were 16 - and now married 70 years. "
Nice poem
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Good job in this form. And it did hold the interest of "how will this turn out" - certainly teen love doesn't always become long -term, atho the stories of when it does are interesting such as: "we started dating when we were 16 - and now married 70 years. "
Nice poem
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Congrats on your life long love...seldom achieved these days. Thank you for reading and reviewing. Much appreciated: )
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Well, I was quoting some other folks about the 70 years. We've only got 60 years under out belt. but I do respect the years folks put up with each other.
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I think 60 years is pretty much a lifetime : )
Comment from jenintorre
I love this loop poem. It is so clever as it tells a complete story in the loop style. It is the best one I have read and I think it should do well in the competition. Good luck. Jen.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I love this loop poem. It is so clever as it tells a complete story in the loop style. It is the best one I have read and I think it should do well in the competition. Good luck. Jen.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review. It is much appreciated: )
Comment from N. Rabwar
This is an excellent rendition of loop poetry. The repetition seems to underline the poignancy and urgency of young love that is ephemeral and disappointing. This is one of the first loop poem I have read in which the loop adds to rather than detracts from the poem.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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This is an excellent rendition of loop poetry. The repetition seems to underline the poignancy and urgency of young love that is ephemeral and disappointing. This is one of the first loop poem I have read in which the loop adds to rather than detracts from the poem.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Thank you so very much for such a lovely review. It is truly appreciated: )
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Mostly just a bit of learning to whether life's storms... but oh, it really hurt back then!! ;) :) A lovely loop offering for the contest filled with emotions of the heart... no matter the age! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Mostly just a bit of learning to whether life's storms... but oh, it really hurt back then!! ;) :) A lovely loop offering for the contest filled with emotions of the heart... no matter the age! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Thank you so very much for such a lovely review. It is truly appreciated: )
