Fortune Queen
Her cards will never be turned up anymore15 total reviews
Comment from RodG
I like your Dribble because SO MUCH HAPPENS in such a small space. We immediately wonder why the killer wants the gypsy fortune teller dead and what will happen to him? Will he somehow be caught? Rod
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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I like your Dribble because SO MUCH HAPPENS in such a small space. We immediately wonder why the killer wants the gypsy fortune teller dead and what will happen to him? Will he somehow be caught? Rod
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Susan Morritt
Great little story packed with imagery! I especially liked the line, "A rat scurried behind a dumpster." You have created a tale by successfully building tension, to progress to a resolution, within a very small word limit. Wonderful job.
Susan
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Great little story packed with imagery! I especially liked the line, "A rat scurried behind a dumpster." You have created a tale by successfully building tension, to progress to a resolution, within a very small word limit. Wonderful job.
Susan
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate your insights, the review, and the sixer! :)
Comment from Gail Denham
Wow - what a picture - Quick and to the point. Great for a flash fiction story - and it leaves the reader to imagine what went on before that caused someone do step in and do this deed.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Wow - what a picture - Quick and to the point. Great for a flash fiction story - and it leaves the reader to imagine what went on before that caused someone do step in and do this deed.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Susan X Smith
I am thinking that The Fortune Queen must have been murdered if she ended up in the afterlife, but I am not completely sure. The story is entertaining and well done, given the length limits of this particular challenge. I also liked the picture very much.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I am thinking that The Fortune Queen must have been murdered if she ended up in the afterlife, but I am not completely sure. The story is entertaining and well done, given the length limits of this particular challenge. I also liked the picture very much.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett. So the furtuneteller was not able to read her own cards and that to her great cost. Great little story and good luck in the contest. All the best
Ulla:))
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Hi Brett. So the furtuneteller was not able to read her own cards and that to her great cost. Great little story and good luck in the contest. All the best
Ulla:))
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written dribble flash fiction. The fortune queen sees all others future inner crystal ball but it failed her on her own fortune, she never saw her murderer coming.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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A very well-written dribble flash fiction. The fortune queen sees all others future inner crystal ball but it failed her on her own fortune, she never saw her murderer coming.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Sallyo
Staggering into the afterlife is such a wonderful image. The difficulty with these shorties is to make an impact. Using unusual but not absurdly contrived wording enhances the chances of more than casual glances. Great work.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Staggering into the afterlife is such a wonderful image. The difficulty with these shorties is to make an impact. Using unusual but not absurdly contrived wording enhances the chances of more than casual glances. Great work.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from lyenochka
I'm not sure what happened other than the fortune teller being killed. What is the significance of the rat which scurried away? And the boots belonged to the killer?
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I'm not sure what happened other than the fortune teller being killed. What is the significance of the rat which scurried away? And the boots belonged to the killer?
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
May be Fortune Queen's cards will never be turned up anymore, for she believed in her afterlife, or maybe she never liked to live in the state; well said.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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May be Fortune Queen's cards will never be turned up anymore, for she believed in her afterlife, or maybe she never liked to live in the state; well said.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Comment from BeasPeas
An enjoyable and fun poem, Brett. We find out who is more powerful, the fortune queen or the dark witch (two boots shuffled away) who seemed to have stronger magic in this mortal combat. Marilyn
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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An enjoyable and fun poem, Brett. We find out who is more powerful, the fortune queen or the dark witch (two boots shuffled away) who seemed to have stronger magic in this mortal combat. Marilyn
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate the review.
