Celebrate Life
Love everyday as if is your very your last..31 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This naani, Celebrate Life, has the allowable configuration with twenty-three syllables and reminds us that tomorrow is promised to no one. Live like its 1999.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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This naani, Celebrate Life, has the allowable configuration with twenty-three syllables and reminds us that tomorrow is promised to no one. Live like its 1999.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Roger that
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi JLR,
We can never know when our last day is at hand. But we waste a lot of moments, don't we? I know that I should be reading a story to my granddaughter instead of watching something on the TV. But many times, I'm just too tired for anything else. I sleep so poorly, it's my only excuse.
I enjoyed your Naani poem, counted 23 syllables, too, in 4 lines. But your 3rd line confused me a bit. I think commas might have helped.
"Celebrate life fully
'cause you'll never know,
if your end came today,
what's missed along the way."
However, commas wouldn't be needed at all if you just switched your 3rd and 4th lines. See what you think...
"Celebrate life fully
'cause you'll never know
what's missed along the way
if your end came today."
Just an idea to think over.
Bottom line, I think people would enjoy life more if they'd just relish the moment. Their blood pressure would go down too, I'll bet. I hear so many retirees today saying that they don't have any spare time anymore. Imagine! No time! And they are retired! Your poem tells us, not to do more, but to enjoy the moments!
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Hi JLR,
We can never know when our last day is at hand. But we waste a lot of moments, don't we? I know that I should be reading a story to my granddaughter instead of watching something on the TV. But many times, I'm just too tired for anything else. I sleep so poorly, it's my only excuse.
I enjoyed your Naani poem, counted 23 syllables, too, in 4 lines. But your 3rd line confused me a bit. I think commas might have helped.
"Celebrate life fully
'cause you'll never know,
if your end came today,
what's missed along the way."
However, commas wouldn't be needed at all if you just switched your 3rd and 4th lines. See what you think...
"Celebrate life fully
'cause you'll never know
what's missed along the way
if your end came today."
Just an idea to think over.
Bottom line, I think people would enjoy life more if they'd just relish the moment. Their blood pressure would go down too, I'll bet. I hear so many retirees today saying that they don't have any spare time anymore. Imagine! No time! And they are retired! Your poem tells us, not to do more, but to enjoy the moments!
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you Kimbob, commas and s little twist added some spice. Thanks..
Comment from moongirlwriter
This is a very nice Nanni poem. . .except I had trouble understanding it completely. Then I switched the last two lines and it made perfect sense.
Try it and see what you think. Maybe: what you missed along the way
If your end came today.
I do like it better that way. . .could just be me. It is your poem. :)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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This is a very nice Nanni poem. . .except I had trouble understanding it completely. Then I switched the last two lines and it made perfect sense.
Try it and see what you think. Maybe: what you missed along the way
If your end came today.
I do like it better that way. . .could just be me. It is your poem. :)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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So you want to be my editor when publish..... I think you are spot on. Thanks for sure!
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Ha ha ha ha :)
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Lovely, lovely, lovely. Take time to enjoy the small things every day. You never know when it's last time to enjoy it. I re cently got to go to a baseball game again. Such fun! Something like that.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Lovely, lovely, lovely. Take time to enjoy the small things every day. You never know when it's last time to enjoy it. I re cently got to go to a baseball game again. Such fun! Something like that.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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I am delighted that you got to enjoy one of America favorite past-times, thanks for stopping in to read my work.
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You're welcome
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and well written Naani poem you have penned for the prompt. You had a very good message in this poem that is very true. We do not know how long our time on this earth is. Only God knows! Thanks for sharing~ love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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This is a very nice and well written Naani poem you have penned for the prompt. You had a very good message in this poem that is very true. We do not know how long our time on this earth is. Only God knows! Thanks for sharing~ love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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My sincere thanks Teri, have a glorious fun weekend!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, JLR. I enjoyed reading it. Your lines read well with a great message. So many people try to outdo others that they miss the simple things worth celebrating about life. Good job with the prompt. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Admiration. Jan
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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You did a great job with your contest entry, JLR. I enjoyed reading it. Your lines read well with a great message. So many people try to outdo others that they miss the simple things worth celebrating about life. Good job with the prompt. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Admiration. Jan
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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My sincere thanks for your kind review and comments.
Comment from lyenochka
Your naani poem expresses wise advice. We never know when our life will end and so we need to cherish life and live well each day so as not to miss out or have others miss you.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Your naani poem expresses wise advice. We never know when our life will end and so we need to cherish life and live well each day so as not to miss out or have others miss you.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your review and kind comments.
Comment from June Sargent
This is so true. We need to live life to the fullest in order to make each precious moment count. With no regrets. Well said. Thanks for these words of wisdom.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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This is so true. We need to live life to the fullest in order to make each precious moment count. With no regrets. Well said. Thanks for these words of wisdom.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Hitcher
You said it friend and I try to do just that.... because I don't want to go out of this world when it is my time having wished I had done/tried something I never got round to : )) A great little nanni for the contest, good luck!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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You said it friend and I try to do just that.... because I don't want to go out of this world when it is my time having wished I had done/tried something I never got round to : )) A great little nanni for the contest, good luck!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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thank you, I enjoyed this style
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I love the powerful message conveyed in this. We never know when our time is up. We should embrace the journey all out as you've so eloquently stated. I think that we should also make a impact that leaves something positive behind to be remembered by. I enjoyed the inspirational and thought provoking message of this. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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I love the powerful message conveyed in this. We never know when our time is up. We should embrace the journey all out as you've so eloquently stated. I think that we should also make a impact that leaves something positive behind to be remembered by. I enjoyed the inspirational and thought provoking message of this. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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thank you Jeffrey, enjoy an awesome weekend coming up.
