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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww, that was so cute! I'm glad the team mates and parents didn't moan, she scored! And that's what counts. Lol. That was priceless, Bill. This is another one that should have won! Well done. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Aww, that was so cute! I'm glad the team mates and parents didn't moan, she scored! And that's what counts. Lol. That was priceless, Bill. This is another one that should have won! Well done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Inspired by my own children's soccer playing at three, and my grandkid's.
Comment from judiverse
Clever idea for the flash fiction, and best of luck in the contest. I'll take your word that is 80 words. What a cute story! Emily is such a cutie, and at age four she's entitled to her mistakes. Unfortunately, if her family is like mine, she'll keep hearing about her mistake, like forever. judi
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Clever idea for the flash fiction, and best of luck in the contest. I'll take your word that is 80 words. What a cute story! Emily is such a cutie, and at age four she's entitled to her mistakes. Unfortunately, if her family is like mine, she'll keep hearing about her mistake, like forever. judi
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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I now what you mean; rob one liquor store.
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, sometimes we score a home goal and these kids probably didn't even notice, such is their innocent outlook on life, if only we could retain such innocence in ourselves as we get older, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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He he he, sometimes we score a home goal and these kids probably didn't even notice, such is their innocent outlook on life, if only we could retain such innocence in ourselves as we get older, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Thanks, Dolly. Yes, they are simply happy to be playing and having their parents cheering.
Comment from marion
Love the simplicity of this short, short story! Oh, and this last three end words. Classic! Very well done. My only critique: can't quite picture a ball 'buzzing' into the net! Good luck in the competition. Marion.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Love the simplicity of this short, short story! Oh, and this last three end words. Classic! Very well done. My only critique: can't quite picture a ball 'buzzing' into the net! Good luck in the competition. Marion.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Perhaps it rocketed into the net, but I tried to avoid hyperbole. :)
Comment from BeasPeas
What an adorable image of little kids. I know nothing about sports, Bill, but I'm guessing the little one kicked the goal into the oppositions net? That seems to be the gist of it. Marilyn
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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What an adorable image of little kids. I know nothing about sports, Bill, but I'm guessing the little one kicked the goal into the oppositions net? That seems to be the gist of it. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Yes. At four though, they?re happy to achieve that.
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I agree. Such a cute age. Who cares where the ball goes, everyone is tickled they're in there playing.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, at that age, who cares? Certainly not the soccer players. They were just having fun. Hopefully the parents didn't go ballistic like some that I have read about. You did a good job with the contest prompt, Bill. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully with Admiration. Jan
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Well, at that age, who cares? Certainly not the soccer players. They were just having fun. Hopefully the parents didn't go ballistic like some that I have read about. You did a good job with the contest prompt, Bill. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully with Admiration. Jan
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Jan
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hey Bill. That's a good story. It is a surprise but I liked the way both teams celebrated the scoring of the two goals. Good luck in the contest. Robert
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Hey Bill. That's a good story. It is a surprise but I liked the way both teams celebrated the scoring of the two goals. Good luck in the contest. Robert
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Thanks, Robert. These kids enjoy hearing parents cheer. Kids ar3in it for the fun.
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Bill. When my son was 8 and played I called it beehive soccer.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Bill. Oh my! Emily isn't going to make friends with her own team but good for you on the writing. This is well thought out. Simple but, with flair and a true story line and plot ... Good luck in your contest. This is a wonderful entry. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Hi Bill. Oh my! Emily isn't going to make friends with her own team but good for you on the writing. This is well thought out. Simple but, with flair and a true story line and plot ... Good luck in your contest. This is a wonderful entry. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Thanks, Kiwi
Comment from JudyE
Don't you just love watching little kids playing team games? I really enjoyed reading this and it is a great entry for the 80-word flash fiction contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Don't you just love watching little kids playing team games? I really enjoyed reading this and it is a great entry for the 80-word flash fiction contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Judy
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. That's cute and it actually happens! Your story has pre-schoolers. It happened with my daughter's grade school basketball players where a gal got disoriented, I guess, and scored for the wrong team. Her team was not happy.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Lol. That's cute and it actually happens! Your story has pre-schoolers. It happened with my daughter's grade school basketball players where a gal got disoriented, I guess, and scored for the wrong team. Her team was not happy.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Thanks, lyenochka. Yes, this happened to Emily last week. At that level they really don?t worry about scoring as much as interest and learning the sport.
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Oh, so your story was true! In my daughter's case, the coach was too caught up on winning and turned my daughter off of team sports.
