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Short One Line Poem15 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
This is a very funny entry that sure brought a chuckle out of me. It is very clever. I'm a sucker for this kind of humor...pieces that involve strong intellect and humor that is a bit weird (on the good side). LOL
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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This is a very funny entry that sure brought a chuckle out of me. It is very clever. I'm a sucker for this kind of humor...pieces that involve strong intellect and humor that is a bit weird (on the good side). LOL
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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I appreciate your thoughtful review. Thank you :-) ~DD
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You're truly welcome!!
Comment from David R. Davis
OK, so that was fun. There is a talent needed to write short and to use a play on words. Sometime it sounds contrived or trite, but yours is fun and funny. Very well done. Take care and go well.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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OK, so that was fun. There is a talent needed to write short and to use a play on words. Sometime it sounds contrived or trite, but yours is fun and funny. Very well done. Take care and go well.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank you David. I appreciate your thoughtful review. ~DD
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made good use of all of your words in this ultra-concise, amusing one-liner. You can find hundreds of humorous epitaphs online--
some for real people. I read these, laugh, shame myself, then read some more.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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You have made good use of all of your words in this ultra-concise, amusing one-liner. You can find hundreds of humorous epitaphs online--
some for real people. I read these, laugh, shame myself, then read some more.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Janice, thank you for your welcomed and amusing review. It is much appreciated. :-) ~DD
Comment from DonandVicki
It took me a few reads through but I think I got it... The Undertaker died putting the deceased into coffins? Clever and a bit cheesy but clever nonetheless. Don and Vicki.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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It took me a few reads through but I think I got it... The Undertaker died putting the deceased into coffins? Clever and a bit cheesy but clever nonetheless. Don and Vicki.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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No...not really - the undertaker died coughing. It just is a play on words with coffin.
Thank you for giving my silly piece some thought. ~DD
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the cause of the undertaker's death is couging, because he was making coffins for the dead, and now he is six-feet under himself now due to coughing.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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A very well-written poem about the cause of the undertaker's death is couging, because he was making coffins for the dead, and now he is six-feet under himself now due to coughing.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you Sandra for seeing this little piece for what it is. A bit of fun. :-) ~DD
Comment from Sugarray77
Hi DD. I like your short and humorous verse that you shared for the One line poem, but I would add a suggestion. If you spelled the word... coffin.. instead of coughing, I think it would be easier to pick up the joke. This is a fun one.
Melissa
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Hi DD. I like your short and humorous verse that you shared for the One line poem, but I would add a suggestion. If you spelled the word... coffin.. instead of coughing, I think it would be easier to pick up the joke. This is a fun one.
Melissa
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your review and four stars.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is humorous! I was wondering if you considered taking the 'g' off the end of 'coughing' and just say, "He died coughin' " or 'He passed in a fit of coughin' " and if not, that is okay too! I wonder if undertakers get bodies ready and think, "All dressed up and only one place to go." Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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This is humorous! I was wondering if you considered taking the 'g' off the end of 'coughing' and just say, "He died coughin' " or 'He passed in a fit of coughin' " and if not, that is okay too! I wonder if undertakers get bodies ready and think, "All dressed up and only one place to go." Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you Crystie for your review and suggestion. I shall give it a go and see if it works better. I hope my little silly piece brought on a smile. ~DD
Comment from Sally Law
Well, you gotta die of something! I think this is hilarious and a wonderful entry for the one line poetry contest, DD.
I'm glad for some humor today, too. It's a great way to lift the spirits. (Pun intended) ;+)
Sending you my best today as always and my best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Well, you gotta die of something! I think this is hilarious and a wonderful entry for the one line poetry contest, DD.
I'm glad for some humor today, too. It's a great way to lift the spirits. (Pun intended) ;+)
Sending you my best today as always and my best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal xo
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you Sal. Always good to hear from you. Enjoy the coming weekend :-) ~DDxx
Comment from Pantygynt
Oh, very drole! I seem to remember though, that it isn't the cough that carries you off, but the coffin they carry you off in. But yours was at least original, unlike mine.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Oh, very drole! I seem to remember though, that it isn't the cough that carries you off, but the coffin they carry you off in. But yours was at least original, unlike mine.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Another reviewer just said the same thing. Great minds think alike! Thank you for your kind review. ~DD
Comment from Heather Knight
You say it's a silly entry, but I have enjoyed it.
There isn't much more one can do with just one line.
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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You say it's a silly entry, but I have enjoyed it.
There isn't much more one can do with just one line.
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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MJG, thank you for your supportive review on my very short read. ~DD
