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Broken Trust

a 1-7-5 poem contest entry

16 total reviews 
Comment from Thomas Bowling
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Congratulations on your win. This is excellent. You deserved to win. You managed to compress a complete life lesson into just a few syllables. A tremendous feat.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Thank you so much. Thomas I appreciate you taking the time to send me a review.
Comment from Aiona
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What a nice poem. Sad, but nice. It is a truism that I can relate to. Also, it does follow the 1-5-7 format. Well done! I can see why it won the 1-5-7 contest!

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Aiona, thank you for the excellent rating and your review, I appreciate your feedback.
Comment from dragonpoet
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Such a true definition that says a lot. But some people let trust be broken many times before they leave a relatonship. And sometimes trust can be won back.
Well chosen artwork
Congrats on the win.
Keep writing
dragonpoet

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    dragonpoet, thanks for taking the time to review my piece, I appreciate your feed back and the excellent stars.
reply by dragonpoet on 07-Oct-2019
    My pleaure.
    dp
reply by Anonymous Member on 07-Oct-2019
    My pleaure.
    dp
Comment from karenina
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Intriguing and thought provoking poem. I don't say that often in this 1-7-5 "mini-form" as it's just so hard to create enough "vroom" for maximum impact. Few of us have evaded the disillusionment that comes with broken trust--which makes this an awesome first place poem! Congrats!--Karenina

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Karenina thank you so much for the great review and taking the time to leave a thoughtful reply. It is verymuch appreciated.
reply by karenina on 07-Oct-2019
    You are so welcome!--Karenina
Comment from Contests

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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    This is so awesome Thank you so much.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this thought-provoking piece about the power of trust. As you say, if trust is not
mutual, it is a broken thing.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
    Janice thanks for taking the time to read and review my entry. I appreciate the excellent rating. Thanks for the kind words. Have a great day.
Comment from country ranch writer
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A person is only as good as one's word. Once that trust is broken it is hard to regain ones trust in you. Their belief in you has been shattered in more ways than one.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
    Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. I appreciate the excellent rating. Have a good night.
Comment from Bill Pinder
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Excellent job expressing a good message with strong sentiment in a very few words in a creative way. Thanks for sharing this! I trust you will have a good day.
Bill

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
    Bill thanks for the 6 stars and the kind review. I truly appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sally Law
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So true, dear Poppa. Just like shattered glass, it takes time to repair, too. A fine short poem and entry for the upcoming contest.
Sending you my best today and best wishes for the contest,
Sally :+)

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
    Sally I appreciate you taking your time read and review my work. Thank you for the excellent rating. Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Your broken glass image is a perfect complement to your 1-5-7 contest entry.

Not a super fan of initial caps for these small verses. Consider centering the lines and increasing the type size in the advanced editor mode. IMHO it will increase your FS viewership.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
    Mark, thanks for taking the time to read my work as well as offering some advice. I have made some adjustments. Good day.
reply by Mark D. R. on 10-Sep-2019
    Big Poppa,

    Good change. Now consider bolding your text and changing your text color to a brighter hue. IMHO the contrast will likely improve with one or both changes.

    Mark