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The Fae Nation

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Comment from tfawcus
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I'm looking forward to reading more of this. Your sense of humour coincides with mine. I haven't enjoyed anything on FanStory as much for quite a while.
There aren't any decent pubs here in Australia, but there are a few parallels between the Aboriginal Dreamtime and the Celtic fae.
Slange va.

 Comment Written 10-May-2021


reply by the author on 10-May-2021
    You're very kind, thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from janalma
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I've read this twice and still don't know who I'm reading about. I'm not from the UK so don't truly understand where you're coming from. I think this is a parody of present day society and you are probably right-on, but I don't know. Enjoyed the story just as it is but may completely disagree with the underlying theme here. Who knows? Anyway, well written.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
    Thank you for your perseverance. I'm sorry if it didn't float your boat, but yes, it's set in London, because I don't think I could succesfully pull off a story set in Queens :). But thank you so much for your review
reply by janalma on 08-Sep-2019
    We ARE in the same boat. You don't know here and I don't know there. Haha. Got a kick out of your reply.
Comment from fluffnstuff
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I am nt sure what country you live in but I didn't understand what a fae is. Also you spell generalize in a different way. Totally understandable. Hope you understand where I am coming from not quite understanding? Fluff

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
    I live in the UK, where -ize and -ise are equally acceptable. Fae means not of this world, like fairies, elves etc. Hopefully this becomes clearer as the book developes. Thanks for your review
Comment from Darlene Franklin
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I don't understand all the slan g well enough to get a complete picture, but I like the picture of it's clear we have a troll and perhaps some lephrehcauns, me thinks? That there are no humans involved here at all. (except perhaps for Bob?)

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
    Thanks. For this opening chapter you're spot on. The slang, I'm afraid, is English slang, but then, the story is set in London. Thanks for your review
reply by Darlene Franklin on 08-Sep-2019
    Slang can be tricky. I recently received a copy of a children's story I had written in exaggerated Maine slang. My 9 year old g randson, who is an excellent reader, struggled with reading it. Because there was little context to put it together, I figure. And it wasn't about his favorite subject, trains and cars, lol. It was a puzzle story about Jesus calming the sea and asking the child to identify which Bible story I was telling with the slang. He actually came really close.
reply by Darlene Franklin on 08-Sep-2019
    Slang can be tricky. I recently received a copy of a children's story I had written in exaggerated Maine slang. My 9 year old g randson, who is an excellent reader, struggled with reading it. Because there was little context to put it together, I figure. And it wasn't about his favorite subject, trains and cars, lol. It was a puzzle story about Jesus calming the sea and asking the child to identify which Bible story I was telling with the slang. He actually came really close.
Comment from royowen
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I was once a frequenter of pubs, and probably was an alcoholic, and these conversations were par for the course, when I was sober they sounded ridiculous, however when I was drunk they were amazing, heh, heh. You've captured there essence very well indeed, beautifully written my friend, well done, very entertaining, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
    You're very kind thank you
reply by royowen on 05-Sep-2019
    Good job
Comment from kleck140
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Your writing has the dialogue I need to learn
plus how to deliver it in such a readable fashion.
Keep on writing you are very good at dialogue.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
    Thank you, you're very kind. Now, if I could just master narrative... LOL
reply by kleck140 on 05-Sep-2019
    You certainly are welcome.
Comment from Sugarray77
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Hello. I am just now starting to read this book and think you are doing a wonderful job with the dialogue... I would mention that in the subtitle, the word semi was misspelled. You did a good job creating tension and .. sides.. I look forward to reading more.

Melissa

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
    Oops, thanks for the typo. I've corrected it. And thank you for the review.
Comment from Sarkems
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Interesting. What I love about this is the way you unfold the world. You explain absolutely nothing, and reveal everything. I asked questions as I read, and you answered them as I read further - 'Fae? What are...Oh, I get it' It's not obviously a beginning, and I like that. You've pitched me straight in the middle of something, caught me up with past events and offered future possibilities in one conversation in a pub. That takes skill.

It's relatable, too. The 'Fae' could be any indigenous people, the laws for some but not for others is a common cry. It is my firm belief that all good fantasy is rooted in the reality of the here and now, but takes us far enough away from it to see our own here and now with fresh eyes.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
    You're very kind, thank you. Yes beginnings are difficult, because there will always be a backstory. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Mistydawn
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What an interesting conversation. Very realistic. I could feel the tension rise as Peter tried to make a point. Some parts of the conversation I thought words were going to lead to a fight. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
    You're very kind, thank you. Being interesting is all a writer can hope for
Comment from estory
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I walked in the middle of this, but the dialogue was lively and I think you created some good personalities for the speakers, we feel the tension between them, and we get their own idiosynchroses. It is a good tale on the current state of society in general, what with how divided people are today. Everyone is in his/her own camp. estory

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
    Thanks. As this is chapter one I'm not sure this is the middle of the story, but then, the start of everybody's story is the middle of someone else's. Thanks for the review and I'm glad you liked it