Preserving Problems
Educational 5-7-518 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This short verse is a clever play on words.
I think the message is clear and a good one, something we should all remember.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
This short verse is a clever play on words.
I think the message is clear and a good one, something we should all remember.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Thanks very much for your review, Sharon. (the poem came 2nd in the contest)
Comment from DonandVicki
I like the thought that this produces. We bottle things up inside just like canning problems. Unfortunately our cupboards become overfull and a lot of those peaches become spoiled.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
I like the thought that this produces. We bottle things up inside just like canning problems. Unfortunately our cupboards become overfull and a lot of those peaches become spoiled.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Oh dear... those peaches should've been eaten, got rid of, or shared earlier!
Thanks for your review.
Comment from JudyE
This is excellent advice and I loved the words you've chosen to connect bottling fruit (it's bottling in Australia, not canning) with some sage advice.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
This is excellent advice and I loved the words you've chosen to connect bottling fruit (it's bottling in Australia, not canning) with some sage advice.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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As an Aussie (wink), that's why I used bottling. Can we bottle sage?
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I'm glad you didn't have a go at me for being patronising. haha
In thyme, maybe we'll be able to bottle sage. Wouldn't that be mint?
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I'll ask Basil. Do you cumin here often?
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We had a sheep called Baasil. Someone else named it before they found out it was a girl. Can ewe believe that?
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Who pulled the wool over who's eyes??
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They were trying to fleece me! Our sheep had some weird names - Monty, Joel, Buster, Petal, Hercules. Petal was the only one we named.
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I remember reading about Hercules and seeing his photo. The spring lambs are in the fields around here now - too cute!!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I really like this. I love the very clever and beautiful way that you've used your colorful words with some very well thought out accompanying artwork. The message conveyed in this is clear, true, and strong. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
I really like this. I love the very clever and beautiful way that you've used your colorful words with some very well thought out accompanying artwork. The message conveyed in this is clear, true, and strong. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your wonderfully supportive comments!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about preserving items that can go wrong when we do not know all the details and rules to follow for preserving especially food that can go bad and make people sick.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about preserving items that can go wrong when we do not know all the details and rules to follow for preserving especially food that can go bad and make people sick.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Sandra!
Bottling problems up is probably a bit like food poisoning.
Comment from Lobber
I agree with you...my mother did canning- a strange word for thinks going into jars - her jams were topped with paraffin instead of rings. I used to swipe pieces of it to wax window screens on Garbage Night - the day before Halloween- Lobber
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
I agree with you...my mother did canning- a strange word for thinks going into jars - her jams were topped with paraffin instead of rings. I used to swipe pieces of it to wax window screens on Garbage Night - the day before Halloween- Lobber
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Yeah... I never understood why it was called 'canning' when it was in jars. My mum did it with paraffin too.
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have really made excellent use of all of your syllables in this GREAT
educational 5-7-5. You have cleverly made a play on words in each line--all while conveying a wise message!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
You have really made excellent use of all of your syllables in this GREAT
educational 5-7-5. You have cleverly made a play on words in each line--all while conveying a wise message!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your excellent review, Janice.
Comment from karenina
So, you've seen me trying to make strawberry preserves then? (LOL)---
I don't have that "preserving" gene some do...either it doesn't thicken or I end up growing what, in a few months will be homemade penicillin! Cute entry. Good luck!--Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
So, you've seen me trying to make strawberry preserves then? (LOL)---
I don't have that "preserving" gene some do...either it doesn't thicken or I end up growing what, in a few months will be homemade penicillin! Cute entry. Good luck!--Karenina
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
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Haha... but I think I'll pass on the penicillin thanks!
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Janetsue
This is a stellar posting for the Educational 5-7-5 writing prompt. It is very creative--and it is easy to understand the nuances of the double-meanings. Sincere best wishes in the contest with this outstanding poem.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
This is a stellar posting for the Educational 5-7-5 writing prompt. It is very creative--and it is easy to understand the nuances of the double-meanings. Sincere best wishes in the contest with this outstanding poem.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your wonderful comments - much appreciated.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Diana L Crawford
This is a very cleverly written poem! I really like how you used the concept of preserving in a jar and related it to internal turmoil!
This is an excellent entry for your contest!! Good luck to you!! xoxo
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
This is a very cleverly written poem! I really like how you used the concept of preserving in a jar and related it to internal turmoil!
This is an excellent entry for your contest!! Good luck to you!! xoxo
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
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Thanks Diana. The poem had its origins because a close friend appears to have been bottling up some resentments and is now overreacting (as far as I can see) and this is causing her upset. She should have addressed any issues earlier, I feel, so she is not so 'jarred' by the situation.
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It?s amazing what things tend to inspire our poetry! It was brilliant to put that into words! xoxo